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Steve's Poems for Kids

Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "Teddy Bear"
A collection of my children's poems

194 total reviews 
Comment from words
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Such a charming write.

I especially like the use of "swash" and "buckle" here:
"Mummy, my Teddy and I will be playing
Outside in the garden," I hear Molly saying.
"We'll prob'ly be busy; I hope you don't mind.
There's pirates to battle and treasure to find."
"Blackbeard again!" I think with a chuckle.
"Oh where is my swash? Oh, where is my buckle?"

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2011


reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
    Thank you - some lines come like magic and the swash/buckle line was one of them. I actually patched this together in haste with the deadline only minutes away - the whole thing took less than two hours.
Comment from Patrick G Cox
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Hi the author,

An amusing tale of the life of a much loved Teddy Bear. Good luck with this piece of fun, it reads very well and carrys some lovely imagery.

Patrick

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2011


reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
    Thanks for the kind words, Patrick
Comment from Piggies Grandma
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This is a very lovely poem, and I enjoyed reading it very much. I'm sure children would love reading this or having it read to them. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2011


reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
    Thank you! Glad you enjoyed this whimsical little piece.
Comment from bayoupoet
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This is an interesting and
delightful tale. It is well
written and would be a perfect
story to read to children. It
is an absolute pleasure reading
for you. Good luck with the
contest!
sandra

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2011


reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
    Thank you, Sandra.
    I actually patched this together in haste with the deadline only minutes away, so the outcome was pleasing!
reply by bayoupoet on 26-Sep-2011
    You are very welcome!
Comment from snoopy lover
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OHHHHH! I loved this poem! It was just great written from Teddy's point of view and in his voice. I loved the "pirate" words: esp piratical and scuppered! I also loved the dolly's name, Jemima, and Teddy's interaction with her at the tea party. Flow was spectacular and word choice to die for. Thank you for a very well-written work!

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2011


reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
    Thank you for your enthusiastic review - maybe I could write a Snoopy poem next - although I've already been booked to do a sequel from Jemima's point of view.
reply by snoopy lover on 26-Sep-2011
    Snoopy poem? Wow! Or just as good: Woodstock. (I even have a tiny Woodstock tatoo discretly located on an inner arm. Don't tell anyone!)
Comment from TammyGail
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Oh I'm so happy I clicked on this poem it is so cute.. I was trying to find the best poem to vote for and .. Well you can say my Evan gave you thumbs up.. We love it

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2011


reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
    I'm guessing Evan is your little boy - I have been pleased to hear that several reviewers have road-tested this on their kids/grandkids - my only grand-daughter is a thousand miles away, but I look forward to reading it to her one day.
Comment from Mara del Mar
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A nice job, written with great humor and joy. The images are expressives and funny that I love read. Congrats and luck!

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2011


reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
    Gracias, Mara
Comment from poetbear
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I love them and collect them hence my name Poetbear.
This is charming, endearing,and delightful to read.
It is sweetness upn the desert air along with great use of flow and rhyme.
A must read that will be enjoyed.

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2011


reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
    Three collectors and a maker so far - no wonder this is getting good reviews.
Comment from healfromwithin
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Very cute. Nicely worded with an authentic sounding voice. The meter/cadence was handled well. I didn't find any major SPAGs to note. The mental visuals were great. Write more kid's stuff - this was darling.

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2011


reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
    You may be onto something, HFW - I have only done about three real kids' pieces and they have all rated through the roof...
    Thanks for the kind words.
Comment from HAWordsmith
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Well-written in form and format, rhyme and rhythm. Adorably creative and a pleasure to have read. Thank you for this posting, good luck in the contest and many blessings.

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2011


reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
    Thank you.
    Did I hear a rumour that you are not in the best of health? If so, my thoughts are with you in your recovery - try snuggling up with a teddy bear - it's sure to help!