Empty Ice Trays
Dialogue Only Story-Prose Potlatch Challenge26 total reviews
Comment from F. Wehr3
Very fuckin' funny, Mikey. Good use of slang throughout and very entertaining. I stumbled over two sentences. Please consider the following.
"It's in the fridge, where do you think it is, Alaska?"' My first thought is that these are two complete stand alone sentences. Now if that is true, we would need either a period or a semi-colon after fridge.
Shut up, and let me study." This next one made me pause. Both can work as independent sentences. My thought was since they linked together, it may function more like a list. Two directives in a list. "Make my bed and sweep the floor." My suggestion would be take out the comma.
Overall, good fuckin' stuff!
Take care,
Russell
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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Very fuckin' funny, Mikey. Good use of slang throughout and very entertaining. I stumbled over two sentences. Please consider the following.
"It's in the fridge, where do you think it is, Alaska?"' My first thought is that these are two complete stand alone sentences. Now if that is true, we would need either a period or a semi-colon after fridge.
Shut up, and let me study." This next one made me pause. Both can work as independent sentences. My thought was since they linked together, it may function more like a list. Two directives in a list. "Make my bed and sweep the floor." My suggestion would be take out the comma.
Overall, good fuckin' stuff!
Take care,
Russell
Comment Written 02-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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Glad you liked it. Fun to write and sad to say, it's based on real life. HAHAHA! Of course it isn't me with a few too many shots of vodka. Must be my cousin.
I was thinking "Shut up." Would be like a "you" understood type sentence because of the exclamation. Well, in over my head. LOL
mikey
Comment from Pantygynt
It strikes me considering the vitriol that is spraying about here that this is altogether in a more serious league than most of the other arguments I have read.
Most start small an escalate of their own volition but this starts out pretty heavy and only has to get a litthe bit heavier to reach a point from which a return will be very difficult even unlikely.
You have portrayed this couple rowing with the gloves off. Is there a way back for them? I can't see one.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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It strikes me considering the vitriol that is spraying about here that this is altogether in a more serious league than most of the other arguments I have read.
Most start small an escalate of their own volition but this starts out pretty heavy and only has to get a litthe bit heavier to reach a point from which a return will be very difficult even unlikely.
You have portrayed this couple rowing with the gloves off. Is there a way back for them? I can't see one.
Comment Written 31-May-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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From personal experience, yeah, he gets over it. HAHAHA!
All they have to do is put water in the damn ice trays and put it in the fridge. LOL mikey
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Well you certainly covered a few topics in your argument mike. Very funny fight scene here, and your words make it easy for us to visualize.
Many thanks for all your efforts with the poetry challenges and now the prose, it has certainly given me my enthusiasm back again.Really appreciate it, and enjoyed the ice-tray chuckle,
cheers,
valda.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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Well you certainly covered a few topics in your argument mike. Very funny fight scene here, and your words make it easy for us to visualize.
Many thanks for all your efforts with the poetry challenges and now the prose, it has certainly given me my enthusiasm back again.Really appreciate it, and enjoyed the ice-tray chuckle,
cheers,
valda.
Comment Written 31-May-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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Hi, Valda
Your so welcome. It's sure a blast. I think this is about the only time I'm really having fun is at our get togethers. :))
Well, catching up. Whew. It's already coming up soon. mikey
Comment from l.raven
OMG Michael, I am OTFLMAO you....can't hardly type you goof...but truly I am some who always fills the trays...I guess I just want ice when I need it...LOL...you are a trip sweetie...and I needed a good laugh...thank you...very well written...luff ya you...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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OMG Michael, I am OTFLMAO you....can't hardly type you goof...but truly I am some who always fills the trays...I guess I just want ice when I need it...LOL...you are a trip sweetie...and I needed a good laugh...thank you...very well written...luff ya you...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 31-May-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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If one extra tray of ice is produced, then I've done my job.
Thank you so much, Ms. Even Her Ice Cubes Are Sweet! mikey
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I think I fill them because my father was so strict about it...he hated reaching for the tray and it was empty...sooooooooo welcome you...always...luff xxoo Linda smiling big...
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, potty mouth, LMAO
Boy, you got some balls! I didn't think we could say all those words on fanstory without getting shot. Live and learn.
I bet you are the kind of man that uses weird analogies for dicks and ejaculation, like ... 'volcano' for example, what a weirdo, huh? LOL
I know who you are, there is only one crazy hippie, antiestablishment, won't conform to anybody's rules but your own, a funny and lovable dude like you in fanstory and we are good friends. I know it's you ... you goof.
I love it, Miguel! This is awesome. I would love to write something like this but people already have a bad impression of me, why make it worse? Right?
I love Captain Picard's picture.
I hope you win, sweetie pie. I'll look for you in the voting booth. ;)
Love you, my friend, you potty mouth, you.
*gypsy hugs*
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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Hello, potty mouth, LMAO
Boy, you got some balls! I didn't think we could say all those words on fanstory without getting shot. Live and learn.
