Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

Yikes, Debbie. I almost couldn't ...bear... to read the ending of this all too realistic tiny terror tale. That ain't Yogi stalking around outside her tent in the forest at night. And he sure ain't bringin' your poor doomed protagonist a pic-a-nic basket, either. Instead, I think his intentions were for her to be the picnic lunch.

A great little terror trek through nature. Mother Nature can be just as deadly as she is beautiful sometimes.

Thanks for another fantastic contribution to our book.

~Dean

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 05-Aug-2015

Thank you, my friend~Debbie

Comment from Jumbo J

Excellent

Hi Debbie,
you had to take it there, didn't you? That one extra line that conjured up some horrific images... one would of thought by 'marking' her territory, the bear may have been put off... but this just may have been a pissed-off male bear with a grudge against humans turning their space into a toilet... Hey? Did she ever take those photo's? Well, I had to ask! Smile))))))))).

Great story to create a little havoc in one's mind, especially if it's bear season... luckily we only have Koala's down in this neck of the woods.

With our thoughts we create,
an instinct for danger,
James vx's

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 07-Aug-2015

We have great big brown and black hears in the woods. Every so often, mountain lions wander into our towns. I've heard koalas aren't necessarily nice. I do hope you are okay, my dear friend~Debbie xx

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi there,

There is foreshadowing here, and we know what we're getting in this anthology. A charming tale up until that last line.

Chilling
GMG

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 06-Aug-2015

Thank you, my friend~Debbie

Comment from Jay Squires

Excellent

"Don't leave your food out. Be sure it is safely secured in your car, we've had a problem with bears this summer. [After "car" either change the comma to a semicolon; or you could add a "since" after the comma. The problem is that you have a run-on sentence the way it is now.]

After opening the tent flap, she saw them, bear paw [You have a completed sentence, ending with "them". You need either a period, semicolon, a colon (since it is introducing the following sentence), or a double dash. Just no comma.

Interesting chapter filled with tension. We know something is going to happen.

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2015

Thank you, Jay/ I never really learned where semi-colons are used. Any help is appreciated, my friend. ~Thank you~Debbie

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

I am so glad the last line is fiction. I would hate it if anybody got hurt by a bear, but they are wild animals. Thank you for sharing this story. I am sure there were signs about feeding the bears.

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2015

Thank you, my friend~Debbie

Comment from Nosha17

Excellent

Those bears sure know how to steal food when they are hungry. Very scary, we don't have bears over here, just seagulls who steal your fish and chips while you are eating them on the beach. Well written short story with a good message, watch out for the bears, I am sure they are dangerous. Faye

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2015

Thank you, my friend~Debbie

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Scary story, my kind. LOL
I love the suspense and the turn in events at the end. I would be terrified and the last thing on my mind would be taking a picture. Good job!

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2015

Thank you, my friend. Glad you enjoyed~Debbie

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi, Debbie...

_ No thank you! No bears, no pictures, no problems! (*<*)
_ True story means that bear was waaaaaay too close.
_ Luckily, the last line was an add-on and not a fact.
_ Good story, my friend.

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*;*)

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2015

Thank you, my friend~Debbie

Comment from barkingdog

Excellent

Now, I'm glad that I never took the kids camping. Too unprotected for me. I like walls and ceilings.
What a ditzy broad, is all that I can say. Her and her selfies. This time she may have gotten a good shot of a bear, but it will be her last.
Great final sentence-what a visual.

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2015

Thank you, my friend. Have a good night~Debbie

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

I don't like camping out in the woods. That is the home of the wild animals. I rather like the comforts of my home. May you week be blessed my friend. Patricia

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2015

I used to love it. It would be impossible now. Hope you are feeling better~Debbie

reply by patcelaw on 14-Jul-2015

Still having a lot of pain in my back and leg.

reply by Anonymous Member on 18-Jul-2015

Still having a lot of pain in my back and leg.