Betrayal
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Comment from rspoet
Hello Sandra,
Nice touch of character development with Grant stopping to rescue the dog.
You certainly have the "evil" touch in the Rapier sections.
It might be good to put in a sentence about how he got to the island.
Those five ex-SAS operatives get a dressing down for leaving the home base and Tania & co. unprotected. What gits!
But I have confidence in Tania, Monica, Jose and co. to come through against
the evil one. Girl Power!
Well done.
Best wishes.
Robert
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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Hello Sandra,
Nice touch of character development with Grant stopping to rescue the dog.
You certainly have the "evil" touch in the Rapier sections.
It might be good to put in a sentence about how he got to the island.
Those five ex-SAS operatives get a dressing down for leaving the home base and Tania & co. unprotected. What gits!
But I have confidence in Tania, Monica, Jose and co. to come through against
the evil one. Girl Power!
Well done.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment Written 21-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much, Robert, for another of your fabulous reviews. The girls weren't left alone. Peter stayed with them, he wouldn't leave his wife and newborn baby unprotected. It's only Reg, Jeff and Shadow who have gone. Carl didn't come over this time, he stayed in Spain. I'll have to add a bit to make it clearer that Peter remained.
I'm glad you mentioned this because if you thought that the girls were left on their own with a wounded man, other readers would, too. It is clear in the next part, though.
Thanks again, my friend, and a big hug for the lovely sixth star! Have a wonderful day. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from Ric Myworld
Never a dull moment. Just when things look like they are starting to get better, another obstacle comes flying in to create more conflict. As always, thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2021
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Never a dull moment. Just when things look like they are starting to get better, another obstacle comes flying in to create more conflict. As always, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much for another of your lovely reviews, Ric. there aren't many more parts to go now. It's all coming together now. I'm glad you are still with me. Warm hugs. my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from aryr
Wow, an amazing continuation chapter, Sandra. This one definitely included several adventures. Grant rescuing an injured dog. The team splitting up to check out Rapier's possible places. Reg and Jeff were to check out the non-tourist spots while Grant and Shadow went back to Jose home. Meanwhile Rapier definitely had an issue with German Shepherds, one which brought back terrible memories. I will eagerly await the next chapter, very much enjoyed. Hugs, smiles and Blessings.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2021
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Wow, an amazing continuation chapter, Sandra. This one definitely included several adventures. Grant rescuing an injured dog. The team splitting up to check out Rapier's possible places. Reg and Jeff were to check out the non-tourist spots while Grant and Shadow went back to Jose home. Meanwhile Rapier definitely had an issue with German Shepherds, one which brought back terrible memories. I will eagerly await the next chapter, very much enjoyed. Hugs, smiles and Blessings.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much, Alie, for another of your wonderful, much looked forward to, reviews. You always say the nicest things. I'm glad you liked this part, it was quite a long one, but I couldn't find a better place to stop!! Warm hugs, my friend. Sandra xxxx
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You are so welcome Sandra. I think it stopped at just the right spot. I really enjoy the suspense you create. Blessings, hugs and smiles.
Comment from JudyE
So the girls are lucky the dogs are loose if all the menfolk have gone off.
I did pick up a few points, for what they're worth:
It was with care that Grant drove his speedboat through the gently lapping waves because of the rubbish that had been dumped in the water by the hurricane. - I might have swapped this around. Maybe: 'Because of the rubbish that had been dumped in the water by the hurricane, it was with care that Grant drove his speedboat through the gently lapping waves .
Looking at it all, he could see it would take quite a while to clean up, although the sea itself would most likely throw the majority of it back onto the shore. - maybe use 'Looking at the debris, he could see....'
When Jeff pointed out what appeared to be a seemingly, undamaged, wooden house floating in the water, - delete comma after 'seemingly'
He knew he had to be quick because it wouldn't be long before more water got in and the house would sink. - maybe 'He knew he had to be quick because, before long, the influx of water would cause the house to sink.'
Grant pulled himself up onto the doorstep and after steadying himself against the sudden rocking, he went inside. - comma after 'and'
His tail thumped slowly when he saw Grant, but didn't attempt to get up. - I think you need to say 'but he/the dog didn't attempt to get up.'
