The Lioness of Shadi
Viewing comments for Chapter 31 "Arrows at Dawn"A fantasy adventure out of antiquity
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Comment from Amanda Geering
The simplicity of these times is craved by the population these days. A world with dragons, swords, princes, and mead makes you wonder how many of us would survive without our precious technology and social media? This story has lots of twists and could take a turn anywhere when time was at a hardened stand still and war was imminently on everyone's mind.
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The simplicity of these times is craved by the population these days. A world with dragons, swords, princes, and mead makes you wonder how many of us would survive without our precious technology and social media? This story has lots of twists and could take a turn anywhere when time was at a hardened stand still and war was imminently on everyone's mind.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2024
Comment from patcelaw
This is very well written, and I enjoyed very much listening to it. It flows very well when it is read aloud. Your sentence structure your paragraphing, and your punctuation are all very good and because of all those things, it is a good story to listen to. Since I have vision problems it's hard for me. If people do not use the proper amount of punctuation or do not use good paragraphing or sentence structure. Patricia.
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This is very well written, and I enjoyed very much listening to it. It flows very well when it is read aloud. Your sentence structure your paragraphing, and your punctuation are all very good and because of all those things, it is a good story to listen to. Since I have vision problems it's hard for me. If people do not use the proper amount of punctuation or do not use good paragraphing or sentence structure. Patricia.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2024
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
This chapter has so much depth! It's a little long for online reading. But I love the way you brought Zidanta and Ilati to life. There's so much emotion and tension between them - and it feels so real. The detail with Youtab was also a great touch You've got me hooked with this chapter! Keep up the great work!
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This chapter has so much depth! It's a little long for online reading. But I love the way you brought Zidanta and Ilati to life. There's so much emotion and tension between them - and it feels so real. The detail with Youtab was also a great touch You've got me hooked with this chapter! Keep up the great work!
Comment Written 09-Nov-2024