Conflict
A loop poem22 total reviews
Comment from Galactia
Hi
Excellent written loop poem. Written in perfect rhyme scheme of abab.
Very strong message and this war currently is a religious war that's why our T.V keeps preaching to have Muslims, Muslims thus and Muslims that.
We do need to come together, bring our troops home and end the war.
This is a fantastic entry for the contest.
Great job and Good Luck
Regards
Tia
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2018
  |
Hi
Excellent written loop poem. Written in perfect rhyme scheme of abab.
Very strong message and this war currently is a religious war that's why our T.V keeps preaching to have Muslims, Muslims thus and Muslims that.
We do need to come together, bring our troops home and end the war.
This is a fantastic entry for the contest.
Great job and Good Luck
Regards
Tia
Comment Written 20-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2018
-
Thank you and yes we do need to bring our troops home****kahpot
Comment from kiwijenny
This is a hard form of poetry. But I battle to do most of it. Limericks tie me in knots ..but this seems to work except this line...Individual they are we need to constrict ..
I'm not sure what this means. And should it be ...individuals they are?
Just sayin'
God bless
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2018
|
This is a hard form of poetry. But I battle to do most of it. Limericks tie me in knots ..but this seems to work except this line...Individual they are we need to constrict ..
I'm not sure what this means. And should it be ...individuals they are?
Just sayin'
God bless
Comment Written 18-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2018
-
Thank you very much and yes I see what you mean that line just not quite right, many thanks****kahpot
Comment from estory
An interesting construction created a very transcendental effect of individuals blending into the society, conflict turning to peace, faith disintegrating into selfishness. It is a very real portrait of the problems facing mankind today. I like the fact that you raise questions in this poem, instead of answering them. it opens the poem up to interpretation and a wider scope, greater depth. estory
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2018
|
An interesting construction created a very transcendental effect of individuals blending into the society, conflict turning to peace, faith disintegrating into selfishness. It is a very real portrait of the problems facing mankind today. I like the fact that you raise questions in this poem, instead of answering them. it opens the poem up to interpretation and a wider scope, greater depth. estory
Comment Written 18-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2018
-
Thank you very much, this is a wonderful review****kahpot
Comment from June Sargent
It's amazing how well you have crafted this loop poem that sends out a clear message of what is missing in this world of conflict. We do need to be willing to join as individuals to end divisive thinking. But that takes humility. thank you for sharing this lovely poem.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2018
|
It's amazing how well you have crafted this loop poem that sends out a clear message of what is missing in this world of conflict. We do need to be willing to join as individuals to end divisive thinking. But that takes humility. thank you for sharing this lovely poem.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2018
-
Thank you very much for your very encouraging review****kahpot
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Conflict", is an extremely well-written and thought-provoking piece. Each line of this talented poet's work is woven with the golden threads of truth. To me, this is a six, but unfortunately I only have fives left. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2018
|
"Conflict", is an extremely well-written and thought-provoking piece. Each line of this talented poet's work is woven with the golden threads of truth. To me, this is a six, but unfortunately I only have fives left. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2018
-
Thank you very much for this very encouraging review****kahpot
-
Kahpot******,
You certainly deserved the very kind review.
Take care, God bless you and best wishes,
the Duchess
Comment from Boogienights
This is a great loop poem, very well done and on a subject that a lot of people worry about. I truly hope we do float instead of drown, but that seems far off to me. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2018
|
This is a great loop poem, very well done and on a subject that a lot of people worry about. I truly hope we do float instead of drown, but that seems far off to me. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2018
-
Thank you very much****kahpot
Comment from Hayley Zemontas
A very positive poem fighting against war and conflict. I am someone that hates any kind of conflict and will do anything to avoid it so your words struck a chord in me. Sometimes conflict is so unnecessary and just causes unnecessary upset and harm. I love the line- together we'll float, drowning all conflict. This shows that if we all stick together and unite then there will be less conflict. Great message. Good luck for the loop poem contest.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2018
|
A very positive poem fighting against war and conflict. I am someone that hates any kind of conflict and will do anything to avoid it so your words struck a chord in me. Sometimes conflict is so unnecessary and just causes unnecessary upset and harm. I love the line- together we'll float, drowning all conflict. This shows that if we all stick together and unite then there will be less conflict. Great message. Good luck for the loop poem contest.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2018
-
Thank you for your very encouraging review****kahpot
Comment from Pantygynt
This follows the loop poem blueprint and indeed goes that stage further that creates a true loop to my mind, the last word looping back to the first. without this it is more of a chain than a loop. You have also complied with the set rhyme scheme as well. A fine entry. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2018
|
This follows the loop poem blueprint and indeed goes that stage further that creates a true loop to my mind, the last word looping back to the first. without this it is more of a chain than a loop. You have also complied with the set rhyme scheme as well. A fine entry. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2018
-
Thank you very much for your very encouraging review****kahpot
Comment from Lulube
Very tricky style to write in. Don't want to get the wrong last word going in this one. and using an acrostic style to boot. clever. Important messages of the violence we live with in the world's population. I wonder what is taught in schools these days? There seems to be less importance to being alive or for another being alive.
good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2018
|
Very tricky style to write in. Don't want to get the wrong last word going in this one. and using an acrostic style to boot. clever. Important messages of the violence we live with in the world's population. I wonder what is taught in schools these days? There seems to be less importance to being alive or for another being alive.
good luck in the contest
Comment Written 17-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2018
-
Thank you very much and yes I also wonder these days****kahpot
-
welcome
lulube
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written loop poem. Religion and faith is an issue that we will always have differences about. There are only one God, but we all see Him in a different way, and that is where the conflict comes to play.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2018
|
A very well-written loop poem. Religion and faith is an issue that we will always have differences about. There are only one God, but we all see Him in a different way, and that is where the conflict comes to play.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2018
-
Thank you very much you have read what I was trying to write, many thanks****kahpot