Pretending...
A sweet stroll at the beach releases my imagination...17 total reviews
Comment from Alchera
"Fast and feisty, a goose flies above my head; its musical chirp pretending, joyfully pretending to be a troubadour.
Quiet slice of beach this Sunday morning; pretending, peacefully pretending to be my chapel."
It may seem strange, but I personally give two parallel interpretations of the text and divide it into two parts. In each pair of writing there is a natural descriptive part surrounding the writer, in which she physically immerses herself and is real. The terminal part of each couple, however, leads along her thinking path, towards something otherworldly, the search for her eternal rest, within her own chapel. I did like it! Great work!
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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"Fast and feisty, a goose flies above my head; its musical chirp pretending, joyfully pretending to be a troubadour.
Quiet slice of beach this Sunday morning; pretending, peacefully pretending to be my chapel."
It may seem strange, but I personally give two parallel interpretations of the text and divide it into two parts. In each pair of writing there is a natural descriptive part surrounding the writer, in which she physically immerses herself and is real. The terminal part of each couple, however, leads along her thinking path, towards something otherworldly, the search for her eternal rest, within her own chapel. I did like it! Great work!
Comment Written 31-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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Thank you for stopping by and read my work.
Comment from lyenochka
This brief prose writing about a stroll on the beach reads like a free verse poem. I like the contrast of the relaxed beach with the feisty troubadour goose!
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
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This brief prose writing about a stroll on the beach reads like a free verse poem. I like the contrast of the relaxed beach with the feisty troubadour goose!
Comment Written 18-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
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Thank you for reading this work about the beach. Great idea to convert it into a free poetry poem. Thank you for reading my work.
Comment from Cindy Decker
Amanda, such a beautiful free verse poem. The verse 'playfully pretending,' that repeats in certain stanzas, rolls off one's tongue, or ones thoughts like an ocean wave would approach the shore. When reading your poem, I could feel my feet in the narrator's place, hearing and smelling the sea sounds. Beautiful work.
Cindy
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2020
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Amanda, such a beautiful free verse poem. The verse 'playfully pretending,' that repeats in certain stanzas, rolls off one's tongue, or ones thoughts like an ocean wave would approach the shore. When reading your poem, I could feel my feet in the narrator's place, hearing and smelling the sea sounds. Beautiful work.
Cindy
Comment Written 01-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2020
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Thank you Cindy, nice to meet you. Thank you for reading my work.
Comment from R. Hiland
Very nicely done. This piece could as easily be in a free verse category. Fine work either way............................
Thanks for sharing.......
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2020
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Very nicely done. This piece could as easily be in a free verse category. Fine work either way............................
Thanks for sharing.......
Comment Written 27-May-2020
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2020
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Thank you for reading my work and for your helpful suggestion. I will consider it. Thank you for your helpful comments.
Comment from estory
I think it's actually a great piece of prose poetry. the repetitious element of the 'pretending' phrases create this rhythmic and musical element that rocks underneath the cerebral language like an emotional undercurrent. Nice job with that. You end up with these sublime moments of contemplative walks, stretching from here to eternity. Little oases of time. estory
reply by the author on 27-May-2020
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I think it's actually a great piece of prose poetry. the repetitious element of the 'pretending' phrases create this rhythmic and musical element that rocks underneath the cerebral language like an emotional undercurrent. Nice job with that. You end up with these sublime moments of contemplative walks, stretching from here to eternity. Little oases of time. estory
Comment Written 27-May-2020
reply by the author on 27-May-2020
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Thank you for reading my contemplation walk around the beach. It's so nice for you to stop by and your understanding comments.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello amada
you also had me pertaining that you and I were taking a stroll on the beach.. My you did well with your vivid and pretending and you vivid imagination.
Gert
reply by the author on 25-May-2020
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Hello amada
you also had me pertaining that you and I were taking a stroll on the beach.. My you did well with your vivid and pretending and you vivid imagination.
Gert
Comment Written 25-May-2020
reply by the author on 25-May-2020
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Thank you so much Gert for stopping by and reading about my walk.
Comment from Bichon
This was a beautiful story. You have told your beach adventure well with fantastic imagery. I felt like I was on the beach with you on this Sunday morning. Great work!
reply by the author on 24-May-2020
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This was a beautiful story. You have told your beach adventure well with fantastic imagery. I felt like I was on the beach with you on this Sunday morning. Great work!
Comment Written 24-May-2020
reply by the author on 24-May-2020
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Thank you for reading my work, and for your walk alongside my words.
Comment from Jacob David Collins
You managed to include a lot of imagery in this piece and I really liked that. I felt as though I was there on that beach as I was reading it. I thought this was well written and your writing flowed well, I enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 24-May-2020
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You managed to include a lot of imagery in this piece and I really liked that. I felt as though I was there on that beach as I was reading it. I thought this was well written and your writing flowed well, I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 24-May-2020
reply by the author on 24-May-2020
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Thank you, dear writer for stopping by and reading my work.
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for allowing me to join you on this ramble along the shore. I enjoyed the mood you created with the focus on "pretending" and the addition of the "goose...troubadour". Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 24-May-2020
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Thank you for allowing me to join you on this ramble along the shore. I enjoyed the mood you created with the focus on "pretending" and the addition of the "goose...troubadour". Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 24-May-2020
reply by the author on 24-May-2020
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Thank you Joan, you can so well all my lines. I appreciate your support to my work.
Comment from A. Louise Robertson
This story and the picture were a nice breath of fresh air this morning, as I isolate indoors. It is nice pretending to smell the sea air and feel the sand between my toes, one of these days it will be "for real."
reply by the author on 24-May-2020
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This story and the picture were a nice breath of fresh air this morning, as I isolate indoors. It is nice pretending to smell the sea air and feel the sand between my toes, one of these days it will be "for real."
Comment Written 24-May-2020
reply by the author on 24-May-2020
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For sure those days will come again, soon. Thank you for reading this work on those good old days.