Another Fine Mess
Short Fuse21 total reviews
Comment from TPAC
I'm not really feeling this read, apparently this is my lack. Great achievement. I must follow the flock on this one. Good trick is my best statement: not many read do this. Thank you
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2024
I'm not really feeling this read, apparently this is my lack. Great achievement. I must follow the flock on this one. Good trick is my best statement: not many read do this. Thank you
Comment Written 31-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2024
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If you do not care for the topic, that is fine. I don't always like what my friends write. But, if you did not understand it, or, you feel I did not explain things well enough tell me, I may go back and edit. This is what reviewing is for. Tell us what you really like, or what you do not like. THanks for the read. Karen
Comment from BermyBye50
Karen,
Congrats on winning the What A Mess! Contest. Once again your talent and creativity with well placed humor resulted in another great win. Your poem tells a hilarious story with excellent rhyming in perfect sync with the caption of the artwork.
All the best,
Eugene
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2024
Karen,
Congrats on winning the What A Mess! Contest. Once again your talent and creativity with well placed humor resulted in another great win. Your poem tells a hilarious story with excellent rhyming in perfect sync with the caption of the artwork.
All the best,
Eugene
Comment Written 26-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2024
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Well, you might not like my horror story. It is quite bloody, and totally unfunny. I don't write many things that do not have humor. My muse has taken me over for a while and I am writing and rewriting all the time. Congrats on your win. Karen
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This has a ring of someone I might know! The prompt is thus well-suited for clearing up a murder scene in delightful verse, always exhibiting the cunning craft of blending humour with tragedy. An excellent read and my favourite. Good luck whoever you are:)) Debbie
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2024
This has a ring of someone I might know! The prompt is thus well-suited for clearing up a murder scene in delightful verse, always exhibiting the cunning craft of blending humour with tragedy. An excellent read and my favourite. Good luck whoever you are:)) Debbie
Comment Written 23-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2024
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I may not say who I am. I remember one prompt I wrote for myself" I should have drug him into the bathroom, stripped him, then put him in the tub. Next to no cleanup when I stabbed him." I haven't used it yet. Thanks for the read.
Comment from Barry Penfold
Funny and messy. Seems to fit the contest criteria. Love the caption. You should do well in the contest. Thanks for sharing and I hope you have a great day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2024
Funny and messy. Seems to fit the contest criteria. Love the caption. You should do well in the contest. Thanks for sharing and I hope you have a great day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2024
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I thank you very much, The picture just got to me.
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Karen
This is a witty poem abot an accidental death which seems the perpetrator is not one bit sad about. Is seems she thinks he gives her as much trouble in death as he did in life.
I like the mono rhyme stanzas.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Enjoy your weekend.
Joan
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reply by the author on 19-Oct-2024
Hi Karen
This is a witty poem abot an accidental death which seems the perpetrator is not one bit sad about. Is seems she thinks he gives her as much trouble in death as he did in life.
I like the mono rhyme stanzas.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Enjoy your weekend.
Joan
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Comment Written 19-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2024
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thanks for the read and nice comments
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No problem.
Joan
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I am deep in reviewing. I crammed my muse in the closet. But I can hear her whimpering. :-)
Comment from Wendy G
Lol. A very humorous poem whic is well complemented by the fun image. Well, I guess she doesn't have to worry about him anymore, and she was pretty slick about cleaning up all the mess associated with his demise! Well done. A fine entry for the contest. Best wishes.
Wendy
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2024
Lol. A very humorous poem whic is well complemented by the fun image. Well, I guess she doesn't have to worry about him anymore, and she was pretty slick about cleaning up all the mess associated with his demise! Well done. A fine entry for the contest. Best wishes.
Wendy
Comment Written 19-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2024
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Three washloads later, he told her she looked like she put on some weight. IKt didn't seem to bother her pitching arm any. . Thanka for the read.
Comment from CD Richards
Haha. Well, you sure approached the topic in an amusing way. I had to Google "Swiffer pads", as either they aren't a thing in my neck of the woods, or I'm just ignorant of them.
The rhyme scheme and end-rhymes are spot on. I had a little trouble in a couple of places with the meter, but that's no biggie.
After reading this, I really, really, really, hope you don't take offence to the comments - I still have a bit of living to do!
Nice job.
Craig
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2024
Haha. Well, you sure approached the topic in an amusing way. I had to Google "Swiffer pads", as either they aren't a thing in my neck of the woods, or I'm just ignorant of them.
The rhyme scheme and end-rhymes are spot on. I had a little trouble in a couple of places with the meter, but that's no biggie.
After reading this, I really, really, really, hope you don't take offence to the comments - I still have a bit of living to do!
Nice job.
Craig
Comment Written 19-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2024
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Yes, I could not get the meter right with two lines. I tried and tried but they would not cooperate. My sisters got me some. With just me, my preferred way is to get a spray bottle and fill it with 80% wayter and 20% pinalen and spray the floor a bit at a time while walking around on an old towel. Works for me.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
-Well who indeed would know that throwing a brick, and hitting the mark would make such a mess and would be such a fun read. I love the pic of Kathy's hot flushes, I can laugh 'cause I am way past that age. Good luck in the contest,
it gave me a laugh.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2024
-Well who indeed would know that throwing a brick, and hitting the mark would make such a mess and would be such a fun read. I love the pic of Kathy's hot flushes, I can laugh 'cause I am way past that age. Good luck in the contest,
it gave me a laugh.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2024
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I went through Menopause four times. I was 27 and had a partial hysterectomy. A year and a half later, they came and got the rest and that was so brutal the pills didn't help. 8 years later an ovary came back, they took it out, I went through menopause for the thirs time, but they had patches now, and they worked pretty good. Then, 10 years later I went through it again as the normal stage of life one, and I wore the patch again. it was okay. I would get weepy now and then but no hot flashes this time. I have talked to othet women, and it has happened to them too. :-) Thanks for the read.
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I had hot flushes for about twenty years from my late twenties but they are, thankfully a distant memory now.
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I think m y body is don e this time it put 25 extra pounds on me with superglue. Stuff won't budge.
Comment from karenina
Hah!
Okay, I'll just say it's pretty impossible for you to write an anonymous poem.
Your reputation for clever but murderous themes is hard not to recognize.
Man--I'll feel silly if I'm wrong, but nah...
I'll bet the house on this!
Excellent...
Six stars and I have only five...
I owe you one!
Karenina
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2024
Hah!
Okay, I'll just say it's pretty impossible for you to write an anonymous poem.
Your reputation for clever but murderous themes is hard not to recognize.
Man--I'll feel silly if I'm wrong, but nah...
I'll bet the house on this!
Excellent...
Six stars and I have only five...
I owe you one!
Karenina
Comment Written 19-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2024
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I cannot say anything until the contest is over. The blindness is dumb, since we can go to their site and read the poem with their name attached to it anyway. Thanks for the read.
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I understand the ruled and you have followed them precisely.
Goof luck!
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:-)
Comment from Begin Again
Looks like you put someone out of his misery...or mayne he was giving you misery and now he is no more. And yes, blood all over would be a mess.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2024
Looks like you put someone out of his misery...or mayne he was giving you misery and now he is no more. And yes, blood all over would be a mess.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 18-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2024
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Well, The picture got me thinking. I had some of those days. Bounty won't cut it. Three washing machine loads of towels and rags. Have a good day. Thanks for the read.