No Man's Land
Forever is endless37 total reviews
Comment from mommerry
You have a terrific imagination and a great way of drawing a picture with words. Your grammar was perfect in my humble opinion and I have nothing negative to offer. Good job!
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2012
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You have a terrific imagination and a great way of drawing a picture with words. Your grammar was perfect in my humble opinion and I have nothing negative to offer. Good job!
Comment Written 15-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2012
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Hi there! Thank you Miss Merry! :) It's so nice to hear from you and I send you a heartfelt thank you for this very kind review...OH! Congratulations on your win for the Now And Then contest! Happy writing!! Susan
Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran
Hi SORRY FOER BEING AWAY. Iwill try to get through as much as I cAN TODAY. a GOOD WRITE THE STORY WAS WELL PACED AND KEPT MY INTEREST. Molly[mary ANN]
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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Hi SORRY FOER BEING AWAY. Iwill try to get through as much as I cAN TODAY. a GOOD WRITE THE STORY WAS WELL PACED AND KEPT MY INTEREST. Molly[mary ANN]
Comment Written 14-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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Hi Molly! It's okay! I understand. I will be busy too. Just not enuff time in a day...and health stuff to contend with, it's just never-ending. I thank you so much, for this kind review and the extra star ... It's always nice to hear from you! xoxo. Susan
Comment from Purple Lily
That's a captivating story. I like the mood you create out there in the open farmlands, the spookiness of it, and the dispair of the boy, and later the man, of a life with no future, and yet, forced to live it out...
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2012
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That's a captivating story. I like the mood you create out there in the open farmlands, the spookiness of it, and the dispair of the boy, and later the man, of a life with no future, and yet, forced to live it out...
Comment Written 13-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2012
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hi Lily! Thank you so much for enjoying this weirdness. Glad you understood it too! Watch the skies! lol! Hug, Susan
Comment from Mastery
Great job with this Suse. You have some wonderful images in this piece.
"As the morning woke the birds, and the sun struck him in the face, he opened his eyes to the slobber of an Angus bull who was standing over him,"
You do a good job of showing for the most part rather than telling the story.
Bravo! Good job, Suse. Bob
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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Great job with this Suse. You have some wonderful images in this piece.
"As the morning woke the birds, and the sun struck him in the face, he opened his eyes to the slobber of an Angus bull who was standing over him,"
You do a good job of showing for the most part rather than telling the story.
Bravo! Good job, Suse. Bob
Comment Written 12-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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Hi Bob! Thank you...I'm very grateful for this kind note! I am told I do tell too much. But it's just me. Not good I guess. I have delved into why I don't do dialogue that much. It's hard to type it. All the ", ', " " 's?? Ha! I'm lazy! lol! I will try to do better. Your work always has a good mix. ! I haven't forgotten you, just behind like you would not believe... :( hugs, and a thousand thank you's Bob!! Susan
Comment from poetbear
The beautiful writing and sensitivity crafted into a beautifully written work of art.
A pleasure and honor to read and review great talent.
Thanks for writing.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2012
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The beautiful writing and sensitivity crafted into a beautifully written work of art.
A pleasure and honor to read and review great talent.
Thanks for writing.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2012
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Hi there! What a kind and wonderful note...your enthusiasm and time for me is humbling, and what a thrill it is, to see that you enjoyed this. I apologize for another pasted thank you....I have read all these super reviews and love you all, for each and every one of them!! Sincerely, Susan
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
As always, a most enjoyable read,
Susan... and well presented... a
good contender for the contest..
with each step[,](;) they always put
So behind.
Good luck to you, my friend.
Margaret
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2012
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As always, a most enjoyable read,
Susan... and well presented... a
good contender for the contest..
with each step[,](;) they always put
So behind.
Good luck to you, my friend.
Margaret
Comment Written 12-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2012
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Hi there! What a kind and wonderful note...your enthusiasm and time for me is humbling, and what a thrill it is, to see that you enjoyed this. I apologize for another pasted thank you....I have read all these super reviews and love you all, for each and every one of them!! Sincerely, Susan
Comment from camaria
Excellent use of the required paragraph and great entry! I loved the boyish imagining - the cape and the sword - as it demonstrated such a painful innocence, a boy young enough to use his imagination, but made old before his time by the abductions.
