lips like strawberry wine
memories of another age26 total reviews
Comment from E Lloyd Kelly
The one that got away, perhaps. Jim did not lose any time pulling me into this, he probably learned it from Chrissy herself. Now we're all dragged down the rabbit hole to some dark page-turning nights with the rest of this fabulous story coming. I can't find a good reason to deny the full marks but since we're all here striving toward perfection, I would grudgingly pass off five and a half of six stars on this, if I could. Great read.
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The one that got away, perhaps. Jim did not lose any time pulling me into this, he probably learned it from Chrissy herself. Now we're all dragged down the rabbit hole to some dark page-turning nights with the rest of this fabulous story coming. I can't find a good reason to deny the full marks but since we're all here striving toward perfection, I would grudgingly pass off five and a half of six stars on this, if I could. Great read.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2024
Comment from Bill Schott
I am glad I got back to this story, Jim. It is on the order of Dirty Dancing from the entertainer's aspect. The politicking with the girl came on and went on with just the moral high ground to stand on in the end.
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I am glad I got back to this story, Jim. It is on the order of Dirty Dancing from the entertainer's aspect. The politicking with the girl came on and went on with just the moral high ground to stand on in the end.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2024
Comment from nomi338
Pity those of us who come close to possessing the beauty who catches our eye, allow us to come close for a brief moment and then depart, leaving behind only memories and thoughts of what might have been.
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Pity those of us who come close to possessing the beauty who catches our eye, allow us to come close for a brief moment and then depart, leaving behind only memories and thoughts of what might have been.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2024
Comment from patcelaw
This is very well written, and I enjoyed very much listening to it. It reminds me of those days when I was young and I was making foolish mistakes. But one of the things about us making mistakes as the young man in your fiction story is that we grow, and we learn to be better people by it, and I love the moral of your story and how the young man decided to say he sorry to a young lady who hit he had missed used in a way that he should not have That is to be admired of him. Patricia.
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This is very well written, and I enjoyed very much listening to it. It reminds me of those days when I was young and I was making foolish mistakes. But one of the things about us making mistakes as the young man in your fiction story is that we grow, and we learn to be better people by it, and I love the moral of your story and how the young man decided to say he sorry to a young lady who hit he had missed used in a way that he should not have That is to be admired of him. Patricia.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2024
Comment from F. William Lester
Good story - a hint of "The Days of Wine and Roses". Sad story of the down and out. They seem to be cut from the same cloth with the same predilection for booze, his from insecurity and hers from naiveite. Well done. Thanks for sharing it. Have a wonderful day.
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Good story - a hint of "The Days of Wine and Roses". Sad story of the down and out. They seem to be cut from the same cloth with the same predilection for booze, his from insecurity and hers from naiveite. Well done. Thanks for sharing it. Have a wonderful day.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2024
Comment from Esther Brown
Beautiful idiotic love that makes us fools. Did you mean your father? Said you father. Your writing makes me smile. I like your stories about love and life very best. Esther
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Beautiful idiotic love that makes us fools. Did you mean your father? Said you father. Your writing makes me smile. I like your stories about love and life very best. Esther
Comment Written 29-Sep-2024
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
A bittersweet story of innocent love that doesn't end so innocently. Well written and engaging. I loved every moment of it. I love the way it was so tastefully written and how very believable.
Hugs,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2024
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A bittersweet story of innocent love that doesn't end so innocently. Well written and engaging. I loved every moment of it. I love the way it was so tastefully written and how very believable.
Hugs,
Rhonda
Comment Written 29-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2024
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When I am not directly mentioning the Lord, I write stories mainly that highlight the human condition.
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Interesting!!
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Sometimes a work might not seem to do either, but in a story where someone makes a wrong decision, or takes a wrong step, that is something that's a point of all our lives, and can be instructive in writing.
Comment from Ric Myworld
I always enjoy reading your poems; although, as you already know, I'm not really a poetry kind of guy. I'm a prose guy, and I guess I'd call you a poetry prose guy. :-) Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2024
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I always enjoy reading your poems; although, as you already know, I'm not really a poetry kind of guy. I'm a prose guy, and I guess I'd call you a poetry prose guy. :-) Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2024
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When I am not directly mentioning the Lord, I write stories mainly that highlight the human condition.
Comment from LJbutterfly
I most liked the conversational tone you used to tell this story, like you were talking to old friends at a bar. Men have to be really careful around those young girl women who seek male attention but are not mature enough to know what to do with it when they get it. A great story. Very entertaining.
"Not where you father can see us!" (your)
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2024
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I most liked the conversational tone you used to tell this story, like you were talking to old friends at a bar. Men have to be really careful around those young girl women who seek male attention but are not mature enough to know what to do with it when they get it. A great story. Very entertaining.
"Not where you father can see us!" (your)
Comment Written 28-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2024
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I fixed that typo. Thank you very much for your kind words.
Comment from Teri7
Jim, This is a very well written story and I truly loved the song you posted on here. That was one of my favorites when I was 16. I also loved Paul McCartney. My first real boyfriend had eyes like his. But thankfully I am happily married to Tom and those guys don't mean a thing to me!
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2024
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Jim, This is a very well written story and I truly loved the song you posted on here. That was one of my favorites when I was 16. I also loved Paul McCartney. My first real boyfriend had eyes like his. But thankfully I am happily married to Tom and those guys don't mean a thing to me!
Comment Written 28-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2024
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My wife's first love looked nothing like me. I'm thankful God led me to her.When I am not directly mentioning the Lord, I write stories mainly that highlight the human condition.