Unfinished Brushstrokes
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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
My goodness, you have written loads in those few days, Carol, all the more pages for me to read. Garth really knows how to get up Donatelli's nose! Lol.
jackson and Peter should have worked their idea out a bit better, now Jenna is suspicious. Lots still going on, my friend. Off now to read the next chapter. Love you, and missed you! :) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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My goodness, you have written loads in those few days, Carol, all the more pages for me to read. Garth really knows how to get up Donatelli's nose! Lol.
jackson and Peter should have worked their idea out a bit better, now Jenna is suspicious. Lots still going on, my friend. Off now to read the next chapter. Love you, and missed you! :) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 24-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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these final chapters I feel are some of my best...I'm probably prejudice but what the heck! I especially love Eleanor and also the ending. Hope you do too. Happy reading!
Love ya, Carol
Comment from prettybluebirds
You have really been on a roll. You must be getting saddle sores from all the time spent on the computer. I'm going to have to do some major reading to catch up.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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You have really been on a roll. You must be getting saddle sores from all the time spent on the computer. I'm going to have to do some major reading to catch up.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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Oh girl...the ball is rolling and buildin up steam. I think you are going to enjoy the next few chapters or I hope so.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from tfawcus
Some good cinematic techniques in this fast-moving chapter, cutting back and forth between scenes. You maintain a high level of tension. It sounds as though things are getting complicated again and might need further intervention by Eleanor.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Some good cinematic techniques in this fast-moving chapter, cutting back and forth between scenes. You maintain a high level of tension. It sounds as though things are getting complicated again and might need further intervention by Eleanor.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Eleanor is up for the role and waiting for her curtain call! I love the lady.... And I'm in high gear trying to catch up after missing five days so I hope the story isn't moving too fast. Thanks so much for the comments and the review.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
There's a lot of action going on in this chapter. Dylan spots some of his Uncle's paintings and wonders where Jenna is, but she is wrapped up in reading some of Eleanor's wartime letters. Nick pays Peter to pick up the ransom money. Donatelli catches Nick with the ransom. And Donatelli and Garth have an argument. If Peter was supposed to pick up the ransom, why did Nick do it since he sent Peter to get it? At least Garth knows the really bad guy is the Judge.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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There's a lot of action going on in this chapter. Dylan spots some of his Uncle's paintings and wonders where Jenna is, but she is wrapped up in reading some of Eleanor's wartime letters. Nick pays Peter to pick up the ransom money. Donatelli catches Nick with the ransom. And Donatelli and Garth have an argument. If Peter was supposed to pick up the ransom, why did Nick do it since he sent Peter to get it? At least Garth knows the really bad guy is the Judge.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Peter was suppose to and Nick was watching, making sure there wasn't any slip ups. He got antsy when Jenna delayed Peter so he did it himself. A mistake!
And our Cowboy...he's on the trail to cracking open the case.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from karenina
Aha! One final six! (I'm surprised myself to have one this late on a Saturday--but how fortuitous!)
Lot's of action here...but my man Garth has his eyes on the big picture (no pun intended) and I'm more than secure he'll get Donatelli in line!
Eleanor is the best ghost/private eye ever!
Keep it up!
Karenina
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Aha! One final six! (I'm surprised myself to have one this late on a Saturday--but how fortuitous!)
Lot's of action here...but my man Garth has his eyes on the big picture (no pun intended) and I'm more than secure he'll get Donatelli in line!
Eleanor is the best ghost/private eye ever!
Keep it up!
Karenina
Comment Written 20-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Our Cowboy is hot on the trail and he won't give up. soon he'll have to deal with Donatelli or vica versa and then things should get hopping. As for our girl, Eleanor, she's a perfect private investigator or maybe that's instigator...LOL She's hard at work!
You are awesome with the six stars, my lady. I'm hard at work trying to justify them. I just finished chap 18..one I enjoyed! Thank you as always...
Smiles, Carol
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I'm so tired tonight. Good to know I have new chapters to read tomorrow!
Comment from lyenochka
Garth could be a little more encouraging to old Donatelli. He needs an attaboy even if he got the clues from a ghost! He probably needs some sleep before he gets back into the hunt.
I hope Dylan and Jenna can put their heads together and piece together what the paintings mean.
So Nick was in on the kidnapping, even though he was knocked out? Who's Peter? I think the cast of characters got too long for my brain.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Garth could be a little more encouraging to old Donatelli. He needs an attaboy even if he got the clues from a ghost! He probably needs some sleep before he gets back into the hunt.