Only one sentance that seemed to catch me:
And the man kept working, never getting close to anyone and tried to fool himself into believing he'd be okay
Just think it reads better as:
And the man kept working, never getting close to anyone, and trying to fool himself into believing he'd be okay.
Just my opinion though. Best of luck in the contest and congrats on your recognition! Looking forward to reading more of your wonderful writing.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2012
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Excellent use of the required paragraph and great entry! I loved the boyish imagining - the cape and the sword - as it demonstrated such a painful innocence, a boy young enough to use his imagination, but made old before his time by the abductions.
Only one sentance that seemed to catch me:
And the man kept working, never getting close to anyone and tried to fool himself into believing he'd be okay
Just think it reads better as:
And the man kept working, never getting close to anyone, and trying to fool himself into believing he'd be okay.
Just my opinion though. Best of luck in the contest and congrats on your recognition! Looking forward to reading more of your wonderful writing.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2012
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Hi there! What a kind and wonderful note...your enthusiasm and time for me is humbling, and what a thrill it is, to see that you enjoyed this. I apologize for another pasted thank you....I have read all these super reviews and love you all, for each and every one of them!! Sincerely, Susan
Comment from Gideon Roth
Hello again Susan. I love this genre anyway but to read a well written story like this by you was a real pleasure in deed. Great storyline and very engaging. This story has the potential of being expanded in a big way. Excellent action, holds the interest, leaves the reader wanting more. Keep it up and have a great day of writing...Tim
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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Hello again Susan. I love this genre anyway but to read a well written story like this by you was a real pleasure in deed. Great storyline and very engaging. This story has the potential of being expanded in a big way. Excellent action, holds the interest, leaves the reader wanting more. Keep it up and have a great day of writing...Tim
Comment Written 12-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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Hi! I'm glad you like ufo stories...do you watch the documentaries about them on the History Channel? I am just fascinated. It sure puts questions in ones mind tho about God. And the Bible. Who knows. We'll all find out the day we pass I guess. Thanks Tim...have a great week!! Susan
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Hello Susan. Yes, I do watch those type of shows and have spent many year in study regarding these issues. I think you will like my next new story "The Midnight Crow." The premise and story line will be structured with a Christian book publisher in mind and it will address some of these same issues. I am looking forward to putting my notes and outline into a completed story. Keep up the great writing. I enjoy reading everything you post...Tim
Comment from G.B. Smith
Hello once again Susan
First of all let me congratulate you on your FS recognition. That is superb and you are so talented. Now to this one. This is very well written, you did a magnificent job writing this story about the man who was picked up every month for a sperm deposit. I enjoyed it. Best of luck in the contest
Beaqr
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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Hello once again Susan
First of all let me congratulate you on your FS recognition. That is superb and you are so talented. Now to this one. This is very well written, you did a magnificent job writing this story about the man who was picked up every month for a sperm deposit. I enjoyed it. Best of luck in the contest
Beaqr
Comment Written 12-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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Hi Bear...thank you so much. I'm just glad you liked this and am especially grateful for your kind note...Susan
Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Susan:)
Your story certainly meets all the contest criteria, but I think it is too vague to be a strong contest entry. The story needs a bit more development. Perhaps a description of the first capture. Maybe mention of recent UFO sightings.
This could also be a recurring nightmare and not any part of reality. Maybe he sleepwalks into the pastute or suffers from seizeure and memory loss.
You have all the elements of a good alien abduction Sci-fi story. It just isn't quite up to your usual standards of excellence. Let me know if you revise this story.
Good luck in the contest.
Love and Irish hugs, my friend.
Roger
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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Hi Susan:)
Your story certainly meets all the contest criteria, but I think it is too vague to be a strong contest entry. The story needs a bit more development. Perhaps a description of the first capture. Maybe mention of recent UFO sightings.
This could also be a recurring nightmare and not any part of reality. Maybe he sleepwalks into the pastute or suffers from seizeure and memory loss.
You have all the elements of a good alien abduction Sci-fi story. It just isn't quite up to your usual standards of excellence. Let me know if you revise this story.
Good luck in the contest.
Love and Irish hugs, my friend.
Roger
Comment Written 11-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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Oh dear! I will work on this. I trust you and the others too so this needs work. Thank you, and I will let you know asap? Hugs too Roger! SO sorry... :) Susan