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His Silence

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Why did a 14 year old boy murder his parents?

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Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
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I should think the absence of meat or anything but water to drink might become irritating to Callum and Danielle. The desire of Oliver to have Dani alone in the Annexe seems more than a little creepy.

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 24-Sep-2024
    Thank you Carol, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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The creepy sense that Oliver is moving in on Danielle continues and I get the impression that Danielle isn't exactly averse to this attention (perhaps she's being drugged:)) Callum meanwhile is being left out in the cold, well not exactly, as Eve could be moving in on him. But nothing is normal here and Danielle and Callum need to get out and, maybe, take that holiday abroad instead? Anyway, soon, Emma and Michael will be expecting those holiday snaps:) Thanks for sharing your intriguing story, Jacob. Take care Debbie

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 24-Sep-2024
    Thank you, Debbie, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from BethShelby
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So far everything is mysterious. If these people have to jobs around this place, white woule be hard to keep clean. I would assume since some of the women cook other might have jobs like gardening. Where does the money come from? I looking forward to more.

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
    Thank you, Beth, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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I really don't trust these people. Danielle is right to be concerned with Eve's interest in Callum. I like this story.

At least it doesn't look as though Oliver's going to ask me to sit next to him this time. I take a seat at the table next to Callum. (beside in both sentences instead of 'next to')

Oliver sits next to Jeremiah; (sits beside Jermiah, -- beside is for humans and next to for objects, it has to deal with definition according to my editor.)

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
    Thank you Barbara, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Begin Again
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Jacket potato--like a twice-baked or stuffed potato in the U.S. I love baked potatoes, but if they only eat vegetables (where's the chicken?), I'm headed home! And it looks like they will continue to separate Danielle from Callum--subtly, but it's being done.
My emotions still say RUN!!!! Great job!
Smiles, Carol

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
    Thank you Carol, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Lindsey Russell
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This is a very interesting story and I can tell that there are going to be many twists and turns within. Best of luck with it! In this sentence What he literally made you get changed?' you might want to add punctuation after the word what, but take my suggestion with a grain of salt. Happy writing!

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
    Thank you Lindsey, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.