A call for freedom
A Poem Written in slang2 total reviews
Comment from Cindy Decker 3
Angela,
Once again I love your style of praising Jesus. You do it in your own way, it's unique, but not distasteful. Maybe replace: let's stroll "confidently" instead of with swagger. We Christians aren't arrogant as "swagger" implies. But we're confident as we walk on His path.
Otherwise I love your unique style.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes,
Cindy
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Angela,
Once again I love your style of praising Jesus. You do it in your own way, it's unique, but not distasteful. Maybe replace: let's stroll "confidently" instead of with swagger. We Christians aren't arrogant as "swagger" implies. But we're confident as we walk on His path.
Otherwise I love your unique style.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes,
Cindy
Comment Written 11-Sep-2024
Comment from Marion Issa
I know the slang is purposeful, and I applaud how you managed to make it blend into the poem, but I cant help but feel distasteful reading Jesus and swagger in the same vein. Please know the 3 Stars is just My opinion, but I think your meter and rhymes were well done, and I would say this is a good poem for a different challenge
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I know the slang is purposeful, and I applaud how you managed to make it blend into the poem, but I cant help but feel distasteful reading Jesus and swagger in the same vein. Please know the 3 Stars is just My opinion, but I think your meter and rhymes were well done, and I would say this is a good poem for a different challenge
Comment Written 11-Sep-2024
