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Comment from CrystieCookie999
I think this short 15-syllable poem tells a poignant story in few words. I liked the rhymes and half rhymes at the end of each line: born, transformed, mourn. It seems those losses are the kinds of events that will always be mourned.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2021
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I think this short 15-syllable poem tells a poignant story in few words. I liked the rhymes and half rhymes at the end of each line: born, transformed, mourn. It seems those losses are the kinds of events that will always be mourned.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2021
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thank you and yes a life unlived and unknown, your comments are very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from A Little Bird
Congratulations on this emotional piece. As a young woman yet to bear children, having a still-born baby is one of my greatest fears. It really is heart-wrenching to imagine the grief that mothers of such infants go through. Good luck with the competition!
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2021
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Congratulations on this emotional piece. As a young woman yet to bear children, having a still-born baby is one of my greatest fears. It really is heart-wrenching to imagine the grief that mothers of such infants go through. Good luck with the competition!
Comment Written 02-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much, I am sure it is a fearful thought but we/you should not be thinking about it, think of the positives, your comments, review, and stars are much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Miss Cookie Atkinson
I like love the photo you choose to go with your poem, they are a perfect match. Even though it is a sad write, you captured my attention from the first word to the last.
Thank you for sharing
Cookie
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2021
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I like love the photo you choose to go with your poem, they are a perfect match. Even though it is a sad write, you captured my attention from the first word to the last.
Thank you for sharing
Cookie
Comment Written 02-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2021
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Thank you Miss Cookie, s always very much appreciated****kahpot
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Your very welcome
take care Cookie
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Kahpot,
I love your 15 syllable poem. It's so sad when this happens. I've known a few women who had stillborn babies; one got to hold her little girl all morning. Another was never told her child was dead (this was during the 50's) so she went through the delivery with high hopes. Her baby had died two weeks before of asphyxiation.
You capture the somber mourning men experience too.
Beautiful, moving poem.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes,
Cindy
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2021
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Kahpot,
I love your 15 syllable poem. It's so sad when this happens. I've known a few women who had stillborn babies; one got to hold her little girl all morning. Another was never told her child was dead (this was during the 50's) so she went through the delivery with high hopes. Her baby had died two weeks before of asphyxiation.
You capture the somber mourning men experience too.
Beautiful, moving poem.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes,
Cindy
Comment Written 01-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much, I really feel for the parents of such ??? words can't explain, your comments are very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from PoemsOfDD
This is a well thought out fifteen syllables poem.
The rhyme is good - born / mourn - and the story set
within such a short space is gripping and sad.
You have written a fine entry for the competition.
Best of luck. ~DD
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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2021
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This is a well thought out fifteen syllables poem.
The rhyme is good - born / mourn - and the story set
within such a short space is gripping and sad.
You have written a fine entry for the competition.
Best of luck. ~DD
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Comment Written 01-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2021
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Thank you for your wonderful comments, much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from lyenochka
Oh, that is heart-wrenching. You're so right that parents never recover from losing a child even if they only knew the child for the nine months of gestation. Well expressed in your rhyming triolet! Best wishes in the contest!
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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2021
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Oh, that is heart-wrenching. You're so right that parents never recover from losing a child even if they only knew the child for the nine months of gestation. Well expressed in your rhyming triolet! Best wishes in the contest!
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Comment Written 01-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2021
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Thank you for your comments, yes it is sad, much appreciated****kahpot
