Come Hither, Sweet Lad
Use These Words contest entry4 total reviews
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I think you were too graphic for folks on here. The picture is so out there that ladies shy away, and menfolk are afraid to be caught looking. It was well done, and after all they put the word graphic in it.
:-)
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2024
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I think you were too graphic for folks on here. The picture is so out there that ladies shy away, and menfolk are afraid to be caught looking. It was well done, and after all they put the word graphic in it.
:-)
Comment Written 10-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2024
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Thanks.
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:-)
Comment from Begin Again
Now we are being a little wicked and adding some spice to life and hopefully not death. The picture fits your poem perfectly. I wish you luck in the contest.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
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Now we are being a little wicked and adding some spice to life and hopefully not death. The picture fits your poem perfectly. I wish you luck in the contest.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 23-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
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Thank you very much for your appreciative review, Carol!
Comment from Pamusart
Hi, whoever you are
You didn't leave any notes so I'm guessing what this poem is about. You finish it with death and you say death is sweet.
Is the boy dying Or is it the narrator?
I think your poem is so deep that it's hard for people to get the message. That's why I think you should have some notes and in those notes you should define.sapphic. Why do you want your readers to have to go to the Internet to look up sapphic. If they have to do that, they may just skip your poem
The rest of the poem seems to be about a boy toy.and giving him.eternal rest and in the meantime you comfort him before he goes
Here you need a to before you
"I'll give it you at little price!"
I enjoyed your poem
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
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Hi, whoever you are
You didn't leave any notes so I'm guessing what this poem is about. You finish it with death and you say death is sweet.
Is the boy dying Or is it the narrator?
I think your poem is so deep that it's hard for people to get the message. That's why I think you should have some notes and in those notes you should define.sapphic. Why do you want your readers to have to go to the Internet to look up sapphic. If they have to do that, they may just skip your poem
The rest of the poem seems to be about a boy toy.and giving him.eternal rest and in the meantime you comfort him before he goes
Here you need a to before you
"I'll give it you at little price!"
I enjoyed your poem
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
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Please read the contest prompt requirement.
This is a horror-fantasy piece about a blood and soul sucking demoness who's trying to lure a young man to her, and his death.
Thank you very much for reading and reviewing.
Comment from Patty Mazzurco
Your poem is bold and provocative, engaging the reader with its direct address and playful tone. The rhythm and rhyme scheme are consistent, creating a catchy and rhythmic flow. The use of repetition and rhyming couplets adds to the poem's lively and rhythmic quality.
Good luck!
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
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Your poem is bold and provocative, engaging the reader with its direct address and playful tone. The rhythm and rhyme scheme are consistent, creating a catchy and rhythmic flow. The use of repetition and rhyming couplets adds to the poem's lively and rhythmic quality.
Good luck!
Comment Written 23-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
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Thank you very much!
