The Piper
Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "The Piper, part 18"Young Adult Fantasy
18 total reviews
Comment from May 1
Yes, it's always difficult how to start a serious conversation, I think. Finally, Piper makes something easier rather than more difficult. :) He sure is quick to react without thinking things through. Well, it's good to hear that she didn't want to give him up.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
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Yes, it's always difficult how to start a serious conversation, I think. Finally, Piper makes something easier rather than more difficult. :) He sure is quick to react without thinking things through. Well, it's good to hear that she didn't want to give him up.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
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I love reading your comments. I can see you are writing as you are reading, and by your comments I can tell where you are in the story. Thank you.
Debi
Comment from BeasPeas
This is such a charming story, debi. I've read a chapter here and there, but not all.
Your writing is clear and well done, a joy to read. Words flow nicely line to line. Well described throughout. Marilyn
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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This is such a charming story, debi. I've read a chapter here and there, but not all.
Your writing is clear and well done, a joy to read. Words flow nicely line to line. Well described throughout. Marilyn
Comment Written 11-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Hi Marilyn. Thank you for the wonderful review, especially just after the promotion ended. You are so sweet to review anyway. Debi
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Hi debi. You're welcome. I read the work of those that I find appealing, promoted or not. I haven't read all of Piper, but a chapter here and there. You are an excellent writer. :) Marilyn
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Ah, thank you Marilyn. You made my night.
Comment from F. Wehr3
Excellent work, my friend. Each time I read one of your posts, I'm drawn into your world. I enjoyed the revelation that Piper is of mixed blood. Should make for some dynamic traits for him. Well done!
Take care,
Russell
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2017
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Excellent work, my friend. Each time I read one of your posts, I'm drawn into your world. I enjoyed the revelation that Piper is of mixed blood. Should make for some dynamic traits for him. Well done!
Take care,
Russell
Comment Written 09-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2017
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Hi Russell,
What a nice thing to say. That you so much. Thank you too for the the six stars! It made my day!
Debi
Comment from Spitfire
Wow! Talk about dropping the other shoe. Good use of physical action to suggest Piper's moods. (At the mention of his grandfather, Piper looked down at his flute and rubbed it gently with the polishing cloth.)
What continues to make us suspend belief is details about the maturity process as in pointed ears. Well-done.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2017
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Wow! Talk about dropping the other shoe. Good use of physical action to suggest Piper's moods. (At the mention of his grandfather, Piper looked down at his flute and rubbed it gently with the polishing cloth.)
What continues to make us suspend belief is details about the maturity process as in pointed ears. Well-done.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2017
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Hi Shari,
Thank you for the encouraging comments about the writing and for continuing to follow the story.
Debi
Comment from LaRosa
I'm sorry its taken me so long to get back to your story. I hadn't forgotten you.
I saw no SPAG, so now that's over with. I do find the whole concept of Fair Folk to be interesting. You have a good sense of conversational story telling and I can't wait to read more.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2017
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I'm sorry its taken me so long to get back to your story. I hadn't forgotten you.
I saw no SPAG, so now that's over with. I do find the whole concept of Fair Folk to be interesting. You have a good sense of conversational story telling and I can't wait to read more.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2017
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I am happy you stopped by. Thank you for the kind comments. I appreciate the encouragement.
Comment from JDRBAR
This is darling and very well written. I only saw one little nit. Towards the end, it says " he stared into fire." The word "the" is missing.
I look forward to reading more of this story.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2017
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This is darling and very well written. I only saw one little nit. Towards the end, it says " he stared into fire." The word "the" is missing.
I look forward to reading more of this story.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the great review. I appreciate you catching the nit. I am happy to hear you enjoyed reading the story.
Comment from rspoet
A most interesting chapter with a nice twist or two or three
assuming Redd-Lief is telling the truth.
Piper is rightly suspicious, I would be, too.
So grandfather and Piper are both fae
yet Piper doesn't seem to have no other elf traits,
like strength, speed;
and he is adopted by humans to somehow save his life and his mother's
It seems there is mush more to tell about his mother and others.
Melodica is an excellent name; perhaps, Garrin is the father?
I think you've handled the dialogue, thought, and unease very well.
This chapter should keep your readers turning the pages.
Well done
RS
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2017
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A most interesting chapter with a nice twist or two or three
assuming Redd-Lief is telling the truth.
Piper is rightly suspicious, I would be, too.
So grandfather and Piper are both fae
yet Piper doesn't seem to have no other elf traits,
like strength, speed;
and he is adopted by humans to somehow save his life and his mother's
It seems there is mush more to tell about his mother and others.
Melodica is an excellent name; perhaps, Garrin is the father?
I think you've handled the dialogue, thought, and unease very well.
This chapter should keep your readers turning the pages.
Well done
RS
Comment Written 08-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2017
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Hi RS,
I am so pleased you like this chapter and the twists. Love your speculation. Thank you so much for the shiny six stars and that final comment about readers turning the pages. Both the stars and the comments make me smile.
Debi
Comment from Pam (respa)
-This chapter was well penned,
had good dialogue and character's
inner thoughts, Debi.
-Unfortunately, Piper's grandfather could
not have at least told him something, but now
he has to rely on Redd-Leif and whether or not
he is telling the truth.
-Is Piper really part Fae? He brings up a good point
about how he has heard similar stories of others and
they end up disappearing.
-All along, I have been skeptical of Red-Leif and his
motives for always being so friendly and 'protective'
of Piper.
-Sheba's remark adds to that skepticism.
-It is the quality of a good storyteller to
write a good story and leave us wondering
what is going to happen.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2017
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-This chapter was well penned,
had good dialogue and character's
inner thoughts, Debi.
-Unfortunately, Piper's grandfather could
not have at least told him something, but now
he has to rely on Redd-Leif and whether or not
he is telling the truth.
-Is Piper really part Fae? He brings up a good point
about how he has heard similar stories of others and
they end up disappearing.
-All along, I have been skeptical of Red-Leif and his
motives for always being so friendly and 'protective'
of Piper.
-Sheba's remark adds to that skepticism.
-It is the quality of a good storyteller to
write a good story and leave us wondering
what is going to happen.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2017
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Hi Pam,
Thank you so much for the pretty six star rating, and the wonderful comments. I appreciate your analysis of the situation and the characters. I am so happy you are enjoying the story.
Debi
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You are very welcome for the stars and comments. You put a lot into that chapter, and I do enjoy each one.
Comment from dweigt
Glad to give you six stars for this wonderful work. I found nothing that needs to change. I like the name "Melodica", no doubt she is the source of Piper's musical talents.
Keep Writing!
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2017
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Glad to give you six stars for this wonderful work. I found nothing that needs to change. I like the name "Melodica", no doubt she is the source of Piper's musical talents.
Keep Writing!
Comment Written 07-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the wonderful six star rating and the encouraging comments. I am glad you like the name "Melodica". I wonder what Piper will think when he meets her.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
I'm sure Piper didn't expect anything like that! I was wondering who his father was. Evidently he is human.
That is a lot for piper to take in. Will he believe
the story.He had best believe or one day he might wake up with pointed ears. Well done Debi. Nancy
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2017
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I'm sure Piper didn't expect anything like that! I was wondering who his father was. Evidently he is human.
That is a lot for piper to take in. Will he believe
the story.He had best believe or one day he might wake up with pointed ears. Well done Debi. Nancy
Comment Written 07-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2017
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Hi Nancy,
I love your comments. You never know about those ears. Thank you for a fun review. Debi