I bet you are the kind of man that uses weird analogies for dicks and ejaculation, like ... 'volcano' for example, what a weirdo, huh? LOL
I know who you are, there is only one crazy hippie, antiestablishment, won't conform to anybody's rules but your own, a funny and lovable dude like you in fanstory and we are good friends. I know it's you ... you goof.
I love it, Miguel! This is awesome. I would love to write something like this but people already have a bad impression of me, why make it worse? Right?
I love Captain Picard's picture.
I hope you win, sweetie pie. I'll look for you in the voting booth. ;)
Love you, my friend, you potty mouth, you.
*gypsy hugs*
Comment Written 30-May-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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Hi, yes I do have some. Well, just two. Some would be more than two. Do gentlemen have more than two? That might be what's affecting my love life.
Yeah, I'm not beholding to any rules of any kind. They don't apply to me, age, laws, even physical immutable laws of science. I'm levitating currently two feet above my bed, well, I'm balancing ... but, that's quite an amazing feat in itself. You'd have to be here.
They don't have a bad impression, write anything you want. There's just a small faction of jealous bitches that don't like awesome popular people like us. Screw them and do what you want.
Repeat after me, go fuck yourself, you jealous bitches!
See? All is well. mikey
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Go fuck yourselves, you jealous bitches. My friend, Miguel says is okay. LoL
Comment from artisart4u
This is funny. I read your warning so I disregarded the words bit --- I have several empty ice trays in the refrigerator.
I think I will take them out now. It doesn't make sense to do this but it's a place
to store them (smile).
When people read this, I hope they get what you are saying.
Good luck with your story.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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This is funny. I read your warning so I disregarded the words bit --- I have several empty ice trays in the refrigerator.
I think I will take them out now. It doesn't make sense to do this but it's a place
to store them (smile).
When people read this, I hope they get what you are saying.
Good luck with your story.
Comment Written 30-May-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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Put water in them and make some ice. LOL
So pleased you enjoyed. What a great review, I hope they get it too!! Thanks so much. mikey
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
I think 393 words is just a few more than 200? Or is that the new math?
Well written and humorous, my friend. I bet there's an empty milk carton in the fridge too. Seems to be like that in all homes. Go figure ... Well done, my friend. Have a good Memorial Day, mikey~Debbie
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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I think 393 words is just a few more than 200? Or is that the new math?
Well written and humorous, my friend. I bet there's an empty milk carton in the fridge too. Seems to be like that in all homes. Go figure ... Well done, my friend. Have a good Memorial Day, mikey~Debbie
Comment Written 30-May-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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It's supposed to read 200 word minimum. LOL
It's funny, but nothing else in the fridge matters, only the ice trays. HA! Thanks so much, mikey
Comment from Ulla
Hahahaha, talk about an argument getting out of hand. This is just so funny Mike, and I love the cool way the daughter goes about it.She's heard it a few times I bet. Very well done. Loved it. All the best. Ulla)))
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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Hahahaha, talk about an argument getting out of hand. This is just so funny Mike, and I love the cool way the daughter goes about it.She's heard it a few times I bet. Very well done. Loved it. All the best. Ulla)))
Comment Written 30-May-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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Ah, yes. You caught that about the daughter. Yes, exactly, she's seen it a million times. LOL
Glad you enjoyed. Isn't this too much fun. I wonder what they'll come up with this week? Yikes, I'm getting nervous! mikey
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I agree, it's great fun. Like you, I wonder what they through at us on Sunday. Ulla:)))
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
That sounds a lot like my ex-husband, going off about the ice cubes that are put back empty in the fridge. He could not watch a game without his drink and of course the ice cubes. Lol
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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That sounds a lot like my ex-husband, going off about the ice cubes that are put back empty in the fridge. He could not watch a game without his drink and of course the ice cubes. Lol
Comment Written 30-May-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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I notice you said, "EX". Hahahaha! I wonder if he's nagging someone somewhere even as we speak? Ya miss him and his cute ice tray fixation, don'tcha? LOL, mikey
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Not at all missing the drama king, I have wonderful peace and enough space in the fridge. Lol.
Comment from Scarbrems
ha ha ha, brilliant, my friend. love what you did with this. You took my little idea, and ran with it. 'refridg-a-fuckin-rator!"' - lol.
Maybe you don't need a comma after all your 'maybes', by the way, but good stuff. Sounds like a real row, from a very argumentative couple, who I suspect love eachother dearly, but enjoy living in a perpetual state of argument.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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ha ha ha, brilliant, my friend. love what you did with this. You took my little idea, and ran with it. 'refridg-a-fuckin-rator!"' - lol.
Maybe you don't need a comma after all your 'maybes', by the way, but good stuff. Sounds like a real row, from a very argumentative couple, who I suspect love eachother dearly, but enjoy living in a perpetual state of argument.
Comment Written 30-May-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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Hi.
Nah, I didn't love her at all, empty ice trays, how could I love that? The arguing was good though. Yeah, maybe you're right, I might've loved her
This was way too much fun. Can't wait til Sunday. LOL
What's next? mikey