Toxic Transference
A bit of free verse on negativity and wasted time106 total reviews
Comment from Siren_116
Here, here! Bravo!
I don't know that I have the words to do your piece the justice it deserves. I do know I am going to bookcase this piece and the next time I am at a loss for words I will refer to it!
Absolutely wonderful! You have hit the nail on the head!
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2009
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Here, here! Bravo!
I don't know that I have the words to do your piece the justice it deserves. I do know I am going to bookcase this piece and the next time I am at a loss for words I will refer to it!
Absolutely wonderful! You have hit the nail on the head!
Comment Written 16-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2009
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thanks so much my friend glad you enjoyed it
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you are so very welcome!
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Monte...in church this morning the sermon was about helping others less fortunate than ourselves so this poem is easy for me to reflect upon. You have some excellent thoughts in this poem. Written in free verse is very powerful....well done.....chey
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Hi Monte...in church this morning the sermon was about helping others less fortunate than ourselves so this poem is easy for me to reflect upon. You have some excellent thoughts in this poem. Written in free verse is very powerful....well done.....chey
Comment Written 16-Aug-2009
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thanks so much my friend
Comment from Carol D Parker
This is excellent in content and writing
I just last night had a dream that I was yelling at a man, saying, "If you'd get up and do something instead of blaming everyody and complaining about the way things are it would be a better world." Then I got up and you wrote this poem. We must have the same muse. I agree with your poem 100%.
Delora
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2009
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This is excellent in content and writing
I just last night had a dream that I was yelling at a man, saying, "If you'd get up and do something instead of blaming everyody and complaining about the way things are it would be a better world." Then I got up and you wrote this poem. We must have the same muse. I agree with your poem 100%.
Delora
Comment Written 16-Aug-2009
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thank you
Comment from dportwood
Earthwriter,
Many people, it seems, are more dedicated to fixing blame rather than finding solutions to problems. You give good advice in this free verse writing.
Duane
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2009
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Earthwriter,
Many people, it seems, are more dedicated to fixing blame rather than finding solutions to problems. You give good advice in this free verse writing.
Duane
Comment Written 16-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2009
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thank you
Comment from Joan E.
I wrote a poem recently talking about my philosophy of living my life seeing the cup half full rather than half empty. There is also that old expression about "putting one's money where one's mouth is." Thank you for being on the same wavelength and for creating this well-crafted poem. I appreciated your advice and bits of alliteration as well.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2009
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I wrote a poem recently talking about my philosophy of living my life seeing the cup half full rather than half empty. There is also that old expression about "putting one's money where one's mouth is." Thank you for being on the same wavelength and for creating this well-crafted poem. I appreciated your advice and bits of alliteration as well.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2009
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thank you so much
Comment from StevenJosephBruening
A finely crafted vers libre with a very current message. The short, clipped phrases is a lends itself wonderfully to the sense of desperation and an exasperated plea for help. The economy of words is very Oriental in influence, resembling such techniques as haiku and sedoka.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2009
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A finely crafted vers libre with a very current message. The short, clipped phrases is a lends itself wonderfully to the sense of desperation and an exasperated plea for help. The economy of words is very Oriental in influence, resembling such techniques as haiku and sedoka.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2009
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thank you my friend i appreciate your review very much
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My pleasure, I assure you.
~ Steven
Comment from Julliette
Are true sad the things that you talk in this poem. I think that the principal problem about poverty, disease, famine and homelessness is greed and pride in our hearths. When the persons get rid of this egoism, the life returns to charge sense.
I like your poem. Is a realistic and darkness poem but is god. Regards :)
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2009
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Are true sad the things that you talk in this poem. I think that the principal problem about poverty, disease, famine and homelessness is greed and pride in our hearths. When the persons get rid of this egoism, the life returns to charge sense.
I like your poem. Is a realistic and darkness poem but is god. Regards :)
Comment Written 16-Aug-2009
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thank you
Comment from Janilou
I agree with you! Helping someone else always makes us feel better. Rather selfish of us, really. :-) Just kidding. I enjoyed your poem and can't see a single word that needs correcting. Well done!
Jani
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I agree with you! Helping someone else always makes us feel better. Rather selfish of us, really. :-) Just kidding. I enjoyed your poem and can't see a single word that needs correcting. Well done!
Jani
Comment Written 16-Aug-2009
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thanks so much
Comment from Writewoman
I'm not particularly fond of free verse, but I was impressed with this one. Without using verbs (except for the key actions in the third verse of "refocus" and "creates"), you clearly conveyed your message which your after notes confirmed. Writewoman
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I'm not particularly fond of free verse, but I was impressed with this one. Without using verbs (except for the key actions in the third verse of "refocus" and "creates"), you clearly conveyed your message which your after notes confirmed. Writewoman
Comment Written 16-Aug-2009
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thanks so much I to am not fond of free verse when they are to wordy
Comment from Amicus
I enjoyed reading your wise and well crafted free verse on the destructive nature of persistent pessimism. Can't agree with you more on this point...though getting out of the habit of negativity and staying out may require enormous efforts and constant monitoring for some folks, it is life saving effort on many levels. Your suggestion to Help somebody is certainly a time honored and proven way out for many. It is always so much better to be part of a solution than part of a problem! One needs to note both the positive and negative aspects of what life presents in order to manage it effectively IMHO.
Good write.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2009
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I enjoyed reading your wise and well crafted free verse on the destructive nature of persistent pessimism. Can't agree with you more on this point...though getting out of the habit of negativity and staying out may require enormous efforts and constant monitoring for some folks, it is life saving effort on many levels. Your suggestion to Help somebody is certainly a time honored and proven way out for many. It is always so much better to be part of a solution than part of a problem! One needs to note both the positive and negative aspects of what life presents in order to manage it effectively IMHO.
Good write.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2009
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thanks so much
