Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

Oh this is so cute, and so true. What is more tempting than a locked box? I have a friend who took a hacksaw to a locked cabinet of her hubby's. Totally ruined the thing. What she said she found inside--she didn't like. They got a divorce. I enjoyed reading this. Marilyn/BeasPeas

 Comment Written 12-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Sep-2015

Thanks for your review and coments. A comical ending to your story and my grandsons did not have any better luck when the box was finally opened. A few pieces of old costume jewelry. I drew the line at the chain saw.

Comment from Selina Stambi

Excellent

A peppy, happy sort of wee poem, AnnieDawn.

There's something irresistible about those locked boxes!

Best wishes for the contest. Don't think I've bumped into you before. Nice to meet you. :)

Sonali

 Comment Written 03-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015

Thanks for your comments and review.I appreciate your time.

Comment from Lulube

Excellent

a good, humorous 5-3-5. doesn't that just bug the hell of you? What's in that box? chain saw time?

good light hearted poem

lulube

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015

Thank you for your kind comments. My grandkids had a blast trying to open it and it rattled which made it even more of a challenge.

reply by Lulube on 03-Sep-2015

Did they ever find out what was in it?
Must drive them crazy.

lulube

Comment from Benjamin Valencia

Excellent

Hi Annie. Good submission for the Lune. Format and attached picture well reflects your story. A good one at that which tells a whole story in just a few words. I like the 'Shucks' because its so innocent of them never knowing what great good or great evil there is inside. Good luck and cheers.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015

Thank you so much for kind words in reviewing and making my reviews 14 and not 13 an unlucky number. Just in jest. Honestly though I thank you.

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

What a fun Lune! I love that you took the picture specifically for the poem, for me it is usually the opposite, I am a very visual person so at times I will look at a picture and the poem will come next. You did an awesome job!

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Sep-2015

Thank you so very much for your fun comments. I appreciate the time for the review also.

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

Well where was this silver box when Pandora was around and let evil,into the world....sheesh. If only...
I do wonder what's in it....well we know one thing...air
Solved
Sorry my muse Rick O Shea has taken over the keyboard...down Rick
Loved it
God bless

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Sep-2015

I was so pleased with your review and comments. Thank you for your time. Actually the temptation was that it rattled.

Comment from kiwisteveh

Excellent

I see the main strength of your Lune poem lying in its aural qualities, that is in the sound, especially of the lat few words 'shucks, I can't pick locks. This also adds rhyme to your poem - not required but adding extra interest here.

Good luck.

Steve

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Sep-2015

I was so pleased with your review and comments. Thank you for your time.

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

There probably was nothing inside anyway. It is nice to see a lune laid out as it should be, either flushed left or right to expose the shape to its best advantage. This is the sort of succinct statement that I am sure these short forms of poetry were desifned for.

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Sep-2015

I was so pleased with your review and comments. Thank you for your time. The box jingled with some old jewelry inside.

Comment from mbagby23

Excellent

Either can I. I wonder if it holds money or important papers. That is a great picture. This is a good poem for this contest. Good luck.

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Sep-2015

I was so pleased with your review and comments. Thank you for your time. The box jingled with some old jewelry inside.

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

Your lune is in perfect form with the perfect syllable count. I bet the grandchildren had fun trying though:)
~teresa~

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2015

Thank you for your review and comments and yes they had a ball trying to open the box.