Comment from heyjude

Excellent

Annie, Isn't it great that God doesn't care if our voices are
beautiful. It probably sounds beautiful to Him even if it
doesn't to you. Just keep using the talents you have. Songs
do inspire us and bring us closer to God. I enjoyed reading
your poem. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 16-May-2016

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reply by the author on 16-May-2016

Thank you so much for your kind review. I meant every word of that poem. My children were born with the talent for singing and we have no idea who passed it on but it has been passed on to their children so they have been blessed too.

Comment from WalkerMan

Excellent

Your beautiful voice IS heard, AnnieDawn, and you ARE singing with these words. I like your rhyming pattern, too. You don't need a lot of talents, just a few that are well cultivated. Clearly, traditional verse is one of them. Well done, worthy competitor!

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 01-May-2016

Your review is much appreciated. Have a great day.

reply by WalkerMan on 01-May-2016

You are welcome. You are indeed helping to make this a great day.

Comment from An Awakened Heart

Excellent

Beautiful. You may feel lacking in voice, but I don't see it. I hear your beautiful voice in the words you wrote.

I love the rhythm and style.

I'm sure the Lord does too!

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2016

Thanks so much for reviewing. This is one that I wrote years ago and, with a bunch of others, had tucked away. Just found an old folder and decided to try some of my old stuff. Thanks again.

Comment from Sankey

Excellent

Hey good friend. I wish you well in the Competition. A real testimony here. You know we all have our talents in God's service. "I am the Vine ye are the branches" Jesus said. As someone once said it would be a battle to get in the pulpit if we were all preachers. Or we could all play an instrument or all sing. There are many gifts including being one to pray for others. Even giving is a gift. God Bless.

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2016

Thank you so much. This was written about 25 years ago. I did some revision but it remained about the same. I have so much tucked away and sometimes get one out. I still can't sing...lol

reply by Sankey on 30-Apr-2016

I loved playing the organ and singing specials in church for many years. Sadly now my hearing has gone pretty well, I can't do it anymore. I hope you will have a listen to my Christmas Carols on Here some time. If you have Windows Media player the links should play ok. They are in my "Really Truly Christmas Carols" Book on FS.

reply by Sankey on 30-Apr-2016

I loved playing the organ and singing specials in church for many years. Sadly now my hearing has gone pretty well, I can't do it anymore. I hope you will have a listen to my Christmas Carols on Here some time. If you have Windows Media player the links should play ok. They are in my "Really Truly Christmas Carols" Book on FS.

Comment from Mastery

Excellent

Hi, Annie. You have a fine entry here for the Faith Contest. You may even win with lines as good as these:

"'ll sing about the voices as they sang Your praise to me.
And how it touched my heart and drew me from the world to Thee.
My voice is not a talent made to spread your Holy Word.
But when I reach my Heavenly Home my voice will then be heard."

Blessings. Bob

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2016

I am very thankful for your review and kind comments. I wrote this 25 years ago with no knowledge of poetry so it follows no theme. I revised it somewhat but I am really a novice taking chances. Thank you. -

Comment from mountainwriter49

Excellent

Good Morning, Poet,

i enjoyed reading your faith poem. It resonates with sincerity and humbleness, just as a faith poem should.

The rhyme pattern of aabb cccc bbaa is an interesting one and adds interest in the read. I like how the rhyme pattern is reversed in the third stanza from the first.

Best wishes to you in the contest.

Ray

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016

I am very thankful for your review and kind comments. I wrote this 25 years ago with no knowledge of poetry so it follows no theme. I am really a novice taking chances. Thank you.

Comment from arline21

Excellent

You may not realize it but as you speak to God in this poem, it seems to me that your voice has already been heard ...Your words sing the song..
thank you for posting...

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016

I am very thankful for your review and kind comments. I wrote this 25 years ago with no knowledge of poetry so it follows no theme. I am really a novice taking chances. Thank you.

Comment from chcbeck

Excellent

A lovely rhyming poem, I could hear as a hymn too. Some people me included haven't been blessed with a lovely voice. I too hope that in heaven I can sing. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016

I am very thankful for your review and kind comments. I wrote this 25 years ago with no knowledge of poetry so it follows no theme. I am really a novice taking chances. Thank you.

Comment from Joyce Long

Excellent

Very well written poem on Faith. Best wishes for the Faith Poetry contest. I think we all have a spark of talent, but we need to develop it. Little Big Shots is certainly a show about persons born with a certain talent that was more than a spark. You have done really well with your talent of writing.
Joyce 04-28-16

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016

I am very thankful for your review and kind comments. I wrote this 25 years ago with no knowledge of poetry so it follows no theme. I am really a novice taking chances. Thank you.

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

You had me all the way up until the very last line in your very last stanza, Poet. Then, with the reverse syntax you've utilized, it was (for me) like running headlong into a brick wall. Dead stop.

Consider, perhaps, the following:


But when I reach my Heavenly Home my voice will then be heard. ...

I probably shouldn't even be telling you this as I have a dog in this contest hunt as well. And, this is simply an opinion--my opinion-- (and we ALL know what's been stated about opinions, right?), or an observation, if you will. You may chose to do with it as you like.

In any event, I do wish you well in the judging.

Good luck.

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016

I am very thankful for your review and kind comments. I wrote this 25 years ago with no knowledge of poetry so it follows no theme. I am really a novice taking chances. Thank you. I value your advice and did work on that last line. It will not change the fact that with your experience I cannot hold a candle to your work. Not to worry.

reply by Dean Kuch on 28-Apr-2016

I ADORE good competition, Annie. Not to mention, I never wrote the first poem until I came here, to FanStory, a little over three years ago. I'm by NO means an expert on poetry, or really anything else for that matter.
Just ask anyone here, and they'll tell you the same, LOL.
I only wanted to help, that's all...

~Dean :}

reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016

I have enjoyed reading what you write so very much. If you are new at it then you have talent because your writing oozes confidence and individuality. I thought you had been writing for a much longer time. My poems have been very sporadic and tucked away for years.

reply by Dean Kuch on 28-Apr-2016

Well, I've written romantic poetry for my (now ex) wife, and girlfriends, and my children...things of that nature. But never had I posted poetry on a public forum, or ever dreamed of sending them out for consideration for publication, contest entries, or the like.
There are many helpful, very talented people here who are more than willing to lend you a helping hand. It's the best writing site on the net, hands down.
And, no, I do not own stock in FanStory, heh-heh.
Thanks, Annie, and you're more than welcome yourself.
~Dean :}