Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "The soul of a soldier"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from Poetic Friend
What a poem in honor of Memorial Day! You reallly captured the essence of a soldier's soul and heart.
The prose-like format in the poem was not distracting, for the flow was smooth.
Thank you for the memorial reminder.
reply by the author on 31-May-2010
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What a poem in honor of Memorial Day! You reallly captured the essence of a soldier's soul and heart.
The prose-like format in the poem was not distracting, for the flow was smooth.
Thank you for the memorial reminder.
Comment Written 31-May-2010
reply by the author on 31-May-2010
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thank you poetic
Comment from Nicky B
I think it is important to understand that war should be avoided at all costs and if one is to fight for something let it be for the end of human conflict. Your piece here is well realized. Nick.
reply by the author on 31-May-2010
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I think it is important to understand that war should be avoided at all costs and if one is to fight for something let it be for the end of human conflict. Your piece here is well realized. Nick.
Comment Written 31-May-2010
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thank you Nick
Comment from workout14
THIS IS ANOTHER EXCELLENT WORK THAT I'M READING OF YOURS. UNFORTUNATELY, I RAN OUT OF SIX STARS RATING, BUT IF I HAD IT, I WORLD GIVE YOU 6 STATRS IN A HEARTBEAT!
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THIS IS ANOTHER EXCELLENT WORK THAT I'M READING OF YOURS. UNFORTUNATELY, I RAN OUT OF SIX STARS RATING, BUT IF I HAD IT, I WORLD GIVE YOU 6 STATRS IN A HEARTBEAT!
Comment Written 31-May-2010
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thank you workout
Comment from S.Yocom
You have expressed some good thoughts in this poem, deepwater. I nenjoyed reading it, and I agree with your meaningful remarks, which is why I gave you five stars instead of four. Please, however, make the corrections that were suggested by Nanette Mary. There are many grammatical and punctuation errors here, but I appreciate your writing this poem.
Sally
reply by the author on 31-May-2010
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You have expressed some good thoughts in this poem, deepwater. I nenjoyed reading it, and I agree with your meaningful remarks, which is why I gave you five stars instead of four. Please, however, make the corrections that were suggested by Nanette Mary. There are many grammatical and punctuation errors here, but I appreciate your writing this poem.
Sally
Comment Written 31-May-2010
reply by the author on 31-May-2010
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thank you sally
Comment from P. G. Simpkins
great in depth poem! very well thought out and its great to read a different kind of poem like that, very deep and expressive words, a joy to read well done : )
reply by the author on 30-May-2010
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great in depth poem! very well thought out and its great to read a different kind of poem like that, very deep and expressive words, a joy to read well done : )
Comment Written 30-May-2010
reply by the author on 30-May-2010
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thank you for reading
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Deepwater ....
In this free-thought writing, you have expressed your own deep thoughts and emotions relative to the fact that
there are many who may not remember the great sacrifices made by men of the Armed Forces, who gave their lives for the freedom of their country.
I have given you 5 stars, trusting that you will consider the changes recommended ...
* You have - so for you of little faith ... in the context of what you have written before this, I believe you mean - so that you of little faith ....
* You have - only then can you measure our worth and resolute against the actions we did indeed undertake for the name of liberty. I suggest - only then can you measure our worth and value the actions we did, indeed, undertake in defence of liberty.
* You have - Dare we call etc.etc. ending ... have you learned ... this should be - have you learned?
* You have - will you repeat etc.etc. ending ... who walked this world before .... this should be - who walked this world before you?
* You have - Can we rest etc.etc. ending ... that history will show the distinguished who have fallen will live on in the hearts .... or will fall victim to events we ignored. This is another question needing a question mark at the end. I also suggest - that history will ensure that those who have fallen will live on in the hearts ... Perhaps it would be a good idea to make of this last part, two or three different sentences. This is just a suggestion.
Clearly, this is heartfelt writing and I thank you for sharing your thoughts with us.
With love from .... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 30-May-2010
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Hullo Deepwater ....
In this free-thought writing, you have expressed your own deep thoughts and emotions relative to the fact that
there are many who may not remember the great sacrifices made by men of the Armed Forces, who gave their lives for the freedom of their country.
I have given you 5 stars, trusting that you will consider the changes recommended ...
* You have - so for you of little faith ... in the context of what you have written before this, I believe you mean - so that you of little faith ....
* You have - only then can you measure our worth and resolute against the actions we did indeed undertake for the name of liberty. I suggest - only then can you measure our worth and value the actions we did, indeed, undertake in defence of liberty.
* You have - Dare we call etc.etc. ending ... have you learned ... this should be - have you learned?
* You have - will you repeat etc.etc. ending ... who walked this world before .... this should be - who walked this world before you?
* You have - Can we rest etc.etc. ending ... that history will show the distinguished who have fallen will live on in the hearts .... or will fall victim to events we ignored. This is another question needing a question mark at the end. I also suggest - that history will ensure that those who have fallen will live on in the hearts ... Perhaps it would be a good idea to make of this last part, two or three different sentences. This is just a suggestion.
Clearly, this is heartfelt writing and I thank you for sharing your thoughts with us.
With love from .... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 30-May-2010
reply by the author on 30-May-2010
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thank you for your comments
Comment from Charlene0513
To deepwater,
A poem that wrestles over this life opposed to the fallen who have paid the ultimate price for liberty.
Will the young clan of today understand and tske to heart the revolting battles that caused devastation to many families and nations under God.
Spoken with much conviction and resolute to it's stature.
Charlene
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To deepwater,
A poem that wrestles over this life opposed to the fallen who have paid the ultimate price for liberty.
Will the young clan of today understand and tske to heart the revolting battles that caused devastation to many families and nations under God.
Spoken with much conviction and resolute to it's stature.
Charlene
Comment Written 30-May-2010
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thank you Charlene
Comment from Valkarie
I like this because...Your poetry always flows so well and is concise the rhythm of this piece captures the tension which in turn brings out the imagery of the piece fully.
An inspiring piece which is emotional and has a good balance. Good write.
Valkarie...
reply by the author on 30-May-2010
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I like this because...Your poetry always flows so well and is concise the rhythm of this piece captures the tension which in turn brings out the imagery of the piece fully.
An inspiring piece which is emotional and has a good balance. Good write.
Valkarie...
Comment Written 30-May-2010
reply by the author on 30-May-2010
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thank you Valkarie
Comment from PUPA
Gary, whenever the theme is about soldiers and wars, it is always sad, very sad. Your words are written with so deep emotions. Letting the dead soldier speak has added so much power to your poem.
God bless them all.
Love
Pupa
reply by the author on 30-May-2010
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Gary, whenever the theme is about soldiers and wars, it is always sad, very sad. Your words are written with so deep emotions. Letting the dead soldier speak has added so much power to your poem.
God bless them all.
Love
Pupa
Comment Written 30-May-2010
reply by the author on 30-May-2010
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thank you Pupa
Comment from Abba Lin
Hi depwater, I really enjoyed your poem..So profound, so true... The questions that you asked needed to be asked.. Do you ever learn a lesson when you make the same mistake.. hm.. sounds like a poem.. great job...Love Lin
reply by the author on 30-May-2010
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Hi depwater, I really enjoyed your poem..So profound, so true... The questions that you asked needed to be asked.. Do you ever learn a lesson when you make the same mistake.. hm.. sounds like a poem.. great job...Love Lin
Comment Written 30-May-2010
reply by the author on 30-May-2010
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thanks again Lin
