Life's Laughter And Tears
A childhood interrupted.11 total reviews
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
Awe, this is sad and sweet at the same time. Mom was determined to get you to act more lady like. I love the descriptive writing used and the excellent rhyme and flow of this. I enjoyed reading this well written work. Well done!
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2019
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Awe, this is sad and sweet at the same time. Mom was determined to get you to act more lady like. I love the descriptive writing used and the excellent rhyme and flow of this. I enjoyed reading this well written work. Well done!
Comment Written 14-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2019
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Thanks for your appreciative review, Jeffrey.
I've stayed a tomboy all my life, no matter how hard Mom tried in the beginning. But I always think of her when I pull my jeans on.
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Your childhood remembrances must surely be engraved in your heart because for part of that time, you did have your mother. How tragic and sad that you experienced such grief, so early in your life. The poem is very poignant and well done.
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Your childhood remembrances must surely be engraved in your heart because for part of that time, you did have your mother. How tragic and sad that you experienced such grief, so early in your life. The poem is very poignant and well done.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2019
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about a childhood filled with fun and laughter. Unfortunately, there are also sadness we have to deal with sometimes.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2019
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A very well-written poem about a childhood filled with fun and laughter. Unfortunately, there are also sadness we have to deal with sometimes.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2019
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Thanks for reviewing. Life is difficult sometimes.
Comment from papa55mike
The loss of a loved one is the greatest trial of our lives. Many don't know where to turn and fill the gap. This poem is wonderfully written and I love the picture.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
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The loss of a loved one is the greatest trial of our lives. Many don't know where to turn and fill the gap. This poem is wonderfully written and I love the picture.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 13-Nov-2019
Comment from GWHARGIS
How sad. At least you had good memories of her to carry along in your heart. My father died when I was thirteen. I remember my mother telling me that I could either cry about life not being fair that he was taken or I could be thankful I had him for as long as I did. I chose the latter. Wonderful poem.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2019
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How sad. At least you had good memories of her to carry along in your heart. My father died when I was thirteen. I remember my mother telling me that I could either cry about life not being fair that he was taken or I could be thankful I had him for as long as I did. I chose the latter. Wonderful poem.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2019
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Your mother's outlook stood you in good stead - you chose the right option. Sad for you to lose your father even earlier than I lost mum.
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello fellow writer. Thank you for sharing your poem, I think you executed well within the rules of the writing prompt. Nice rhymes and heartfelt words. Good job and good luck in the contest.
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Hello fellow writer. Thank you for sharing your poem, I think you executed well within the rules of the writing prompt. Nice rhymes and heartfelt words. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2019
Comment from Pantygynt
This poem plays a tug o' war with its readers emotions. First we see the happy tomboy, that turned into something of a rebel under certain circumstances -- those 'stupid sleeves' for example -- then on to the tragedy when cruel death comes to call. The poem ends with a fine final stanza that has a brilliant last line.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2019
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This poem plays a tug o' war with its readers emotions. First we see the happy tomboy, that turned into something of a rebel under certain circumstances -- those 'stupid sleeves' for example -- then on to the tragedy when cruel death comes to call. The poem ends with a fine final stanza that has a brilliant last line.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2019
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Thanks for this terrific summary of my poem. Positive reinforcement.
Comment from RodG
I really like how you open your poem by focusing on you, the injured sloth in the tree who Mum had to bandage with love. And then we hear how she suddenly died and left you and your dad broken-hearted. I especially found your closing stanza poignant. Rod
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2019
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I really like how you open your poem by focusing on you, the injured sloth in the tree who Mum had to bandage with love. And then we hear how she suddenly died and left you and your dad broken-hearted. I especially found your closing stanza poignant. Rod
Comment Written 13-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2019
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Thanks for the empathy in your review, Rod.
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You are very welcome.
Comment from oliver818
This is a lovely poem. I love the feeling it has. It flows well and the imagery you used is very nice. Thanks for sharing this and have a really great day.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2019
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This is a lovely poem. I love the feeling it has. It flows well and the imagery you used is very nice. Thanks for sharing this and have a really great day.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2019
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Thank you so much!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
It sounds like you were a bit of a tomboy as a child and you had lots of fun. I worry about the kids of today who seem to be content with mobile devices instead of playing outdoors and getting some exercise. Your poem is tinged with sadness and death of a parent at such a young age can leave a deep scar, I'm sorry for your loss, love Dolly x
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It sounds like you were a bit of a tomboy as a child and you had lots of fun. I worry about the kids of today who seem to be content with mobile devices instead of playing outdoors and getting some exercise. Your poem is tinged with sadness and death of a parent at such a young age can leave a deep scar, I'm sorry for your loss, love Dolly x
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Comment Written 13-Nov-2019