Ode to Eva
To my maiden aunt who feared life but loved flowers.16 total reviews
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An excellent entry for the Free Verse Poetry contest. Such lovely descriptions when comparing her to her flowers and plants. I love the ending and especially the last two lines. Beautifully written. Good luck in the contest,
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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An excellent entry for the Free Verse Poetry contest. Such lovely descriptions when comparing her to her flowers and plants. I love the ending and especially the last two lines. Beautifully written. Good luck in the contest,
Comment Written 18-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Thank you Marilyn. I'm glad you liked my free verse poem about my aunt.
Beth
Comment from jessizero
This poem about your aunt was beautiful. I hope my nieces and nephew remember me this fondly when I am gone. I loved the end with the tulip. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2024
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This poem about your aunt was beautiful. I hope my nieces and nephew remember me this fondly when I am gone. I loved the end with the tulip. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2024
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Thank you Jessi. I don't think you were shy like my aunt who never even had a date. You will be remembeed as a caring aunt who was fun to be around unless you outlive them all. You've got a long way to go before anyone has to rememeber you. I"m glad you liked my poem.
Comment from patcelaw
This is a nice ode that you have written to a lady who life was not lived in vain. She did have a purpose in this world and I think you pointed it out pretty well in your poem. I loved your poem. It's very well written. Patricia.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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This is a nice ode that you have written to a lady who life was not lived in vain. She did have a purpose in this world and I think you pointed it out pretty well in your poem. I loved your poem. It's very well written. Patricia.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Thank you Patricia. I wish she had been more outgoing and happier but she did find joy working with her flowres.
Beth
Comment from Ric Myworld
I can see communicating with flowers, since you don't have to worry about them lying to you or trying to take advantage, like most humans. Sounds like a life lived well, but a lonely one. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2024
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I can see communicating with flowers, since you don't have to worry about them lying to you or trying to take advantage, like most humans. Sounds like a life lived well, but a lonely one. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2024
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LOL, Yes she did have that advantage. I think I would feed I missed my shot at life and didn't experience it all. However, If it turned out bad, a life among the flowers wouldn't be a bad option.
Beth
Comment from royowen
No life was meant to be lived in vain, and it's legacy will live in spite of what think and believe, there's nothing that will cancel or stop that from happening,
This is a beautifully written post dear Beth, a deeply reflective poem, beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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No life was meant to be lived in vain, and it's legacy will live in spite of what think and believe, there's nothing that will cancel or stop that from happening,
This is a beautifully written post dear Beth, a deeply reflective poem, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 16-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Thank you Roy. I'm glad my aunt found something that brought her joy. I appreciate your comments.
Beth
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Well done
Comment from jim vecchio
Your poem came out beautifully and I wish I had extra stars. Such a beautiful character study in your poem, and I'm sure all the readers will feel they have come to know this woman through your well-chosen words.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Your poem came out beautifully and I wish I had extra stars. Such a beautiful character study in your poem, and I'm sure all the readers will feel they have come to know this woman through your well-chosen words.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Thank you Jim. I pleased you liked my poem. I like to be able to capture a bit of someone I care about character on paper. She did enjoy working with her flower but other than that I wonder if she got much pleasure from life.
Beth
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I'm sure she is smiling down on you for your piece about her.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I enjoyed reading. Your Aunt Eva, I can tell, from reading was a special lady, who I believe had beauty inside. I wish she could have believed that. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I enjoyed reading. Your Aunt Eva, I can tell, from reading was a special lady, who I believe had beauty inside. I wish she could have believed that. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Barbara. I think my aunt would have been happier if she felt better about herself but I think she did feel joy as she worked with her flowers.
Beth
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Your Aunt sounds like a recluse but she allowed plants and flowers into her life and they thrived at her hand, she obviously had much love of nature, a fine post Beth, much enjoyed, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2024
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Your Aunt sounds like a recluse but she allowed plants and flowers into her life and they thrived at her hand, she obviously had much love of nature, a fine post Beth, much enjoyed, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 16-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2024
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Thank you Dolly, I feel my aunt could have had a better life if she hadn't felt such low self esteme. I loved her but I felt sorry for her. However she did get pleasure from working with flowers.
Beth
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I think this is beautiful, Beth! It has such a timeless feel to the poetry and the fact that it's based on your maiden aunt makes it all the more special. I love the poignancy of it and the way the verse evolves seamlessly to complete its cyclical conclusion. The imagery of gardening and nature provides a charming cohesion to this skilfully composed free verse. One small edit - re(p)ose. Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2024
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I think this is beautiful, Beth! It has such a timeless feel to the poetry and the fact that it's based on your maiden aunt makes it all the more special. I love the poignancy of it and the way the verse evolves seamlessly to complete its cyclical conclusion. The imagery of gardening and nature provides a charming cohesion to this skilfully composed free verse. One small edit - re(p)ose. Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 16-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2024
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Thank you Debbie. I appreciate the review and comments.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
I think you meant "looking THROUGH" a cracked and foggy glass
HERSELF unfit to be a bride
AHE? Oh, I think you mean "she"
REPOSE instead of respose
It sounds like Eva had a mental illness that would have been treatable today. Beth, this is a lovely tribute and the last few lines were absolutely beautiful. It feels like you rushed through this and there were many errors, which is not like your poetry at all.
I've had that kind of thing happen with the font when editing here; I had to literally retype the part that wasn't right.
Good luck to you in the contest.
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2024
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I think you meant "looking THROUGH" a cracked and foggy glass
HERSELF unfit to be a bride
AHE? Oh, I think you mean "she"
REPOSE instead of respose
It sounds like Eva had a mental illness that would have been treatable today. Beth, this is a lovely tribute and the last few lines were absolutely beautiful. It feels like you rushed through this and there were many errors, which is not like your poetry at all.
I've had that kind of thing happen with the font when editing here; I had to literally retype the part that wasn't right.
Good luck to you in the contest.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 16-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2024
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Thank you Pam. I did write this late and had a lot of problems with the site and got very frustrated. I corrected the errors you mentioned, but was late from an appointment so I still have gone over it throughly . Eva's mom died when she was young and her sister Alma took her in. I blame the sister, my grandmother, for her low self image. Alma told he was sickly and she try to marry. There was nothing wrong with her health.
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I changed the rating to excellent.