Falling One
A falling blossom affected in flight by the wind.24 total reviews
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello Polele,
This poem made me smile. You have created beautiful imagery within. "Falling One" was a pleasure to read
and lifted my spirits. Good luck in the contest.
Regards, LateBloomer
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2011
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Hello Polele,
This poem made me smile. You have created beautiful imagery within. "Falling One" was a pleasure to read
and lifted my spirits. Good luck in the contest.
Regards, LateBloomer
Comment Written 05-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2011
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Thank you LateBloomer for the kind review.
Comment from Mari_
Very beautiful!
I find your poem very visual. Your syllable count is perfect.
A picture would of enhanced the look of the poem but your words are still amazing. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2011
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Very beautiful!
I find your poem very visual. Your syllable count is perfect.
A picture would of enhanced the look of the poem but your words are still amazing. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2011
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Thank you for your helpful review...still looking for a pic that will do it justice.
Comment from Bayberry
This is a lovely vision to gift the reader with on an early September morning. It's a lyrical study of the movement of an earthbound blossom. I enjoyed reading it very much.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2011
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This is a lovely vision to gift the reader with on an early September morning. It's a lyrical study of the movement of an earthbound blossom. I enjoyed reading it very much.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2011
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Thank you Josie Rayne...for the review. (:))
Comment from mumsyone
A floating blossom,
Dancing in the morning breeze,
Gracefully descends.
A nice 5-7-5, with perfect syllable count and presenting a nice picture for your readers.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2011
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A floating blossom,
Dancing in the morning breeze,
Gracefully descends.
A nice 5-7-5, with perfect syllable count and presenting a nice picture for your readers.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the review. (:))
Comment from psalmist
This is lovely and an excellent contest entry. I can easily envision the petal slowly drifting down, tossed by the wind. It has a gentle, serene feel to it. Good luck.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2011
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This is lovely and an excellent contest entry. I can easily envision the petal slowly drifting down, tossed by the wind. It has a gentle, serene feel to it. Good luck.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2011
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Many thanks psalmist.
Comment from Melspoems
This is a very nice 5-7-5 poem.
Great imagery with the floating/descending blossom dancing gracefully in the breeze.
Great satori line, summing up the first two lines.
The only improvemnet I would recommend would be to select a picture to go with it.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2011
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This is a very nice 5-7-5 poem.
Great imagery with the floating/descending blossom dancing gracefully in the breeze.
Great satori line, summing up the first two lines.
The only improvemnet I would recommend would be to select a picture to go with it.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2011
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Thank you Melspoems for honest review...will see what I can do.
Comment from Belinda
The way you describe it, I can see the blossom in my mind's eye. So you are right not to complement this haiku with an artwork. They're graceful, both the flower and the poem...:)
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2011
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The way you describe it, I can see the blossom in my mind's eye. So you are right not to complement this haiku with an artwork. They're graceful, both the flower and the poem...:)
Comment Written 05-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2011
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Thanks Belinda...oops! not adding an artwork was not intentional, but I do see what you mean...indeed I do...and thank you.
Comment from Jen Gentry
This is one heck of a good haiku with a most excellent satori You have wit talent and experience, welcome to fanstory my dear I know you are going to be a great hit.
Blessings
Jenny
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2011
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This is one heck of a good haiku with a most excellent satori You have wit talent and experience, welcome to fanstory my dear I know you are going to be a great hit.
Blessings
Jenny
Comment Written 04-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2011
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That is very nice of you! Thank you very much!(:))
Comment from Betty517
A floating blossom,
Dancing in the morning breeze,
Gracefully descends.
Beautifully done with so few words. I'm watching that blossom flying in the wind. Great poem.
Betty
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2011
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A floating blossom,
Dancing in the morning breeze,
Gracefully descends.
Beautifully done with so few words. I'm watching that blossom flying in the wind. Great poem.
Betty
Comment Written 04-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2011
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Thanks for the nice review.(:))
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written polele, a great job writing this poem about the blossoms that fall to the ground in slow descent, i enjoyed reading this, full of imagery, i wish you the best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2011
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this is very well written polele, a great job writing this poem about the blossoms that fall to the ground in slow descent, i enjoyed reading this, full of imagery, i wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the 5 star rating...cheers. (:))