The Rebel
Cinquain5 total reviews
Comment from tempeste
Ciao mystery poet I gave you your second vote.
I enjoyed your take on the subject ....you took a broader approach and referred to man in general ....
...yes we are arrogant and this will be our downfall .
We like to stand on a pedestal and look down on everything else.
We do as we please thinking there will be no consequences ...
...we exploit flora and fauna.
Success, wealth and power are want man most hopes to achieve ..
We have polluted our world thanks to our egoistic thinking and behaviour , but soon we will have to pay for our actions .
I loved the photo of the wolf ..snarling ..
they are considered by many savage and vicious ..man off late is acting in the same way.
I wish you well in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2020
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Ciao mystery poet I gave you your second vote.
I enjoyed your take on the subject ....you took a broader approach and referred to man in general ....
...yes we are arrogant and this will be our downfall .
We like to stand on a pedestal and look down on everything else.
We do as we please thinking there will be no consequences ...
...we exploit flora and fauna.
Success, wealth and power are want man most hopes to achieve ..
We have polluted our world thanks to our egoistic thinking and behaviour , but soon we will have to pay for our actions .
I loved the photo of the wolf ..snarling ..
they are considered by many savage and vicious ..man off late is acting in the same way.
I wish you well in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2020
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Hello my friend, I am pleased to read your wonderful and thoughful insights; and thank you for the vote as well; appreciate your time.
Comment from ESOSTINE
Man is full of imperfections too numerous to mention. Your poem has listed what I consider the worst of humanity's shortcomings, hatred, envy, arrogance and feeling of superiority. The picture adds another of those flaws, man being a woof to his fellow man. Nice poem!
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2020
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Man is full of imperfections too numerous to mention. Your poem has listed what I consider the worst of humanity's shortcomings, hatred, envy, arrogance and feeling of superiority. The picture adds another of those flaws, man being a woof to his fellow man. Nice poem!
Comment Written 05-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2020
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Hello my friend, I appreciate your time and the thoughtful insights; thank you very much.
Comment from Darlene Franklin
At least you can see your flaws. That's a step in the right direction! They say our strengths are our weaknesses turned inside out (and vice versa). Those qualities probably make you strong decisive, a good leader unless you allow yourself to be the only voice heard. Just guessing.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2020
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At least you can see your flaws. That's a step in the right direction! They say our strengths are our weaknesses turned inside out (and vice versa). Those qualities probably make you strong decisive, a good leader unless you allow yourself to be the only voice heard. Just guessing.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2020
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Hello Darlene, I thank you for your time and the thoughtful review.
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You're welcome!
Comment from CHANYA MASHENGU
I like the choice of words to what your flaws are.
I am however not sure whether your flaw is arrogance or hatred or you hate arrogance. Please make it more obvious
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2020
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I like the choice of words to what your flaws are.
I am however not sure whether your flaw is arrogance or hatred or you hate arrogance. Please make it more obvious
Comment Written 05-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2020
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Hello Chanya, I appreciate your time and the kind review; the line, "Hatred to arrogance," has lot of latitude and it's upto the reader to interpret whatever; again, thank you and please be safe.
Comment from phill doran
Hello Anon
Saved by the final line allowing only for two syllables - three may have given you a way out via "I'm A man", which is where I thought we were going (which would would have set things off!)
No, this way is better: we're collectively guilty.
It is sad but I frequently reflect that we may actually just be some sort of self-aware cancer, and our very purpose is destruction.
I wish you well with your contest - the piece is well written, in form and thought-provoking.
Cheers
phill
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2020
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Hello Anon
Saved by the final line allowing only for two syllables - three may have given you a way out via "I'm A man", which is where I thought we were going (which would would have set things off!)
No, this way is better: we're collectively guilty.
It is sad but I frequently reflect that we may actually just be some sort of self-aware cancer, and our very purpose is destruction.
I wish you well with your contest - the piece is well written, in form and thought-provoking.
Cheers
phill
Comment Written 05-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2020
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Hello Phil, glad you stopped by; I appreciate your visit and the thoughtful insights; thank you very much.