Leaving Hell Behind
Flash fiction--260 words28 total reviews
Comment from MaureenC
Hello IndianaIrish, this most certainly is a well deserved contest winner. It has all the necessary requirements. I loved the read.
Hugs and blessings
Maureen
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2009
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Hello IndianaIrish, this most certainly is a well deserved contest winner. It has all the necessary requirements. I loved the read.
Hugs and blessings
Maureen
Comment Written 07-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2009
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Thank you so much, Maureen, for this wonderful review and your kind comments. I appreciate your taking the time to read the story.
Smiles,
Indy :>)
Comment from adewpearl
Great opening about how hell didn't need a GPS and then chronicling some of the other places hell likes to visit before revealing the narrator's hell. Yes, when cancer invades from within, so quietly and insidiously, it certainly is the stuff of horror stories. I had a high school friend die of this when she was a young mother of three - nothing is more horrific than that. You've written this story effectively. The ending also packs quite a punch. Brooke
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2009
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Great opening about how hell didn't need a GPS and then chronicling some of the other places hell likes to visit before revealing the narrator's hell. Yes, when cancer invades from within, so quietly and insidiously, it certainly is the stuff of horror stories. I had a high school friend die of this when she was a young mother of three - nothing is more horrific than that. You've written this story effectively. The ending also packs quite a punch. Brooke
Comment Written 06-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2009
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Thank you for your kind comments and this wonderful review, Brooke. Your reviews are always so encouraging.
Thanks!
Indy :>)
Comment from Judian James
Oh, this is so excellent. You had my heart beating a mile a minute. I had to stop reading and check your author's notes and then scroll up to "category" to feel certain this wasn't biographical. Phew and well done. Most especially the ending. excellent my friend!
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2009
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Oh, this is so excellent. You had my heart beating a mile a minute. I had to stop reading and check your author's notes and then scroll up to "category" to feel certain this wasn't biographical. Phew and well done. Most especially the ending. excellent my friend!
Comment Written 06-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2009
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Thank you for this wonderful review, Jude. I'm delighted you liked it and I appreciate your taking the time to read the story.
Thanks!
Indy :>)
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Well done you have highlighted well how a person would feel towards this terrible disease, and described it as hell which is of course very apt good luck regards Fuller
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2009
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Well done you have highlighted well how a person would feel towards this terrible disease, and described it as hell which is of course very apt good luck regards Fuller
Comment Written 06-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2009
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Thank you for your kind and encouraging review for this story, Fuller. I appreciate your taking the time to comment.
Indy :>)
Comment from K-Patrick
Damn, Indy. You definitely got the Horror part going, what happened to the Thriller?
It is written very well, yet the message is about as bad as one can offer.
My hell started with one tiny microscopic cell. -- A powerful truth that has touched so many lives in one way or another.
A good write, a bad plot.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2009
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Damn, Indy. You definitely got the Horror part going, what happened to the Thriller?
It is written very well, yet the message is about as bad as one can offer.
My hell started with one tiny microscopic cell. -- A powerful truth that has touched so many lives in one way or another.
A good write, a bad plot.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2009
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Hi K-P! So many diseases can be called a hell on Earth, but I wonder if there's anyone who has not had a family member or friend experience this horror. Thanks for taking the time to read and comment on this flash fiction, K-P!
iNDY :>)
Comment from dtimes3
Good effort but it didn't seem to have any punch or surprise to pull me into the story. The first two paragraphs were solid but then I started losing interest. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2009
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Good effort but it didn't seem to have any punch or surprise to pull me into the story. The first two paragraphs were solid but then I started losing interest. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2009
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Thank you dtimes3 for taking the time to read and review this flash fiction story. I'm so very sorry it didn't give you what you're looking for in a story and left you without interest. I hope you don't give up on me ...maybe the next one you'll like better. Thanks for your comments.
Indy :>)
Comment from prodigal
Well, my friend this certainally fits the bill for the hell found me prompt. You really are a good prose writer. I love your poetry, but this is very good too. I like the word choice you used here. you went into the cells multiplying. I like the one word hell. It is a rough way to go. Cancer is something to be feared. Good writing here, my friend- Sam
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2009
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Well, my friend this certainally fits the bill for the hell found me prompt. You really are a good prose writer. I love your poetry, but this is very good too. I like the word choice you used here. you went into the cells multiplying. I like the one word hell. It is a rough way to go. Cancer is something to be feared. Good writing here, my friend- Sam
Comment Written 05-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2009
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Thank you for this wonderful review, my friend. I always look forward to your comments and support. Thanks, Sam.
Indy :>)
Comment from Teri7
You did a very awesome job on this contest entry. I almost thought you were talking about you until I read it was flash fiction. Glad its not you. Good luck. Hugs, Teri
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2009
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You did a very awesome job on this contest entry. I almost thought you were talking about you until I read it was flash fiction. Glad its not you. Good luck. Hugs, Teri
Comment Written 05-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2009
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Thank you for this great review, Teri, and for your kind comments.
Smiles,
Indy :>)
Comment from Winslow
Dear Irish,
Yes cancer can bring hell to one right here on earth. Some cancers are more invasive than others, like liver or pancreatic. This is well written and quite poignant. Won't it be a great day when this disease if conquered?
Good luck in the contest.
Warm regards,
Winslow
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2009
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Dear Irish,
Yes cancer can bring hell to one right here on earth. Some cancers are more invasive than others, like liver or pancreatic. This is well written and quite poignant. Won't it be a great day when this disease if conquered?
Good luck in the contest.
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 05-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2009
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Thank you, Winslow,for your comments for this story. I so agree with you...it will be the best day ever when cancer is gone forever. Thank you.
Indy :>)
Comment from Hitcher
This is a well written piece Indy and very cleverly put together, I've seen that hell in the eyes of many now unfortunately as have most of us, I'd like to believe that someday soon it will be eradicated, but don't hold my breath. Good luck friend.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2009
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This is a well written piece Indy and very cleverly put together, I've seen that hell in the eyes of many now unfortunately as have most of us, I'd like to believe that someday soon it will be eradicated, but don't hold my breath. Good luck friend.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2009
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Hi ya Hitch! Thank you for this wonderful review and for your encouragement and support. I'm glad you had the chance to read this one. Thanks, Hitcher!!
Indy :>)
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Well done!! ..................................CooooooooooooL!!
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lmao!!!! Thank you, Hitch! :>)