Comment from wierdgrace

Excellent

As always your characters your writing prompt, your contest entry, is hot, perfect, and tells the whole story, no errors and I loved it all, your a true writter, that is why you get the All time best, I havent had one of those in a while.

 Comment Written 11-May-2010

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reply by the author on 12-May-2010

Thank you, Grace. I'm always happy to hear from you. I appreciate your comments. - John

Comment from irishauthorme

Excellent

What can I add that already hasn't been said? This is a great little story, lots of mystery and tension to grab us right away, and then the danger of the girl getting raped, and the interesting twist at the end.
Wow. irish

 Comment Written 10-May-2010

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reply by the author on 10-May-2010

Thanks, Irish. I'm glad it held your interest. Thanks for reading. - John

Comment from azwildrosa

Excellent

hahaha, the man should have said something. i would have done the same thing. they never think about the woman fear of just being attacked. great entry for the contest best wishes!

 Comment Written 10-May-2010

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reply by the author on 10-May-2010

Thanks, Rose. He did deserve it. Lol. - Thesis

Comment from bookishfabler

Excellent

Now that cop should've known better than to creep behind someone he knows is already scared. Nicely done. Again, I'm amazed at the pictures you find for your stories or the stories you find for your pictures.
hugs book

 Comment Written 10-May-2010

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reply by the author on 10-May-2010

Lol, thanks, Book. He deserved to get maced. You're right, he should have identified himself to make her feel secure, not freightened. It's a little of both with the pictures. - John

Comment from Vladilynn

Excellent

Poor guy!! He's just trying to help her....or maybe she got her first?? We don't know some officers too..sometimes they got cookoo in the head. Lol

Good luck John,
Love much
Lynn:0)

 Comment Written 10-May-2010

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reply by the author on 10-May-2010

Hi, Lynn. Thanks for your fun review. - John

Comment from sugardog

Excellent

Yikes!! You had me with this one, John. Nice job on your scary flash fiction piece and way to end it with a great twist! Poor police officer...lucky for her though :) Good luck in the contest. Dana

 Comment Written 09-May-2010

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reply by the author on 10-May-2010

Thanks, Dana. The police officer should have been much more aware of the fear prevalent in the building. It was a good wake-up call for him. - John

reply by sugardog on 10-May-2010

You're welcome! Dana

Comment from Sandollar

Excellent

You've written this very well. It was suspenseful and moved quickly. It fit the genre very well. The photo you chose is appropriate to the story. I think this should do well in the contest. Best of luck.

I found no errors.

Sandollar

 Comment Written 09-May-2010

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reply by the author on 10-May-2010

Thanks for your comments, Sandollar. I appreciate it. - Thesis

Comment from jack silver

Excellent

I enjoyed reading this one and thought it was very funny with the ending you had with it. best of luck in winning the contest

from
Jack

 Comment Written 09-May-2010

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reply by the author on 10-May-2010

Thanks, Jack. I'm glad you enjoyed the read. - Thesis

reply by jack silver on 10-May-2010

no probs

Comment from Belinda

Excellent

Oh wow... but I can understand her terror. The undercover cop should have acted more cleverly than have himself assaulted. Another of your interesting writes, Thesis.

 Comment Written 09-May-2010

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reply by the author on 10-May-2010

Thank you, Belinda. Yes, the cop should have understood her fear. I appreciate your comments. - Thesis

Comment from spellbound

Excellent

Well, the officer should have announced himself. Too bad he didn't. Paid the price for his neglect.

Well written. Smooth. Love the Flash Fiction twist.

Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 09-May-2010

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reply by the author on 10-May-2010

Thank you for reading the story. Yes, the cop behaved badly and got what he deserved for scaring her. Regards. - Thesis