Poems By AnnieDawn
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "Hearts Rhythm"My book of poems and stories
13 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Perfect picture for the words which gives an image for the way a love relationship should be.
Congratulations on placing third in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2017
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Perfect picture for the words which gives an image for the way a love relationship should be.
Congratulations on placing third in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 03-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2017
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Thank you for your kind review. I was honored to have a win on this poem as I was experimenting with a new style. Love this site. Thanks again.
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You're welcome. This is a great site.
dragonpoet
Comment from smileycloud
nice lanturne
well done to get a good story out there in so few words
better love keeping the beats monitored rather than a machine hey
have a smiley day
good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2017
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nice lanturne
well done to get a good story out there in so few words
better love keeping the beats monitored rather than a machine hey
have a smiley day
good luck in the contest
Comment Written 27-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2017
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Thank you for reviewing. This is the first Lanturne I have done and it is more difficult than it looks. I had fun with it.
Comment from Lulube
A simple and truthful statement. Attraction is a funny non-verbal, take me home feeling. Yes it can make the heart beat faster, just as screaming young kids can. lol the opposite sex attraction can melt one as their knees grow weak and hands fly to hold onto the nearest stable piece of furniture. and the heart beats faster.
good luck in contest
lulube
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2017
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A simple and truthful statement. Attraction is a funny non-verbal, take me home feeling. Yes it can make the heart beat faster, just as screaming young kids can. lol the opposite sex attraction can melt one as their knees grow weak and hands fly to hold onto the nearest stable piece of furniture. and the heart beats faster.
good luck in contest
lulube
Comment Written 27-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2017
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Thank you for reviewing. This is the first Lanturne I have done and it is more difficult than it looks. I had fun with it. Yes kids can cause the same reaction...lol
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welcome
lulube
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
Hi Annie
What a wonderful Lanturne poem which captures the feeling of being in love in a unique, yet brilliant way.
Excellent picture, which accompanies your words so well.
Mitchell
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2017
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Hi Annie
What a wonderful Lanturne poem which captures the feeling of being in love in a unique, yet brilliant way.
Excellent picture, which accompanies your words so well.
Mitchell
Comment Written 27-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2017
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Thank you for reviewing. This is the first Lanturne I have done and it is more difficult than it looks. I had fun with it.
Comment from Mary Wakeford
Excellent in presentation and in content. This is my second Lanturne to review following a bit of an absence from FanStory. Though I don't know much about the format of a Lantern, I found this intriguing and delightful. My only suggestion would be to add the requirement of the form in your notes section for reviewers. Well done!
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2017
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Excellent in presentation and in content. This is my second Lanturne to review following a bit of an absence from FanStory. Though I don't know much about the format of a Lantern, I found this intriguing and delightful. My only suggestion would be to add the requirement of the form in your notes section for reviewers. Well done!
Comment Written 26-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2017
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Thanks so much for your kind review. I took your advice and added the Lanturne format so it is easier to review. Thanks again and welcome back.
Comment from Irish Rain
Wonderful entry!! I love the picture and colors too. This is an awesome Lanturne, and I wish you the best of luck in this contest! Blessings...
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2017
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Wonderful entry!! I love the picture and colors too. This is an awesome Lanturne, and I wish you the best of luck in this contest! Blessings...
Comment Written 26-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2017
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Thank you for reviewing. This is the first Lanturne I have done and it is more difficult than it looks. I had fun with it.
Comment from luther maddox
love the imagery, and the concept with the visual with this work, to be honest I did not know how to rate it but believe it deserves a 5, so I will give it a five star for the originality and heart monitor concept
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2017
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love the imagery, and the concept with the visual with this work, to be honest I did not know how to rate it but believe it deserves a 5, so I will give it a five star for the originality and heart monitor concept
Comment Written 26-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2017
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Thank you for your kind review. I sometimes have trouble with the short ones. I do better writing rhyming poetry but this one kind of jumped onto the page...lol
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thank you
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hi Annie. This is a lovely entry into the Lanturne Poetry contest. It makes perfect beautiful sense. "Love Sets Up The Rhythm..." for me that's a true statement. Good luck. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2017
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Hi Annie. This is a lovely entry into the Lanturne Poetry contest. It makes perfect beautiful sense. "Love Sets Up The Rhythm..." for me that's a true statement. Good luck. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 26-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2017
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Thank you for your kind review. I sometimes have trouble with the short ones. I do better writing rhyming poetry but this one kind of jumped onto the page...lol
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Lanturne poem. When we are in live our hearts seem to have a joyful rhythm. When something goes wrong with our relationships we feel sad and our heart rhythm goes the other way.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2017
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A very well-written Lanturne poem. When we are in live our hearts seem to have a joyful rhythm. When something goes wrong with our relationships we feel sad and our heart rhythm goes the other way.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2017
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Thank you for your kind review. I have trouble with the short ones and usually do better with the longer poems. This one just kind of jumped onto the page.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written Lanturne poem for the contest. I think when we are first in love with someone that is when it beats really fast and then after many years it calms down to a slow trot! But it beats nicely for your love! Best wishes in the contest. Great wording and imagery. Teri
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2017
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This is a very well written Lanturne poem for the contest. I think when we are first in love with someone that is when it beats really fast and then after many years it calms down to a slow trot! But it beats nicely for your love! Best wishes in the contest. Great wording and imagery. Teri
Comment Written 26-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2017
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Thank you for your kind review. I sometimes have trouble with the short ones.