Poems By AnnieDawn
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Comment from smudge
A picture that does not sit well with the poem. The poem has a very simple theme of unrequited love. A charm in its use of language and easy rhyme. The picture spoils it for me.
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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2014
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A picture that does not sit well with the poem. The poem has a very simple theme of unrequited love. A charm in its use of language and easy rhyme. The picture spoils it for me.
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Comment Written 22-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2014
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Thank you for taking the time for your review and comments. I am sorry that you do not like the picture.
Comment from paulah60
A time-honoured lament. Who doesn't know the pain of unrequited adolescent love? It's certainly providential though when you run into the one who's spurned you, and it dawns on you, "WTF was I thinking?!" (my experience) At the time, little do we know that we're actually being 'looked after'!
A nicely penned aabb piece that says it all.
Cheers
Paula
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2014
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A time-honoured lament. Who doesn't know the pain of unrequited adolescent love? It's certainly providential though when you run into the one who's spurned you, and it dawns on you, "WTF was I thinking?!" (my experience) At the time, little do we know that we're actually being 'looked after'!
A nicely penned aabb piece that says it all.
Cheers
Paula
Comment Written 11-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2014
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Thank you for your review and comments.
Comment from Sueellen11
Oh my friend,, sad love poem,, a kiss that will never be ,, you picture puts a complete meaning to your write,,,for the young girl,, brought back memories of my first puppy love,,, a kiss I never received,, I was so I love with him for many years through my childhood to my late teens,, he never knew just how much I loved him,,, I still have memories of him,, but I love my husband more,, but loved the memory of my first puppy love,,great entry,,good luck,,blessings sueellen
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2013
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Oh my friend,, sad love poem,, a kiss that will never be ,, you picture puts a complete meaning to your write,,,for the young girl,, brought back memories of my first puppy love,,, a kiss I never received,, I was so I love with him for many years through my childhood to my late teens,, he never knew just how much I loved him,,, I still have memories of him,, but I love my husband more,, but loved the memory of my first puppy love,,great entry,,good luck,,blessings sueellen
Comment Written 08-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2013
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Thanks so much for your review and comments. Haven't we all, at some time, gone through. it.
Comment from rod007
Extremely well written, the warmth and feeling sparks in my heart. I especially liked these lines which conveyed the hopelessness and despair:
"But now I sit here with a sigh
As days keep slowly passing by
I count how many days have gone
With not a word to cast hope on"
Well done.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2013
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Extremely well written, the warmth and feeling sparks in my heart. I especially liked these lines which conveyed the hopelessness and despair:
"But now I sit here with a sigh
As days keep slowly passing by
I count how many days have gone
With not a word to cast hope on"
Well done.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2013
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Thank you again for your review and comments.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Teenagers do love to tease and toy with the emotions of the opposite sex.
I really liked this realistic and sensitive outpouring of rejection and loss.
Don't we just pine over the silliest things. Heck, there's plenty more fish in thhe sea.Lol.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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Teenagers do love to tease and toy with the emotions of the opposite sex.
I really liked this realistic and sensitive outpouring of rejection and loss.
Don't we just pine over the silliest things. Heck, there's plenty more fish in thhe sea.Lol.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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Thanks so much for your review and comments.
Comment from TamzinWhite
Cleverly woven story telling in poetic form. The picture you chose to go with it gives it an innocence that matches the rhythm. I love the way you switch from future to past in the final stanza whilst still hanging in the present. Very clever.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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Cleverly woven story telling in poetic form. The picture you chose to go with it gives it an innocence that matches the rhythm. I love the way you switch from future to past in the final stanza whilst still hanging in the present. Very clever.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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Thanks so much for your review and comments.
Comment from harmony13
Excellent poem! The poem flowed and connected well. The author's poem is innocent and sweet. The words used were descriptive, showed emotion and were creative. The artwork is perfect and complimented this poem.
Thank you, harmony13
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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Excellent poem! The poem flowed and connected well. The author's poem is innocent and sweet. The words used were descriptive, showed emotion and were creative. The artwork is perfect and complimented this poem.
Thank you, harmony13
Comment Written 18-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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Thank you for your review and kind comments
Comment from clbritch
Your poem reads so smoothly. It has good rhyme and describes well the longing for the kiss from him. Nice little picture to compliment your poem. I love, the promised kiss still unfulfilled. Good poem.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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Your poem reads so smoothly. It has good rhyme and describes well the longing for the kiss from him. Nice little picture to compliment your poem. I love, the promised kiss still unfulfilled. Good poem.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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Thank you for your review and kind comments
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your welcome
Comment from Selina Stambi
Swe-eet - tender, saturated with the yearning of extreme youth.
How beautifully you've captured the mood and the voice.
Nice done, Anne. All the best in the contest.
Love,
xx
Sonali :)
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2013
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Swe-eet - tender, saturated with the yearning of extreme youth.
How beautifully you've captured the mood and the voice.
Nice done, Anne. All the best in the contest.
Love,
xx
Sonali :)
Comment Written 18-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2013
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Thanks so much for your reviews and comments.
Comment from livelylinda
AnnieDawn: boys have no clue as to what a young girl wants nor what is important to her. I have a 17 year old grandson who never has a girlfriend and I asked him why. . .he stated that he doesn't understand women, doesn't know what they want because it seems to change day to day. His first heart break came at age 8. He was sad for days when his little girlfriend decided that she liked another boy better. I don't think he has ever recovered. . .I digress; your poem is melancholy and tells an age old story. . .everyone probably has this same kind of memory. Good write. livelylinda
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2013
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AnnieDawn: boys have no clue as to what a young girl wants nor what is important to her. I have a 17 year old grandson who never has a girlfriend and I asked him why. . .he stated that he doesn't understand women, doesn't know what they want because it seems to change day to day. His first heart break came at age 8. He was sad for days when his little girlfriend decided that she liked another boy better. I don't think he has ever recovered. . .I digress; your poem is melancholy and tells an age old story. . .everyone probably has this same kind of memory. Good write. livelylinda
Comment Written 18-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2013
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Thanks so much for your reviews and comments.