Give and Take
Consume AND create poetry.54 total reviews
Comment from closetpoetjester
Indeed this is some thoughtfully pitched advice on both giving and taking within the joy and heartache that it is to write...be it poetry or prose.
I DO find though, some of the best writing is by an author in turmoil, whether miserable in a relationship, or facing unrequited love or perhaps just being plain pissed off about something. I find I can ONLY write when I have fodder and it has to irk me in some way, or stir a sense, or pique my interest for whatever reason, enough to draw a response.
I can relate directly to your authors notes haha
My husband gets SO pissed off when I say "that would make a great poem" ( for about the last 9 years haha so no wonder LOL)
He has to sit through a recital every now and again
He secretly loves it I'm sure haha
Anyway this is about your poem.
I feel it symbolises that you can't have a one sided relationship with words LOL
What you take from writing, you probably give back threefold, I think LOL judging by the amount of unpublished struggling but persistant authors out there haha
P
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2019
Indeed this is some thoughtfully pitched advice on both giving and taking within the joy and heartache that it is to write...be it poetry or prose.
I DO find though, some of the best writing is by an author in turmoil, whether miserable in a relationship, or facing unrequited love or perhaps just being plain pissed off about something. I find I can ONLY write when I have fodder and it has to irk me in some way, or stir a sense, or pique my interest for whatever reason, enough to draw a response.
I can relate directly to your authors notes haha
My husband gets SO pissed off when I say "that would make a great poem" ( for about the last 9 years haha so no wonder LOL)
He has to sit through a recital every now and again
He secretly loves it I'm sure haha
Anyway this is about your poem.
I feel it symbolises that you can't have a one sided relationship with words LOL
What you take from writing, you probably give back threefold, I think LOL judging by the amount of unpublished struggling but persistant authors out there haha
P
Comment Written 21-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2019
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Thanks for taking the time, P! I've only been writing poems since I joined here in February, so my wife had had minimal 'forced' exposure to my work. She is an honest audience and has (mostly) enjoyed my foray into the form. She has been reading my short fiction for a couple years now, and it helps me produce more pages since she asks for installments all the time.
Comment from Janetsue
This is a work causing the reader to think a lot more about what is being said--which is an ideal situation for any posting. Everyone brings their own interpretation to what is encountered and that can keep a writing interesting and enjoyable in a discussion group. Best wishes!
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
This is a work causing the reader to think a lot more about what is being said--which is an ideal situation for any posting. Everyone brings their own interpretation to what is encountered and that can keep a writing interesting and enjoyable in a discussion group. Best wishes!
Comment Written 05-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
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Thanks, Spangle!
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You're very welcome!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Good advice, Chip. I enjoyed your contest entry. Your 2 lines, as required, offer readers much to think about and act upon. Thanks for sharing. Best wishes. Jan
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
Good advice, Chip. I enjoyed your contest entry. Your 2 lines, as required, offer readers much to think about and act upon. Thanks for sharing. Best wishes. Jan
Comment Written 05-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
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Thanks, Jan.
Comment from Lance S. Loria
I doubt this comment is correct, but it seems this 2-line poem has 3-lines.
Just let me know what I'm missing. Otherwise good luck with the contest. No other edits or adjustments necessary.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
I doubt this comment is correct, but it seems this 2-line poem has 3-lines.
Just let me know what I'm missing. Otherwise good luck with the contest. No other edits or adjustments necessary.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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Hi Lance- Two in my book (I use the comma instead of "and" in line 2):
Much is written of seasons, lovers, and gods ~
take what you need, give what you can.
Thanks!
Comment from Janilou
Interesting poem. Personally I think we should take what we need, but give ALL we can. It's an age-old truth that the more we give, the more we receive.
So, now, back to your poem. It's well done. It made me think and I appreciate that. Well done. No errors noted.
All the best,
Jan
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
Interesting poem. Personally I think we should take what we need, but give ALL we can. It's an age-old truth that the more we give, the more we receive.
So, now, back to your poem. It's well done. It made me think and I appreciate that. Well done. No errors noted.
All the best,
Jan
Comment Written 04-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
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Thanks, Janilou.
Comment from Brenda Henderson
Eloquently stated. You've spoken volumes in few words. Thank you for sharing this. I am indeed inspired by it to do what you have instructed as oft I can. Good work!
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
Eloquently stated. You've spoken volumes in few words. Thank you for sharing this. I am indeed inspired by it to do what you have instructed as oft I can. Good work!
Comment Written 04-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
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Thanks, Brenda!
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You're very welcome Chip!
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Chip Kuzborski,
Lovely piece of poetry meeting the desired norms, and beautifully depicting its theme with IMPRESSIVE phraseology.
2nd Line - SUPERB.
Best of Luck!
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
Hello Chip Kuzborski,
Lovely piece of poetry meeting the desired norms, and beautifully depicting its theme with IMPRESSIVE phraseology.
2nd Line - SUPERB.
Best of Luck!
Comment Written 04-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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Thanks so much for the kind review and generous rating!
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Chip Kuzborski, Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from royowen
This is an excellent entry in this two line poetic entry. Chip, oh yes indeed, a very good mantra take what you need, give what you can, one of wisest sayings one can come across, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
This is an excellent entry in this two line poetic entry. Chip, oh yes indeed, a very good mantra take what you need, give what you can, one of wisest sayings one can come across, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 04-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
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Many thanks, Roy!
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Most welcome
Comment from ShyWri
This is a thought-provoking poem. Could it be about reviews of our poetry and prose on Fanstory? Or about advice on life in general? Thank you for the poem.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
This is a thought-provoking poem. Could it be about reviews of our poetry and prose on Fanstory? Or about advice on life in general? Thank you for the poem.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
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That's up to the reader...thank, ShyWri!
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You're welcome.
Comment from Bill Pinder
Interesting writing about the flow of poetry from one person to another in this world. Great idea to view creativity as a flow that we share with each other. The muses can then enjoy the shared verses. Bill
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
Interesting writing about the flow of poetry from one person to another in this world. Great idea to view creativity as a flow that we share with each other. The muses can then enjoy the shared verses. Bill
Comment Written 04-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
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Thank you, Bill.