My Heart Will Ache For You
Words to a song.17 total reviews
Comment from velvetElvis
you know how much I enjoy song lyrics...
*lovely sentiment
*rhymes work well
*flows nicely
*tells a sad and touching story
well done!
thank you for the author's notes, I wish you well, the catharsis of writing will help ease the pain.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2014
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you know how much I enjoy song lyrics...
*lovely sentiment
*rhymes work well
*flows nicely
*tells a sad and touching story
well done!
thank you for the author's notes, I wish you well, the catharsis of writing will help ease the pain.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much velvetElvis. I do appreciate your most lovely review. Miss Sally
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Thank you so much velvetElvis. I do appreciate your most lovely review. Miss Sally
Comment from Nichola
Good consonance with the -s- sound in seems-saw-smile-say, -w- sound in when-walking. Great assonance in alone-home. Nice end rhyming in day-way, fine-mine, smile-while, go-know. I feel the heartbreak as I read the words of your powerful poem. Well written.
Nichola
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2014
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Good consonance with the -s- sound in seems-saw-smile-say, -w- sound in when-walking. Great assonance in alone-home. Nice end rhyming in day-way, fine-mine, smile-while, go-know. I feel the heartbreak as I read the words of your powerful poem. Well written.
Nichola
Comment Written 15-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2014
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thank you so much Nichola, for the very nice review. I so appreciate it. Miss Sally
Comment from adewpearl
strong rhymes
nice alliteration in saw you smile and say
and when I'm walking
excellent use of enjambment to keep thoughts flowing line to line
A poignant expression of longing for a lost love. How wonderful that you shared such a powerful love that you still miss him this much so many years later :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
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strong rhymes
nice alliteration in saw you smile and say
and when I'm walking
excellent use of enjambment to keep thoughts flowing line to line
A poignant expression of longing for a lost love. How wonderful that you shared such a powerful love that you still miss him this much so many years later :-) Brooke
Comment Written 11-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
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Thanks Brooke for your very lovely review and kind words. WE had almost 35 years together. Miss sally
Comment from GWinterwin
A very good little poem here with words that say so much. Your word flow is good and rhyming as well, as you tell of being left alone is your loved one is called to heaven.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
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A very good little poem here with words that say so much. Your word flow is good and rhyming as well, as you tell of being left alone is your loved one is called to heaven.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
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thank you George for the very nice review. Miss Sally
Comment from Terrie DeGolier
I can feel your loss after all these years. I extend my condolences to you. I enjoyed your poem but the more I look at the picture I'm not sure if its confusion, electrical impulses of a heart beat, tumble weed or what.Please don't take offense to my criticism of your choice of picture. I suggest a lonely lady with tears, or holding her head in despair. But if six stars were available I would give them to you for your poem. Terrie
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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I can feel your loss after all these years. I extend my condolences to you. I enjoyed your poem but the more I look at the picture I'm not sure if its confusion, electrical impulses of a heart beat, tumble weed or what.Please don't take offense to my criticism of your choice of picture. I suggest a lonely lady with tears, or holding her head in despair. But if six stars were available I would give them to you for your poem. Terrie
Comment Written 10-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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thank you so much Terrie. I do appreciate it. I couldn't find the picture I wanted. this is a broken heart, I guess. anyway, thanks for the most lovely review. Miss Sally
Comment from mickbey
This poem is full of feeling and emotion, the author notes give added meaning, the poem is beautifully expressed and written in a smooth, easy to read style, a very touching and meaningful piece of work.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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This poem is full of feeling and emotion, the author notes give added meaning, the poem is beautifully expressed and written in a smooth, easy to read style, a very touching and meaningful piece of work.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Thanks much mick for the lovely review. I love it. Miss Sally
Comment from Just Pete
A truly wonderful epitaph to the man you loved so much. The poem is well rhymed and constructed - easy to read. Your skill as a poet really shines in this work.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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A truly wonderful epitaph to the man you loved so much. The poem is well rhymed and constructed - easy to read. Your skill as a poet really shines in this work.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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thank you Pete for this lovely review. I greatly appreciate it. so glad you like this poem. It is one of my favorites. Miss Sally
Comment from Sasha
I don't think we ever really get over the loss of a loved one. My mother lost my seven-year old sister in a tragic accident and never fully recovered. Time does soften the pain but the pain is always there. Beautiful, deeply moving poem that I am sure many can relate to.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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I don't think we ever really get over the loss of a loved one. My mother lost my seven-year old sister in a tragic accident and never fully recovered. Time does soften the pain but the pain is always there. Beautiful, deeply moving poem that I am sure many can relate to.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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thank you Sasha. I am glad you like this poem and sorry about your sister. I think losing a child is very hurtful and worse than anything. LOL The pain never goes away. Thanks Miss Sally
Comment from Aussie
A heartfelt poem for your husband who looks over your shoulder and waits for you to come home. Soul mates are so special and we know earth is only the launching pad for our lives to be sorted - Karma sorted out, off we go to our real home, well done poet.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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A heartfelt poem for your husband who looks over your shoulder and waits for you to come home. Soul mates are so special and we know earth is only the launching pad for our lives to be sorted - Karma sorted out, off we go to our real home, well done poet.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Thank you Kay this is one of my favorites and I am glad you like it. Thanks so much for the 6 stars. I do appreciate it. Miss Sally
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
What a wonderful, melodic poem of remembrance, love, sadness and victory. Even while you acknowledge that the Savior called your husband home, the heart ache is still there. Well done, Carolyn
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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What a wonderful, melodic poem of remembrance, love, sadness and victory. Even while you acknowledge that the Savior called your husband home, the heart ache is still there. Well done, Carolyn
Comment Written 10-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Thanks for the lovely review, Carolyn. I so love this poem and glad you like it too. MIss Sally