Don't play on the Ice
Laugh and laugh often you will feel better!27 total reviews
Comment from MissMerri
Hahahaha! I wish I could see the three frumpy peasants. Did the two survive the third breakthrough? I think this poem requires a sequel. Good luck in this contest. It should be a fun one to score.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Hahahaha! I wish I could see the three frumpy peasants. Did the two survive the third breakthrough? I think this poem requires a sequel. Good luck in this contest. It should be a fun one to score.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Smiling back, Miss Meri, Thank you!
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Thank you,
Comment from Raul1
I have enjoyed reading your funny poem. This poem meets the requirements for the contest. It is clear and concise. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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I have enjoyed reading your funny poem. This poem meets the requirements for the contest. It is clear and concise. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 12-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Thanks Raul
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You're welcome!
Comment from Mia Twysted
I must not be knowledgable in ice humor. I don't like the cold so I would not go ice fishing. I had to reread this piece to try and understand it. They are fishing and two of them went through or cracked the ice beneath them three time.
I am missing something that would help me understand this piece better, but I'm not sure what. I do wish you good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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I must not be knowledgable in ice humor. I don't like the cold so I would not go ice fishing. I had to reread this piece to try and understand it. They are fishing and two of them went through or cracked the ice beneath them three time.
I am missing something that would help me understand this piece better, but I'm not sure what. I do wish you good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Thanks~
Comment from Bill Schott
This humorous 5-7-5, Don't Play On the Ice, has the right set up and notes that the peasants sink better and more often than anyone else who might be on the ice.
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This humorous 5-7-5, Don't Play On the Ice, has the right set up and notes that the peasants sink better and more often than anyone else who might be on the ice.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Smiling back, Bill, Thank you!
Comment from equestrik
This is quite an amazing picture-the ice is so ragged and goes on forever! Good write but makes me shiver just thinking of the cold! Best to you in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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This is quite an amazing picture-the ice is so ragged and goes on forever! Good write but makes me shiver just thinking of the cold! Best to you in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Thank you!
Comment from Boogienights
This is very funny and cute. Three times? They must have been frozen blocks by the end...lol. I like this very much, best of luck in the contest and thanks for sharing.:)
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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This is very funny and cute. Three times? They must have been frozen blocks by the end...lol. I like this very much, best of luck in the contest and thanks for sharing.:)
Comment Written 12-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Smiling back, BoogieNights, Thank you!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written humorous 5-7-5 poem. Any fisherman fishing onto the ice have the chance to break through the ice when it is least expected into the icy water beneath.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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A very well-written humorous 5-7-5 poem. Any fisherman fishing onto the ice have the chance to break through the ice when it is least expected into the icy water beneath.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Sandra, thanks much
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good artwork and
presentation.
-The syllable count is good,
along with the topic, imagery,
and rhyme.
-I like how you tell a short
story with a few words
about these "three frumpy peasants."
-The ending adds the humor
from this misadventure!
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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-Good artwork and
presentation.
-The syllable count is good,
along with the topic, imagery,
and rhyme.
-I like how you tell a short
story with a few words
about these "three frumpy peasants."
-The ending adds the humor
from this misadventure!
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Pam, thank you!
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You are very welcome!
Comment from Vanna1
I didn't find it funny unfortunately. Clever wording to add rhyme and also the time period in history. Got some visual out of it. Thanks for sharing.
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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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I didn't find it funny unfortunately. Clever wording to add rhyme and also the time period in history. Got some visual out of it. Thanks for sharing.
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Comment Written 12-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Thanks
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh dear, this is a tragedy and it is dangerous treading on icy waters as it can often be thin, this write sent a shiver down my spine, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Oh dear, this is a tragedy and it is dangerous treading on icy waters as it can often be thin, this write sent a shiver down my spine, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 12-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Smiling back, Dolly, Thank you!
