Steve's Poems for Kids
Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "Teddy Bear"A collection of my children's poems
194 total reviews
Comment from Writingfundimension
I found this poem just a wonderfully creative and delightful read. What a terrific children's poem. I sure hope you get this gem published! I can honestly see it with illustrations as a book. You've got my vote with this brilliant write! Warm regards, Bev
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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I found this poem just a wonderfully creative and delightful read. What a terrific children's poem. I sure hope you get this gem published! I can honestly see it with illustrations as a book. You've got my vote with this brilliant write! Warm regards, Bev
Comment Written 26-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Thank you - I have a few now that I would like to see as little picture books... One day...
Steve
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That's great! Good luck, Steve.
Comment from Cedar
This is a very well written poem. Your rhyming, flow and
presentation are all perfect. Congratulations on winning
the contest. Bill
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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This is a very well written poem. Your rhyming, flow and
presentation are all perfect. Congratulations on winning
the contest. Bill
Comment Written 26-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the review and the kind words...
Steve
Comment from oNray
Oh, what fun. I can visualize the day getting away from us and not getting everything done. This was a nice poem that did present well and just feel good,Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Oh, what fun. I can visualize the day getting away from us and not getting everything done. This was a nice poem that did present well and just feel good,Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 26-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the review and the kind words...
Steve
Comment from adewpearl
Good steady cadence and strong rhyming couplets make this sound good when read aloud, which is essential for a children's poem
Adorable illustration :-)
What a cute story line told from the point of view of this teddy bear about his adventures with Molly :-)
excellent use of alliteration in phrases like - brigands were beaten, piratical bunch
and jam on my jacket
This is simply delightful, Steve - congratulations on your contest win :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Good steady cadence and strong rhyming couplets make this sound good when read aloud, which is essential for a children's poem
Adorable illustration :-)
What a cute story line told from the point of view of this teddy bear about his adventures with Molly :-)
excellent use of alliteration in phrases like - brigands were beaten, piratical bunch
and jam on my jacket
This is simply delightful, Steve - congratulations on your contest win :-) Brooke
Comment Written 26-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Thanks, Brooke.
This was actually thrown together at the last minute with the deadline looming so I am very pleased with the final result - maybe I should work like that more often!
Steve
Comment from fairydancer
This is a wonderful winner of this contest. I never would have thought of doing a teddy! Very clever, and so beautifully told. Well done - Cally :)))
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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This is a wonderful winner of this contest. I never would have thought of doing a teddy! Very clever, and so beautifully told. Well done - Cally :)))
Comment Written 26-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Thanks, Cally.
Glad you enjoyed my whimsical teddy story.
Steve
Comment from Cheryl Daphine
No wonder this won the contest. What a gorgeous child's poem. The voice of the child sang out with clarity,describing the busy day of this little one. Great structure,and gorgeous rhyme. Beautiful,touching and well written.Congratulations on your win.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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No wonder this won the contest. What a gorgeous child's poem. The voice of the child sang out with clarity,describing the busy day of this little one. Great structure,and gorgeous rhyme. Beautiful,touching and well written.Congratulations on your win.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Thank you - I seem to have touched on a topic that strikes a chord with a lot of readers - thinking of doing a sequel - Jemima's story...
Steve
Comment from LadyCosgrove
Love this - Always a sucker for a teddy - Still got mine, he is quite old now. lol.
Fancy making him walk the plank!
Congratulations on your win. It is well deserved. x
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Love this - Always a sucker for a teddy - Still got mine, he is quite old now. lol.
Fancy making him walk the plank!
Congratulations on your win. It is well deserved. x
Comment Written 26-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Thank you - I think a lot of FanStorians must have had teddies - this has had over 80 reviews...
Steve
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A sure fire way to get attention is via a teddy - Did you see the film A.I.? Now that was a SuperTed. lol
Comment from Bryana
Absolutely lovely poem! It has a very good rhythm and flow.
Excellent use of words, you can see the girl telling her mother she's going to be outside playing with her bear.
Your poem placed a smile on my face.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Absolutely lovely poem! It has a very good rhythm and flow.
Excellent use of words, you can see the girl telling her mother she's going to be outside playing with her bear.
Your poem placed a smile on my face.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Thank you!
just heard that this won the contest. I am thrilled that it struck a chord with so many people.
Steve
Comment from rchitwood
This is a cute poem and it would make a good children's spoem.Your poem is very creative and has smooth line flow.Your photo compliments your writing well.Blessings Rita
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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This is a cute poem and it would make a good children's spoem.Your poem is very creative and has smooth line flow.Your photo compliments your writing well.Blessings Rita
Comment Written 25-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Thank you, Rita.
I actually patched this together in haste with the deadline only minutes away, so the outcome was pleasing!
Comment from Yvon
This is a great piece. I can't say I've a better flowing and rhyming poem in years and perhaps ever. The story is great! Six stars are yours for sure.
Yvon
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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This is a great piece. I can't say I've a better flowing and rhyming poem in years and perhaps ever. The story is great! Six stars are yours for sure.
Yvon
Comment Written 25-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Thank you so much, Yvon, for the generous review and the six stars.
I actually patched this together in haste with the deadline only minutes away, so the outcome was pleasing!
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Sometimes that is the best way to write. good stuff