Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "The soul of a soldier"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from LeeLongpre
This is good. Well done. I'd like to read more of your stuff. Good job. I really enjoyed your work. I have nothing bad to say about this.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2010
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This is good. Well done. I'd like to read more of your stuff. Good job. I really enjoyed your work. I have nothing bad to say about this.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2010
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thank you naspac
Comment from michaelcindy
I thought the first line was simply wonderful. Think what you have wrote ,would be written by fallen soldiers if they could. You honor all of our fallen soldiers .Thank you
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2010
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I thought the first line was simply wonderful. Think what you have wrote ,would be written by fallen soldiers if they could. You honor all of our fallen soldiers .Thank you
Comment Written 04-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2010
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thank you for reading Michael
Comment from dtimes3
Nicely stated message to those that follow us, but in following they are already behind the learning curve and are doomed to repeat. I vote for the last line because we don't seem to learn from history or we fail to believe the clues we are left with. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2010
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Nicely stated message to those that follow us, but in following they are already behind the learning curve and are doomed to repeat. I vote for the last line because we don't seem to learn from history or we fail to believe the clues we are left with. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2010
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welcome dtimes
Comment from gramalot8
Deepwater, a very good poem to add to your book. I loved the visual image and language used throughout the entire piece. I can see why you've earned your Recognized and All Time Best status for this poem.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2010
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Deepwater, a very good poem to add to your book. I loved the visual image and language used throughout the entire piece. I can see why you've earned your Recognized and All Time Best status for this poem.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2010
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thank you gramalot for the review
Comment from despiser
Deepwater
I enjoyed reading this piece, and the title is evokes a strong impression, but they do not quite connect together. Perhaps something like sacrifice or legacy would fit better than soul.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2010
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Deepwater
I enjoyed reading this piece, and the title is evokes a strong impression, but they do not quite connect together. Perhaps something like sacrifice or legacy would fit better than soul.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2010
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thank you for the comment and review despiser
Comment from E.P. Thomas
DW,
Nice free flowing poem honoring the veterans of all wars. Yes, as long there are governments, I am afraid we will always have wars over pointless matters and young men and women will give their lives. Nice poem.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2010
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DW,
Nice free flowing poem honoring the veterans of all wars. Yes, as long there are governments, I am afraid we will always have wars over pointless matters and young men and women will give their lives. Nice poem.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2010
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Thanks again Ep
Comment from Nerdette
This has a very powerful and meaningful message. I know that I love studying history, the events, the people, because it really is not an insight to the path, but a way that we can predict our own future. We can choose to correct our mistakes, or we will yet again see what we didn't learn from. And it is always so unfortunate when we don't learn from our mistakes, because then we have given up the lives of not only soldiers, but fathers, husbands, brothers, sons, wives, mothers, daughters, and so on...all in vain.
I just reccomend being consistent with the commas. Since you already have the lines broken up and separated, I don't think you need them at all, except for maybe in the middle of a sentence. That's all.
Great writing!
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2010
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This has a very powerful and meaningful message. I know that I love studying history, the events, the people, because it really is not an insight to the path, but a way that we can predict our own future. We can choose to correct our mistakes, or we will yet again see what we didn't learn from. And it is always so unfortunate when we don't learn from our mistakes, because then we have given up the lives of not only soldiers, but fathers, husbands, brothers, sons, wives, mothers, daughters, and so on...all in vain.
I just reccomend being consistent with the commas. Since you already have the lines broken up and separated, I don't think you need them at all, except for maybe in the middle of a sentence. That's all.
Great writing!
Comment Written 03-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2010
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thank you Nerdette for this review Gary
Comment from NadiaScrieva
This makes me wonder about whether it really is necessary for soldiers to "die for freedom." Humans seem to be the only crazy creatures who make these sacrifices and call them honourable.
I'd rather be an ant.
Best,
Nadia
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2010
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This makes me wonder about whether it really is necessary for soldiers to "die for freedom." Humans seem to be the only crazy creatures who make these sacrifices and call them honourable.
I'd rather be an ant.
Best,
Nadia
Comment Written 03-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2010
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thank you for this review
Comment from InHisownwrite
This is so powerful.....
You remind us of the soldier, and the fallen soldier...
And what they have sacrificed.... what all that should mean
I appreciate your writing so much.... I always keep my ears open when you speak, because I learn alot..
Thank you, Bryan
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2010
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This is so powerful.....
You remind us of the soldier, and the fallen soldier...
And what they have sacrificed.... what all that should mean
I appreciate your writing so much.... I always keep my ears open when you speak, because I learn alot..
Thank you, Bryan
Comment Written 03-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2010
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thank you bryan for this review
Comment from Kaladore
I think this is an excellent poem with a solid theme throughout. I like the questions you leave us with at the end and the observation that history tends to repeat itself. Great job!
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2010
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I think this is an excellent poem with a solid theme throughout. I like the questions you leave us with at the end and the observation that history tends to repeat itself. Great job!
Comment Written 03-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2010
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thank you for this review