I hope Dylan and Jenna can put their heads together and piece together what the paintings mean.
So Nick was in on the kidnapping, even though he was knocked out? Who's Peter? I think the cast of characters got too long for my brain.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Donatelli definitely needs some sleep. Nick decided to go rogue after getting knocked out...He thought he could do the ransom on his own because he knew the Judge wasn't going to ask for a ransom, he just wanted to dispose of Megan to get back at Trevor and Margaret. sorry! It's a complicated story with things happening everywhere.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Wendy G
Always the power plays between those who want to take credit for solving a set of crimes, turf wars just as much as for the criminals. I couldn't remember where Peter came into it, or whether he is just new to the scene, and doing Nick's dirty work. However, he will have some explaining to do. Hope Dylan can get more info about those paintings locked away. Well done.
Wendy
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Always the power plays between those who want to take credit for solving a set of crimes, turf wars just as much as for the criminals. I couldn't remember where Peter came into it, or whether he is just new to the scene, and doing Nick's dirty work. However, he will have some explaining to do. Hope Dylan can get more info about those paintings locked away. Well done.
Wendy
Comment Written 20-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Peter's just a sales associate at the gallery. I needed him so Jenna could detain him and Nick who was watching would grab the loot and run. Trying to catch up on five days of not writing is a chore. Times ticking.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from BOO ghost
Reading...All I'm asking is that you go to the train station, get a package from Locker 13, and bring it to me. It's that simple."
"I don't know, Nick. It sounds like another one of your schemes." Wonder what's inside that locker? I'd like to do just that, but something tells me Doyle has his finger in every pie in town. Instead of chasing breadcrumbs, you should be chasing the one who bakes the whole loaf. And that's Doyle." A crooked judge it appears. I'm curious about those paintings, Prose well written, don't see any major flaws. Well orchestrated.
BOO!
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Reading...All I'm asking is that you go to the train station, get a package from Locker 13, and bring it to me. It's that simple."
"I don't know, Nick. It sounds like another one of your schemes." Wonder what's inside that locker? I'd like to do just that, but something tells me Doyle has his finger in every pie in town. Instead of chasing breadcrumbs, you should be chasing the one who bakes the whole loaf. And that's Doyle." A crooked judge it appears. I'm curious about those paintings, Prose well written, don't see any major flaws. Well orchestrated.
BOO!
Comment Written 20-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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thanks Boo! I appreciate that you are trying to follow a story that had so many twists and turns before you joined. I hope the summary helps a little. Thanks again!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from royowen
Anything Garthis doing it seems that he's right, Doatelli's pride will be his downfall, he seems to think it's a contest of manhood rather than sussing out the real crooks. Ah those paintings in the private no go area have interested Dylan, beautifully written, Carol, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Anything Garthis doing it seems that he's right, Doatelli's pride will be his downfall, he seems to think it's a contest of manhood rather than sussing out the real crooks. Ah those paintings in the private no go area have interested Dylan, beautifully written, Carol, blessings Roy
Comment Written 20-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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I thought we'd be further along than this but Mother Nature had other plans for me. But now I am back and trying to get Garth and Donatelli on the same page so we can get these crimes solved. And poor Megan....we must save the young girl.
Smiles, Carol
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Of course save her
Comment from LJbutterfly
I admire your ability to sit at the computer and constantly write. I'm always curious about your writing process. How early do you begin your writing day? Do you prepare an outline of where you think your story might go? If so, I know it changes, because characters often do what THEY want to do, and not what you planned.
Your chapters are packed with so much enjoyable, suspenseful, or mysterious information, that I wonder how you keep it all straight. However you do it, I look forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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I admire your ability to sit at the computer and constantly write. I'm always curious about your writing process. How early do you begin your writing day? Do you prepare an outline of where you think your story might go? If so, I know it changes, because characters often do what THEY want to do, and not what you planned.
Your chapters are packed with so much enjoyable, suspenseful, or mysterious information, that I wonder how you keep it all straight. However you do it, I look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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My day begins when I wake up and have a story thought rampaging through my mind. Usually around 4am but sometimes earlier. As for an outline...it's scribbled sentences, a thought for each chapter. They get changed as I go. I'm not sure where it comes from but I am thankful that it it there again...I feared for a while that I wouldn't write again and now...it's a blast once more. I'm glad you are enjoying what I do. That's very special to me.
Smiles, Carol