Romobamoo
a 25-syllable poem7 total reviews
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is fun and mysterious and takes us right into the pages of a story book. I've actually never heard of a sea servant before (only a sea serpent). The presentation is really beautiful and dream-like. Well done and good luck! A great contender! Debbie
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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This is fun and mysterious and takes us right into the pages of a story book. I've actually never heard of a sea servant before (only a sea serpent). The presentation is really beautiful and dream-like. Well done and good luck! A great contender! Debbie
Comment Written 10-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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Yes, it's servant. : ) Thanks for taking a look.
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I know I checked. This was my favourite.
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An excellent entry for the 25 syllable Poetry Contest. What a magical imaginative poem. Offer me a stay at that castle and I will pack my bag immediately! I would love the idea of turning this into a children's story! nicely written.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2024
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An excellent entry for the 25 syllable Poetry Contest. What a magical imaginative poem. Offer me a stay at that castle and I will pack my bag immediately! I would love the idea of turning this into a children's story! nicely written.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2024
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Thanks, Marilyn
Comment from Shirley Ann Bunyan
Alice in Wonderland goes Alice in Oceanland! Where will the floating castles take us and what adventures to be had. Great imagery.
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Just a thought, but is servant supposed to be serpent? Please ignore if I'm completely out of touch!
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2024
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Alice in Wonderland goes Alice in Oceanland! Where will the floating castles take us and what adventures to be had. Great imagery.
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Just a thought, but is servant supposed to be serpent? Please ignore if I'm completely out of touch!
Comment Written 09-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2024
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I meant servant, as the creature is a whale of some kind. You are the second reviewer to ask that question though, so it is a valid point. Thank you for helping me, Shirley.
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No problem. It's a great poem either way :)
Comment from LJbutterfly
Your twenty-five syllable poem provides stunning imagination, enabling the reader to envision an enchanted castle at sea. Your chosen artwork pairs perfectly with your words and intensifies your poem's message. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2024
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Your twenty-five syllable poem provides stunning imagination, enabling the reader to envision an enchanted castle at sea. Your chosen artwork pairs perfectly with your words and intensifies your poem's message. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2024
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Thank you, LJ
Comment from Nicole Schmidt
This is a very nice poem overall. The graphic is a very nice fit as well. The presentation is great and i wish you all the best going forward wit your work.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2024
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This is a very nice poem overall. The graphic is a very nice fit as well. The presentation is great and i wish you all the best going forward wit your work.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2024
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Thank you, Nicole
Comment from zaraduck6
A wonderful poem! Three lines of poetry condensing 25 syllables beautifully! I love the word choice--the words flow nicely. And the imagery is breathtaking. Well done! Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2024
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A wonderful poem! Three lines of poetry condensing 25 syllables beautifully! I love the word choice--the words flow nicely. And the imagery is breathtaking. Well done! Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 09-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2024
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Thank you, Z
Comment from Pamusart
Hi
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!
Why is the title ROMOBAMOO? Does that mean something
It is very difficult to convey emotion, or almost anything in such a short poem
Yours is better than most, and I got the impression of a peaceful feeling And a feeling of fantasy. At first, I read it as the serpent rather than the servant
I'm thinking that gifts of the sea are what you are writing about. You did very well in describing what some of them are and leaving your readers to think of more
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2024
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Hi
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!
Why is the title ROMOBAMOO? Does that mean something
It is very difficult to convey emotion, or almost anything in such a short poem
Yours is better than most, and I got the impression of a peaceful feeling And a feeling of fantasy. At first, I read it as the serpent rather than the servant
I'm thinking that gifts of the sea are what you are writing about. You did very well in describing what some of them are and leaving your readers to think of more
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2024
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Thank you, Pam