Expressing Myself
Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "A Day at the Park"Writing my way out of depression / mental illness
5 total reviews
Comment from Espresso momma
Cute! I wonder if they do talk their own speak? They probably do. lol. Thanks for the cute poem, loved the photo too. Have a great night.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2012
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Cute! I wonder if they do talk their own speak? They probably do. lol. Thanks for the cute poem, loved the photo too. Have a great night.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2012
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Wow, thank you for all the stars! YOu made my night, for sure!!
Comment from adewpearl
A fun pairing of art and poem
Your poem is in good 5/7/5 form
I love the conversation among geese as I imagine their friend Gertie nipping at some person at the park who failed to bring bread to appease them LOL Brooke :-)
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2012
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A fun pairing of art and poem
Your poem is in good 5/7/5 form
I love the conversation among geese as I imagine their friend Gertie nipping at some person at the park who failed to bring bread to appease them LOL Brooke :-)
Comment Written 18-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2012
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Thank you so much adewpearl, for your kind words and generous rating!
Comment from Galactia
That's a very creative 5'7'5. I loved how you told the story and brought the characters alive in just 17 syllables and 3 short lines.
well done, this should have went into the 5'7'5 contest i recon.
Great job
Regards
Tia
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2012
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That's a very creative 5'7'5. I loved how you told the story and brought the characters alive in just 17 syllables and 3 short lines.
well done, this should have went into the 5'7'5 contest i recon.
Great job
Regards
Tia
Comment Written 18-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2012
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Thank you so much, Tia, for your encouraging words and observations and for the generous review! much appreciation..
Comment from catch22
This is a very cute and humorous little 5-7-5 poem. I love the use of personification of the ducks gossiping to each other like two older ladies would in real life. The syllable count and form was good too.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2012
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This is a very cute and humorous little 5-7-5 poem. I love the use of personification of the ducks gossiping to each other like two older ladies would in real life. The syllable count and form was good too.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2012
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Thank you so much gail, for your kind words and generous rating!
Comment from Wonder100
I like the title. Could have used a better picture. It is a 5/7/5 poem not a 5/6/5. The poem flow wasnt that good. Other than that the color scheme was good.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2012
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I like the title. Could have used a better picture. It is a 5/7/5 poem not a 5/6/5. The poem flow wasnt that good. Other than that the color scheme was good.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2012
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