Mr. Bumble Lost His Song
A poem to read to children9 total reviews
Comment from countess gram
This is a wonderful children's poem. I tells a vivid story and has a great moral of helping others in their time of need. The wording flowed easily and it was fun to read. Great work!
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2018
This is a wonderful children's poem. I tells a vivid story and has a great moral of helping others in their time of need. The wording flowed easily and it was fun to read. Great work!
Comment Written 06-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2018
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Thanks so much!
Comment from A. Troutman
This is very well written. The picture certainly fits the poem. Your rhyme scheme was thought out and executed marvelously. It reminded me of the poems my mother and grandmother would read to me when I was a small child. Great job! :)
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2018
This is very well written. The picture certainly fits the poem. Your rhyme scheme was thought out and executed marvelously. It reminded me of the poems my mother and grandmother would read to me when I was a small child. Great job! :)
Comment Written 06-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2018
Thanks so much!!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written children's rhyming poem about little bumble bee who lost his song down there by the Donnie brook. With a little help his song was found and he was happy again to sing his song.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2018
A very well-written children's rhyming poem about little bumble bee who lost his song down there by the Donnie brook. With a little help his song was found and he was happy again to sing his song.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2018
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Thanks, Sandra!!
Comment from Michele Harber
This is adorable, and a perfect rhyme for children. It has the sing-song quality that children enjoy, with simple words and nice rhymes. I'm sure the children will enjoy rooting for Mr. Bumble, and cheering him on when he finds his song. The picture you chose is very cute, and fits your poem well.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
This is adorable, and a perfect rhyme for children. It has the sing-song quality that children enjoy, with simple words and nice rhymes. I'm sure the children will enjoy rooting for Mr. Bumble, and cheering him on when he finds his song. The picture you chose is very cute, and fits your poem well.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
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Thanks so much, Michele! I appreciate your time and review.
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It's my pleasure.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice artwork.
-I like this happy child's poem.
-The use of the bee as the
narrator is effective.
-It relates well to the little girl.
-The rhyme and imagery and very good.
-I like the interaction between the bee, as
he tells what's wrong, and the girl,
who wants to help him.
-She is also a savvy little girl,
"Then, you must sing to me for helping you."
-I like the concluding verse, too.
-A very good entry; good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
-Very nice artwork.
-I like this happy child's poem.
-The use of the bee as the
narrator is effective.
-It relates well to the little girl.
-The rhyme and imagery and very good.
-I like the interaction between the bee, as
he tells what's wrong, and the girl,
who wants to help him.
-She is also a savvy little girl,
"Then, you must sing to me for helping you."
-I like the concluding verse, too.
-A very good entry; good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
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Thanks so much, Pam!
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You are very welcome.
Comment from victor 66
I believe your Child Rhyming Poem is much better than mine. Your piece was done with much more care and would more likely be appreciated. My entry was done on a lark. I wish you luck.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
I believe your Child Rhyming Poem is much better than mine. Your piece was done with much more care and would more likely be appreciated. My entry was done on a lark. I wish you luck.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
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Thank you. I?m sure you did a fine job. I?ll look it up. its always fun to write for the little ones. Have a great day and thanks for the review.Th
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You are welcome, TH.
Comment from zanya
Ideal poem for children to stir their young imagination and get them thinking about Nature and what better aspect than Bumble bees especially since bees are in danger on our planet- nice touch with dialogue
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
Ideal poem for children to stir their young imagination and get them thinking about Nature and what better aspect than Bumble bees especially since bees are in danger on our planet- nice touch with dialogue
Comment Written 05-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
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Thanks so much Zanya.. I?m grateful for your review.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Nice! I liked this symphonic and rhyming poem and enjoyed this children's rhyming poem, its free flow of thoughts, the story, the imagery and word visuals; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
Nice! I liked this symphonic and rhyming poem and enjoyed this children's rhyming poem, its free flow of thoughts, the story, the imagery and word visuals; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 05-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
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Thanks a bunch!
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
What a sweet little poem for children. I enjoyed the dialogue with the little girl and Mr. Bumble. I noticed that children would learn to help others and that give and take should occur. A cute contest entry. Good luck.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
What a sweet little poem for children. I enjoyed the dialogue with the little girl and Mr. Bumble. I noticed that children would learn to help others and that give and take should occur. A cute contest entry. Good luck.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
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Thanks so much Cindy!!