Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written sad poem about someone who try to hide their emotions but we can still see pass their charade and have a good idea what may cause their pain and tears that they try to hide away.

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2020

Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.

Excellent

Sadness is part of life. Even Jesus was sad when His friend Lazarus died. He wept John 11:35. Weeping for a time is good and healthy, but we must get up and begin living again.

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2020

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reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020

You are right about sadness - it can hold us back.
Thanks for reviewing.

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

This is a very good poem on miscommunication. Sometimes people second guess what the other is thinking/where he/she is coming from. It's easier to just walk away. Marilyn

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2020

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reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020

You are right to identify this poem as being about miscommunication. Sometimes in a relationship one party tries to emotionally manipulate the other one, or misunderstands motives and gets their wires crossed - and it becomes too hard to really feel close. Exit.

reply by BeasPeas on 15-Apr-2020

So true. Honest communication in all relationships is what makes them successful.

Comment from pome lover

Excellent

that is sad yet it sounds like the person is strong and will surely survive intact.
Interesting way you describe the situation - "My aces weren't backed.."
I liked: "and our brights become greyer.." - a good, original phrase and way to express the fading of feelings (or fading of sadness).
Good title, too.
pome lover

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2020

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reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020

Thanks very much for your positive comments about my poem.

Comment from Y. M. Roger

Excellent

A very sad offering .... perfect for the contest yet one that tugs at the reader for sure that we've all been there on either side of that fence... ;( ;( Best of luck at the polls.... well done! ;)

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2020

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reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020

Thanks for your comments and good wishes, Yvette.

Comment from The_Boy_Whodunnit

Excellent

I felt this read like song lyrics - it flows really well. It is very descriptive and really shows the sadness that it is trying to portray. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2020

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reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020

Thanks very much for your comments and good wishes.

Comment from Sharon Haiste

Excellent

I think this is a good entry for the Sad Poems writing prompt.
This very sad piece tells a clear story.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2020

Comment from Michael Ludwinder

Excellent

This is powerful. I love how your interior poem is sandwiched in between those wonderful opening and closing stanzas. The repetition works. I also like how it's explained with the middle stanzas. Just powerful writing. Very nicely done.

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2020

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reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020

Thanks for your feedback - I appreciate your remarks. Having my poem described as 'powerful' is very gratifying. I hate wishy-washy, trite stuff.

Comment from Rintins

Excellent

A excellent well written powerful poem. It promotes a moral for a lesson of brightness and sadness, shows a lesson for living, as we think and act.
We all live our lives differently.
Well done!

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2020

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reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020

Thanks for your feedback on this poem - I appreciate your time and comments.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

I enjoyed the sentiments in your poem and the repeated verses to drive home the point. It reads like a free-write with end rhymes, if that makes sense, but I enjoyed it, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2020

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reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020

Thanks for your feedback!