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1-6-1 Rhyming12 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Such a clever 1-6-1 with an adorable picture! Great rhymes of spied-side-hide. And a wonderful description of what the little frog was doing underside the flower. Congratulations!
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
Such a clever 1-6-1 with an adorable picture! Great rhymes of spied-side-hide. And a wonderful description of what the little frog was doing underside the flower. Congratulations!
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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Thanks so much. I appreciate your comments!!
Comment from Bill Schott
This 1-6-1, Hide, uses the allowed syllables and required rhyme to show us one of the many surprises that await the perceptive seeker.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
This 1-6-1, Hide, uses the allowed syllables and required rhyme to show us one of the many surprises that await the perceptive seeker.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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Thank you!!
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
Perfect response to the photo of the frog hiding beneath the flower. Seems nature can offer us a thousand inspirations each day. What a fun 1-6-1 poem you have written.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2018
Perfect response to the photo of the frog hiding beneath the flower. Seems nature can offer us a thousand inspirations each day. What a fun 1-6-1 poem you have written.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2018
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Thanks so much. Thanks so
Comment from LIJ Red
There's the one, the six and the one and they rhyme, and taken with the art, it makes sense. Should be a valid entry for that contest prompt.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
There's the one, the six and the one and they rhyme, and taken with the art, it makes sense. Should be a valid entry for that contest prompt.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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Thanks s much!
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Thanks s much!
Comment from rama devi
This is whimsical and clever. I love the picture - speaks volumes! The poem is a perfect pairing with it. Did you find the picture first? Fine rhymes. Good flow. A great entry, with no nits, but I do have suggestions (optional) that I feel would improve it.
1) don't cap line two, since it continues the sentence from line one:
Spied
down on the underside
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Consider using punctuation to sculpt dramatic pause effect further:
Spied
down on the underside.
Hide.
Or, parenthesis could also work with a subtler pause effect:
Spied
down on the underside.
(Hide!)
Just a thought.
You captured the poor frog's POV well~
Good luck!
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
This is whimsical and clever. I love the picture - speaks volumes! The poem is a perfect pairing with it. Did you find the picture first? Fine rhymes. Good flow. A great entry, with no nits, but I do have suggestions (optional) that I feel would improve it.
1) don't cap line two, since it continues the sentence from line one:
Spied
down on the underside
Hide
2)
Consider using punctuation to sculpt dramatic pause effect further:
Spied
down on the underside.
Hide.
Or, parenthesis could also work with a subtler pause effect:
Spied
down on the underside.
(Hide!)
Just a thought.
You captured the poor frog's POV well~
Good luck!
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Thanks so much!, I love your suggestions.
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So glad you love the suggestions! :-)))
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks the special type of frog knows how to hide under or at the flower plant; a fun to watch over; well said, well done; thank you for sharing this with us, wish you good luck with the contest. KEEP WRITING, INSPIRE CHANGING -DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
This speaks the special type of frog knows how to hide under or at the flower plant; a fun to watch over; well said, well done; thank you for sharing this with us, wish you good luck with the contest. KEEP WRITING, INSPIRE CHANGING -DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Thanks so much for your comments and encouragement.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Such a cute picture, a frog under a flower umbrella! Fabulous. Your words could double for other scenes too, very clever write, best of luck love Dolly x
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
Such a cute picture, a frog under a flower umbrella! Fabulous. Your words could double for other scenes too, very clever write, best of luck love Dolly x
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Thanks so much, Dolly. I appreciate your comments.
Comment from Artasylum
Love it you made me laugh... thanks for that. great imagery and love the compact and funny read. perfect. thanks so much for your inspiring economical read. yours, diana
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
Love it you made me laugh... thanks for that. great imagery and love the compact and funny read. perfect. thanks so much for your inspiring economical read. yours, diana
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Thanks. I appreciate your comments and taking the time to review.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
This is a good entry for the 1-6-1 Poem writing prompt.
Your short verse is nicely matched by the picture.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
This is a good entry for the 1-6-1 Poem writing prompt.
Your short verse is nicely matched by the picture.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Thanks so much.
Comment from William Ross
Nice, it is hard to really judge or review such a short piece, but I believe you done well on this. good luck and have a great day
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
Nice, it is hard to really judge or review such a short piece, but I believe you done well on this. good luck and have a great day
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Thanks you for your review.