Isolation
A Trip Inside, Lost Inside6 total reviews
Comment from estory
I like the contemplative mood of this poem, the peaceful resignation in the voice, and the language is soft and warm, a figure standing in harmony with the stage around it. "The skies speak, I hear nothing" captures this mysterious intimation of spiritual echoes we feel in the images of the natural world around us. I also like the second stanza, "The shadows on shadows, falling leaves," the stars and the stillness that speak of peace and a sublime world that we are passing into from this one. Interesting work. estory
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2024
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I like the contemplative mood of this poem, the peaceful resignation in the voice, and the language is soft and warm, a figure standing in harmony with the stage around it. "The skies speak, I hear nothing" captures this mysterious intimation of spiritual echoes we feel in the images of the natural world around us. I also like the second stanza, "The shadows on shadows, falling leaves," the stars and the stillness that speak of peace and a sublime world that we are passing into from this one. Interesting work. estory
Comment Written 10-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2024
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Thanks a lot. Felt this said how I was feeling at that time, not depressed but as you commented. Contemplative, thoughtful, was sitting alone at that time, just enjoying the fall colors.
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images can take on a life of their own. estory
Comment from Peter Jarvis
Your poem is hauntingly beautiful, capturing the essence of solitude and the deep connection between nature and self. The imagery of "voices are deafening" and "lights surround you, define you" creates a powerful contrast between external chaos and internal stillness. The repetition of elements like "cold on cold" and "shadows on shadows" evokes a sense of layering and depth. Your words invite readers to find peace and wonder in the stillness, to embrace the silence and become one with the world around them. It's a profound meditation on the natural world and our place within it.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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Your poem is hauntingly beautiful, capturing the essence of solitude and the deep connection between nature and self. The imagery of "voices are deafening" and "lights surround you, define you" creates a powerful contrast between external chaos and internal stillness. The repetition of elements like "cold on cold" and "shadows on shadows" evokes a sense of layering and depth. Your words invite readers to find peace and wonder in the stillness, to embrace the silence and become one with the world around them. It's a profound meditation on the natural world and our place within it.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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Thanks again, your words say a lot. As you can see mine do too.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Nicely done. I thought this was very creative. The second stanza creates a haunting atmosphere that makes me feel as though I'm walking alongside you in the dark. Beautiful work!
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2024
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Nicely done. I thought this was very creative. The second stanza creates a haunting atmosphere that makes me feel as though I'm walking alongside you in the dark. Beautiful work!
Comment Written 08-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2024
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We have all been there, lived with this feeling at times. My family always was there when I needed them. The dark can speak to us, just look and listen.
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
Rick,
Another awesome poem. You are correct that loneliness can strike at anytime. I think the holidays are rough on some people and would be happy if they could go to sleep and wake up to Jan 1, bypassing all the stuff that comes with Christmas.
Well done my friend.
Cecilia
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2024
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Rick,
Another awesome poem. You are correct that loneliness can strike at anytime. I think the holidays are rough on some people and would be happy if they could go to sleep and wake up to Jan 1, bypassing all the stuff that comes with Christmas.
Well done my friend.
Cecilia
Comment Written 07-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2024
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Thanks again, I feel like I am writing this for you. Obviously my mind travels to unpredictable places.
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Rick,
You're welcome. I think a lot of people are lonely and can relate.
Cecilia
Comment from lancellot
This is very nice, Rick. A well toned free verse with a surreal feeling. I would suggest making another similar for the Free verse contest, if you feel like it. A photo of a glade in shadow would work with this too.
Well done.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2024
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This is very nice, Rick. A well toned free verse with a surreal feeling. I would suggest making another similar for the Free verse contest, if you feel like it. A photo of a glade in shadow would work with this too.
Well done.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2024
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Thanks, your words have helped me before. I see the photos and they say a lot. Feel they may detract my feelings I am trying to convey. Will have to adapt though.
Comment from kahpot
Yes, isolation will breed loneliness, and the darkness becomes very loud as we can hear everything and it becomes nerve wracking journey, very well written****kahpot
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2024
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Yes, isolation will breed loneliness, and the darkness becomes very loud as we can hear everything and it becomes nerve wracking journey, very well written****kahpot
Comment Written 07-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2024
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Can't let the times of isolation control you. Okay to find yourself in some isolation as it is a form of meditation, a quiet examination of your place in this life.