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Two very real women in not so real situation.

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Comment from Michele Harber
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Once you said Rachelle lost a hat and was still laughing, your story lost any sense of believability! (Just kidding, but I know Rachelle takes her hats very seriously!)

In fact, your characters are charming and believable, and the sweetness of the characters just adds to the humor of your panicking at the man with the scythe, and expecting to be the first victim when they turn your story into a horror movie.

I'm enjoying your and Rachelle's stories, and will continue reading them as they're posted.

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
    Thank you so much. I'm so glad you are sticking with Rachelle and me. Gretchen
reply by Michele Harber on 30-Jul-2024
    Absolutely. It's lots of fun.
Comment from Sanku
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I have heard about the Amish community and I am curious to know more about them . I hope this adventure will help me to have a good insight,,
it was quite amusing especially when your friend fell face down on the mud!!!

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 17-Jul-2024
    Lol. I am learning about them as well. Thank you for this nice review. Gretchen
Comment from Neonewman
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I mean, how fast is this buggy moving? You could leap to your death. Not 2 miles an hour, for sure. Maybe a scraped knee, lol. Rachelle's face is planted in the mud; I can visualize all this perfectly. What great fun this was to read.
God bless,
Steve

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 16-Jul-2024
    Thank you. At sixty-three I don't bounce. Lol. Thank you for this awesome review. Gretchen
reply by Neonewman on 16-Jul-2024
    Me neither, lol. It's a fun story.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
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This continues to amuse me. Rachelle does make an entrance and her laughter permits their hosts to laugh. The guy with the scythe is another matter as you don't cut any crop in the rain.

 Comment Written 09-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 09-Jul-2024
    Maybe he was sharpening it. Lol. I'm sure he came out to investigate the laughter. Thank you for this nice review. Gretchen
Comment from T B Botts
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Oh my word Gretchen,
this was fabulous! I can see the whole scene played out before me. Your fear of the guy with the scythe reminds me of when I was transferred from Key West to Charleston South Carolina in the early seventies. Before we moved, I had watched the movie Deliverance, and was scared to death to go hunting or fishing without my shotgun. I had a pair of military issue green coveralls and I bought myself a straw hat, hoping if I ran into a still in the woods, I might be able to pass myself off as a local. This was great gal. Well done.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 09-Jul-2024
    Lol. As catchy as banjo music is, it sends a shiver up my spine, so I get it. I'm glad you enjoyed this. And thank you for the extra star. Gretchen
Comment from Sankey
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A great new chapter to this wonderful story. I love the Amish. sadly their doctrines are basically Old Testament but I have enjoyed a few Amish movies. Have you seen the series including a part called "The Shunning?" A 3 part series about a girl born on the English side but given up to an Amish couple at birth.

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 08-Jul-2024
    I don't know much about them so I'm learning as I go. I just remember Witness with Harrison Ford. Thank you for this awesome review and the extra star. Gretchen
Comment from Jim Wile
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Oh, Gretchen, this is so funny. I love your self-deprecating humor as you freely admit you are directionally challenged, scent-challenged, a plain dresser, reticent, and a nervous Nelly about men with scythes.

You're full of very apt observations too like, "quicker than a politician before a Senate commission" and "there is nothing worse than rambling about things that no one wants to hear. "

I'm sure I would have cracked up too to see Rachelle's face plant. There's just something humorous about seeing people fall down.

I loved this! - Jim

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 08-Jul-2024
    Thank you. If Rachelle and I get through this still friends, who knows where our next adventure may take us. Lol. Thank you so much. Gretchen
Comment from royowen
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I love the the conversation with the the bright, bouncy youthful girl, who seems to display a knowledge ofvtge weather and agriculture, and the man appearing with a scythe from a barn, Gretchen takes off for safety, but decides she's not fit enough to escape her fate, heh heh, well done Gretchen, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 08-Jul-2024
    Thank you, Roy. I'd be easy pickings for someone, that's for sure. Gretchen
reply by royowen on 08-Jul-2024
    Bless you Gretchen
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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Hahaha... your side of the story is as funny as Rachelle's side. You two make a wonderful and amusing pair.

I just watched the movie,"witness", starring Harrison Ford. I've watched it a dozen times and it never gets old. You get a good sense of what Amish are like. You two have captured it well thus far.

Well done!

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 08-Jul-2024
    That's the extent of my Amish knowledge. Lol. Witness. Thank you for this awesome review and the bonus star. Gretchen
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
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A man with a scythe coming out of the barn in the middle of a thunderstorm is never a good thing and especially since it's taking place in a story that involves you two renegades. Let's see how much more trouble you can get yourself into.

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 08-Jul-2024
    There will be more trouble, I promise you. Lol. Thank you for this. Gretchen