Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 49 "The Dying Art"A book of Poetry & Writing
193 total reviews
Comment from Bayberry
"We try to surround ourselves with people with integrity, flexibility and ethics, friends that make you laugh and focus on life, but if you fall will always hold out a hand to help you back up,"
You have said this so beautifully and it is exactly what I feel myself. A faithful friend is a great treasure in life. I appreciate your message shared through this meaningful posting. Warmest regards.
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"We try to surround ourselves with people with integrity, flexibility and ethics, friends that make you laugh and focus on life, but if you fall will always hold out a hand to help you back up,"
You have said this so beautifully and it is exactly what I feel myself. A faithful friend is a great treasure in life. I appreciate your message shared through this meaningful posting. Warmest regards.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
Comment from Ted T
Hi :)
Well written, provocative, and loaded with sensitivity.
Some very profound thinking went into this verse.
I wish more FS poets would try half as hard, it would make reviewing twice as rewarding.
Good read.
Ted
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Hi :)
Well written, provocative, and loaded with sensitivity.
Some very profound thinking went into this verse.
I wish more FS poets would try half as hard, it would make reviewing twice as rewarding.
Good read.
Ted
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
Comment from Jessica Bell
Very true words. I think we can all relate to this work because, unfortunately, as you say - falling is part of life.
The format of this and the flow read more like prose to me, although I suppose there is such a fine line between the two anyway.
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Very true words. I think we can all relate to this work because, unfortunately, as you say - falling is part of life.
The format of this and the flow read more like prose to me, although I suppose there is such a fine line between the two anyway.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
Comment from victor 66
Concerning your writing here, I don't know the circumstances but time does make a difference. And I have always been aware of my own issues first. You may already know this, life is really fair to us all. One time or another, life breaks everyone's heart. Best wishes.
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Concerning your writing here, I don't know the circumstances but time does make a difference. And I have always been aware of my own issues first. You may already know this, life is really fair to us all. One time or another, life breaks everyone's heart. Best wishes.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
Comment from Liandra
Your message is compelling and as far as I'm concerned so true. ...(There comes a time when you just have to walk away from the hurt and drama...)Recently I did just that.
Your words are words of wisdom, thank you for sharing this message. Now I no longer feel guilty of walking away.
Liandra :)
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Your message is compelling and as far as I'm concerned so true. ...(There comes a time when you just have to walk away from the hurt and drama...)Recently I did just that.
Your words are words of wisdom, thank you for sharing this message. Now I no longer feel guilty of walking away.
Liandra :)
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
Comment from artisart4u
When I selected this to read, this review was here, so maybe I didn't send it before. If I did, I am sorry to have done it again.
This is a nice poem about compassion. With the love of God in your heart this is possible, as the bible say, "you should love your neighbor as yourself."
People have all these things but without the love of God in their hearts they have nothing, they are afraid to take a chance or to say get involve.
To me it is a religious poem. Whatever style you intended it to be, it is good.
Good luck on your writing.
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When I selected this to read, this review was here, so maybe I didn't send it before. If I did, I am sorry to have done it again.
This is a nice poem about compassion. With the love of God in your heart this is possible, as the bible say, "you should love your neighbor as yourself."
People have all these things but without the love of God in their hearts they have nothing, they are afraid to take a chance or to say get involve.
To me it is a religious poem. Whatever style you intended it to be, it is good.
Good luck on your writing.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
This reminds me of the saying that it's not how long you live but what you do with the years that you do live. You can live 100 years and just be an awful person but if you live 50 and make them count...Then you found out what living really is about. Great job
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This reminds me of the saying that it's not how long you live but what you do with the years that you do live. You can live 100 years and just be an awful person but if you live 50 and make them count...Then you found out what living really is about. Great job
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi GW,
I just read a nonet poem by rama devi on a similar topic... how we have a mountain to climb in this life, and there may be those people along the way who give us guidance so that we might reach our goal.
You start in by showing us that there are also people out there who will hurt us without regret.
"We try to surround ourselves (with) people (with) integrity, flexibility and ethics, friends that make you laugh and focus on life, but if you fall will always hold out a hand to help you back up." ...suggestion, you use "with" twice in close quarters. What do you think of this?
(We should try to surround ourselves with people whose integrity, flexibility and ethics make us laugh and focus on an abundant life. When we fall, and we undoubtedly will, they will always hold out a hand to help us back to our clumsy feet.)
"Falling is part of life and trust is the basis of all real friendship, we enter this world alone with no illusion of what is to come."
suggestion,
(Falling is part of life, and trust is the basis of all real friendships. We enter this world alone, with no illusion of what is to come.)
"We die with the understanding of wisdom needed to survive, the in-between is the dying art of compassion with flexibility and accountability to others that cross your path between the parts of life we know as birth and death."
suggestion,
(We live, gradually gaining wisdom needed to survive the years between birth and death through the compassion of special people who cross our paths.)
Hope this helps.
cheers
Kimbob
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Hi GW,
I just read a nonet poem by rama devi on a similar topic... how we have a mountain to climb in this life, and there may be those people along the way who give us guidance so that we might reach our goal.
You start in by showing us that there are also people out there who will hurt us without regret.
"We try to surround ourselves (with) people (with) integrity, flexibility and ethics, friends that make you laugh and focus on life, but if you fall will always hold out a hand to help you back up." ...suggestion, you use "with" twice in close quarters. What do you think of this?
(We should try to surround ourselves with people whose integrity, flexibility and ethics make us laugh and focus on an abundant life. When we fall, and we undoubtedly will, they will always hold out a hand to help us back to our clumsy feet.)
"Falling is part of life and trust is the basis of all real friendship, we enter this world alone with no illusion of what is to come."
suggestion,
(Falling is part of life, and trust is the basis of all real friendships. We enter this world alone, with no illusion of what is to come.)
"We die with the understanding of wisdom needed to survive, the in-between is the dying art of compassion with flexibility and accountability to others that cross your path between the parts of life we know as birth and death."
suggestion,
(We live, gradually gaining wisdom needed to survive the years between birth and death through the compassion of special people who cross our paths.)
Hope this helps.
cheers
Kimbob
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
Comment from skye
Life is difficult. There are no rule books, no guarantees, no safety net. But there are people, friends, family, those who love and care for us.
This is very deep and disturbing.
It is a thoughtful commentary and view on life that death sometimes seems better than life.
It isn't. Until we are called by God to return, our job is to live this life well.
Excellent.
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Life is difficult. There are no rule books, no guarantees, no safety net. But there are people, friends, family, those who love and care for us.
This is very deep and disturbing.
It is a thoughtful commentary and view on life that death sometimes seems better than life.
It isn't. Until we are called by God to return, our job is to live this life well.
Excellent.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
Comment from michaelcahill
Quite pleased with the content of this. Very thought provoking and convincing when I let it travel through my brain for a while. No doubt, you have had some critique as to whether this is prose or poetry or something in between. It clearly states that you have called this "writing poetry". I don't see any need to question that. The words and meaning are excellent. What else matters? Very well done. mikey
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Quite pleased with the content of this. Very thought provoking and convincing when I let it travel through my brain for a while. No doubt, you have had some critique as to whether this is prose or poetry or something in between. It clearly states that you have called this "writing poetry". I don't see any need to question that. The words and meaning are excellent. What else matters? Very well done. mikey
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
