Jinx, Me, and Captain Eddie-Pt 2
The couple becomes a trio.8 total reviews
Comment from LJbutterfly
All of your stories have unusual or dramatic characters. responding to circumstances in unexpected ways. In other words, a reader can never second guess where you might go with a story. This chapter has not ended with the traditional cliff hanger, but we know Kenny feels inadequate when he compares himself to Captain Eddie, which leaves us wondering how he will react when Captain Eddie catches up.
Funny stuff: You a banana...Go feed some monkeys.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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All of your stories have unusual or dramatic characters. responding to circumstances in unexpected ways. In other words, a reader can never second guess where you might go with a story. This chapter has not ended with the traditional cliff hanger, but we know Kenny feels inadequate when he compares himself to Captain Eddie, which leaves us wondering how he will react when Captain Eddie catches up.
Funny stuff: You a banana...Go feed some monkeys.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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Thanks so much, LJbutterfly. I always start with characters, then weave a story around them. To me, Kenny is a gold mine. As you point out, he's feeling inadequate. To him, Captain Eddie is a threat.
To Jinx, Eddie is a lost soul. I'm in love with these characters. But love is involved, three is a bad number. On top of all these people have to deal with, the green-eyed monster is a complication. Jinx is strong. Kenny is devoted, but unsure of himself. Captain Eddie is a wild card. There's alway tension in a threesome. This story is more about the characters rhan the end of the world.
Thank you again, my friend. Peace, Lee
Comment from Liz O'Neill
A curious tradition. A great simile for the conclusion. Not many use simile because they feel like it sounds, poorly used. You have used your similes and metaphor is very well.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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A curious tradition. A great simile for the conclusion. Not many use simile because they feel like it sounds, poorly used. You have used your similes and metaphor is very well.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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Thank you, Liz. Similies, metaphors, and analogies are my tools. I rely on them to make my stories richer. Thanks for noticing.
Peace, Lee
Comment from Jacob1395
I think I would be wary of any person who has no problem in using a gun, it just shows that the thought they're taking a life away doesn't cross their mind. I'm intrigued to know where you'll take this story next. I really enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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I think I would be wary of any person who has no problem in using a gun, it just shows that the thought they're taking a life away doesn't cross their mind. I'm intrigued to know where you'll take this story next. I really enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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Thank you, Jacob. You raise a good point. But circumstances sometimes change the rules, don't you think?
I'm delighted you enjoyed the story so far. Thans again. Peace, Lee
Comment from pome lover
as usual, this is really good. I loved Captain Eddie's line, ..."long as you don't sink." funny. Also the Gorton Fisherman with a gun - what an imaginative addition. I'll have to go back and read part one and see what this is all about. I shall return.
Katharine
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as usual, this is really good. I loved Captain Eddie's line, ..."long as you don't sink." funny. Also the Gorton Fisherman with a gun - what an imaginative addition. I'll have to go back and read part one and see what this is all about. I shall return.
Katharine
Comment Written 17-Nov-2024
Comment from Terry Broxson
Lee, after spending most of a year with you discussing Christmas, this is a real treat. I've missed, I think FanStory has missed this kind of quality fiction. Great characters. I laughed at the Red Sox only because I know of your passion. Outstanding work, let's see where you take it. Terry.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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Lee, after spending most of a year with you discussing Christmas, this is a real treat. I've missed, I think FanStory has missed this kind of quality fiction. Great characters. I laughed at the Red Sox only because I know of your passion. Outstanding work, let's see where you take it. Terry.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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I get it now! I wondered why I was into this apocalypse thing. You hit the nail on the head. A year of dicussing Christmas jangled me out of my normal rhythym. I'm compensating now with this desparate tale. Ah, as soon as I realized I set this story in Eastern Massachusetts, I knew I had to bring the Red Sox into the picture.
Thanks again, Terry. Peace, Lee
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Once, again your writing surpasses many. These characters are fantastic and it doesn't get any better. Thank you for rejoining us. I truly missed reading your posts.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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Once, again your writing surpasses many. These characters are fantastic and it doesn't get any better. Thank you for rejoining us. I truly missed reading your posts.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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Thank you, Barbara. Truth is, when I was away, I started many stories, but didn't finish a single one. FS, for all its faults, still provides a structure that entices me to write. I'm glad you can relate to my characters. Peace, Lee
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I completely understand and agree. That's why I stay around.
Comment from BethShelby
I'm enjoying your story. For some reason this pair reminds me of the song Me and Bobbie Mcgee. I guess to the two again the world thing. Kenny feels a bit inadequate. He wants to protect his lady and would like it to be just the two of them. The captain protected both of them and Jinx wants to keep him around. Kenny is afraid he is losing her to someone who might protect her better. I'll be anxious to see where this goes.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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I'm enjoying your story. For some reason this pair reminds me of the song Me and Bobbie Mcgee. I guess to the two again the world thing. Kenny feels a bit inadequate. He wants to protect his lady and would like it to be just the two of them. The captain protected both of them and Jinx wants to keep him around. Kenny is afraid he is losing her to someone who might protect her better. I'll be anxious to see where this goes.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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Ah, Beth, you are such a good reader. You picked up on every detail I tried to lay out. Me and Bobby McGee is a good analogy. In fact, I may incorporate that song into the story. I can tell you feel for these kids facing such hardships. You understand what drives them. I wish all readers had your skill. Thanks again, Beth.
Peace, Lee
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Funny, the author pulling for her character. I can identify.
'on the spectrum.' Kenny called you 'pragmatic', - Here are two examples of a campaign I attempted here on FS. Some insist in the rule that quotes MUST be outside the punctuation. I argue that when a quote is actually 'mis-used', that rule goes away with the rule that is already broken. Your 'on the spectrum, as well as 'pragmatic' are clearly being emphasized. They are not quotes within quotes which define the use of single quotes (in the U.S.). --- sorry if that sounded like a lecture. I just saw a high horse and leaped aboard. (smiley face here)
...I knew I was flyin' a kite with no string. - Sounds original. I love it!
Great story. Great work. The stringless kite won the sixth star!
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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Funny, the author pulling for her character. I can identify.
'on the spectrum.' Kenny called you 'pragmatic', - Here are two examples of a campaign I attempted here on FS. Some insist in the rule that quotes MUST be outside the punctuation. I argue that when a quote is actually 'mis-used', that rule goes away with the rule that is already broken. Your 'on the spectrum, as well as 'pragmatic' are clearly being emphasized. They are not quotes within quotes which define the use of single quotes (in the U.S.). --- sorry if that sounded like a lecture. I just saw a high horse and leaped aboard. (smiley face here)
...I knew I was flyin' a kite with no string. - Sounds original. I love it!
Great story. Great work. The stringless kite won the sixth star!
Comment Written 17-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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Thank you, Wayne. The 'kite' line gave me a smile, too. It came from out of the blue. You gotta love it when that happens.
As for the quote thing, I'm not sure if you're in agreement with my usage, or against. I'm not a Strunk and White kinda guy. I write the way I speak. My use of punctuation is more intuitive than studied.
If the purists want to gig me, sobeit.
Thank you, Wayne. I'm glad you enjoyed.
Peace, Lee
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I am in agreement with your usage of single quotes, but in the excerpts I cited, you were inconsistent. One end was inside, the other outside the punctuation.
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Ah, that was just spag. I think we are in agreement concerning the single quotes. I'll try to be less sloppy the next time. Thanks again, Wayne.
Peace, Lee