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His Silence

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Why did a 14 year old boy murder his parents?

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Comment from CrystieCookie999
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This chapter helps show how prisons everywhere in developed countries have those gym rooms for regular use. It seems like Harvey is really there, with the details given. You help portray the anxious anticipation that is in his mind, to see his sister again. I bet most of the story is going to come out in their next meeting. Not sure if it will be through a glass barrier or what.

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 22-Aug-2024
    Thank you, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Neonewman
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Well done, Jacob. We finally get to hear from Harvey. He is excited to see his sister after all these years. Maybe we'll get a glimpse of what happened and why soon.
God bless,
Steve

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 21-Aug-2024
    Thank you Steve, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
reply by Neonewman on 21-Aug-2024
    my pleasure, Jacob.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
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It is interesting that Harvey can still scare people when the sins of others are so bad. I suppose the use of the axe is the reason and maybe his youth when he committed the crime. His flash of memory is a great hook to keep the reader reading. What where his parents going to do to him and his sister?

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 20-Aug-2024
    Thank you Carol, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
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You have created a believable prison atmosphere. Mistrust and introspection abound as thoughts of the prisoners run on totally different lines. It is a very convincing write. kay

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
    Thank you Katherine, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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So, Harvey wants to know if his sister saw him get the axe? Am I understanding this correctly. This is a good write, although we still know exactly what caused Harvey to kill his parent, just a hint at a decision they make about moving. This is a good read.

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
    Thank you Barbara, he is just reflecting in this scene. I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from BethShelby
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So the people in the prison see him as a spawn of Satan and are afraid of him. I get the idea that murder had something to do with what the parents and other had planned for him and his sister. Each post reveals just a tiny bit more.

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
    Thank you Beth, I'm pleased that you're enjoying it.
Comment from Pamusart
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Hi, Jacob

This chapter concentrated on Harvey. I must've missed where he killed the third person. That's so interesting because I thought he was caught directly after he killed his parents. So how did he have time to kill another person?

And what was his motive? we still don't know what his motive was for killing his parents. They were talking something about.maybe they'd be better off without the kids I don't know what they were talking about.

But it could also have been that they knew something was wrong with Harvey on a mental way, and they were may be going to commit him

I believe that would've been better than jail so I'm not sure

He must've killed Ian Jones before he killed his parents. But I don't know if this was covered in prior chapters as to why he killed him.

Lots of mysteries in this novel

I enjoyed reading your book chapter

Good job. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
    Hi Pam, he killed the third person along with his parents, it was covered in Chapter Zero, the newspaper report. So three people were killed in the house that night. Thank you, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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A neat switch to Harvey and an endorsement of his friendship with Jeremiah so that we're now feeling a little more comfortable with the latter's presence in the story. Also a little hint about the background to Harvey's offending when he reflects on the other inmate having a reason for being there (as opposed to himself?) Well done, Jacob, and thanks for another enjoyable chapter. Debbie

Harvey knows (the guy's) in for killing his girlfriend (when you say 'he's' it seems confusingly as if it's referring to the subject of the sentence).
his ex('s) place
He thought (with time) - a repeat of 'for a while' and not necessary
It'll be their Mum who(m) she'll have taken after

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
    Thank you Debbie and for the suggestions as well. I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Begin Again
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So, at last, we get a little more knowledge concerning who Harvey is or has been. We also know that Jeremiah has always been there for him. Now on to the next chapter to see what happens at the visit.... or will something happen before?
Smiles, Carol

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
    Thank you Carol, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
reply by Begin Again on 19-Aug-2024
    I just finished the next chapter. Of course a pins and needles one as Harvey enters. You are doing quite well with the story and keeping the reader interested.
    Smiles, Carol