It was then he saw the blood on his side. - maybe '... the blood on its side'
Careful not to hurt the dog any more than he already was, Grant made his way back to the door. - maybe 'Careful not to cause further injury to the dog, Grant made his way back to the door'
'What are you going to do with the mut?' - spelling - mutt
and get off this God forsaken island before Grant and his team came back. - I would have hyphenated 'God-forsaken'
Easing his way out of the shrubbery he'd been hiding in, Rapier stretched his protesting limbs to get the blood flowing again. - I might have said '.... shrubbery in which he'd been hiding...'
Grant was horrified and told the vet he'd pay for the dog's treatment. _ might have written this as 'Horrified, Grant told the vet....'
Rapier's adrenalin was bubbling, the excitement of the kill never failed - maybe 'the excitement of an anticipated kill....'
Best wishes
Judy
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2021
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So the girls are lucky the dogs are loose if all the menfolk have gone off.
I did pick up a few points, for what they're worth:
It was with care that Grant drove his speedboat through the gently lapping waves because of the rubbish that had been dumped in the water by the hurricane. - I might have swapped this around. Maybe: 'Because of the rubbish that had been dumped in the water by the hurricane, it was with care that Grant drove his speedboat through the gently lapping waves .
Looking at it all, he could see it would take quite a while to clean up, although the sea itself would most likely throw the majority of it back onto the shore. - maybe use 'Looking at the debris, he could see....'
When Jeff pointed out what appeared to be a seemingly, undamaged, wooden house floating in the water, - delete comma after 'seemingly'
He knew he had to be quick because it wouldn't be long before more water got in and the house would sink. - maybe 'He knew he had to be quick because, before long, the influx of water would cause the house to sink.'
Grant pulled himself up onto the doorstep and after steadying himself against the sudden rocking, he went inside. - comma after 'and'
His tail thumped slowly when he saw Grant, but didn't attempt to get up. - I think you need to say 'but he/the dog didn't attempt to get up.'
It was then he saw the blood on his side. - maybe '... the blood on its side'
Careful not to hurt the dog any more than he already was, Grant made his way back to the door. - maybe 'Careful not to cause further injury to the dog, Grant made his way back to the door'
'What are you going to do with the mut?' - spelling - mutt
and get off this God forsaken island before Grant and his team came back. - I would have hyphenated 'God-forsaken'
Easing his way out of the shrubbery he'd been hiding in, Rapier stretched his protesting limbs to get the blood flowing again. - I might have said '.... shrubbery in which he'd been hiding...'
Grant was horrified and told the vet he'd pay for the dog's treatment. _ might have written this as 'Horrified, Grant told the vet....'
Rapier's adrenalin was bubbling, the excitement of the kill never failed - maybe 'the excitement of an anticipated kill....'
Best wishes
Judy
Comment Written 21-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2021
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Hi, Judy, thank you so much for going over this part. I'm going to do the corrections now. :))
The girls aren't alone, they have Peter there, Latifah's husband, and Jose, even though he'd not be much good because of his injuries, but if his wife and child were in danger, he'd jump in regardless. And of course, two highly trained guard dogs. We'll see how they fare in the next part. Thank so much, my friend. I really appreciate your reviews. Warm hugs, Sandra xx
Comment from Ben Colder
Well, the wife and children are probably at their house hidden, I suppose, but who knows with this blow of a story. It sounds as if the Hurrican did a number on things. Grant has a dog now. Keep it rolling. Profanity is not necessary. It weakens the writing.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2021
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Well, the wife and children are probably at their house hidden, I suppose, but who knows with this blow of a story. It sounds as if the Hurrican did a number on things. Grant has a dog now. Keep it rolling. Profanity is not necessary. It weakens the writing.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much for your lovely review and the golden star, Chuck. I'm sure Grant will take the dog home with him, and his German shephelds will welcome him into the fold. I love animals, and hate to see them hurt. Warm hugs, my dear friend. Sandy xxxx
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You do good as always with your story. You are so talented. I love following your work.
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Bless your heart, dear friend. I'll be back to writing a children's book again soon. I like those best. :) xxxx
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About slang or profanity. Years ago, one of my tutors, two times Pulitzer Prize winners, encouraged me to understand slang and profanity.
I did use it until they said, imagine you are writing to family, especially the grandchildren; how do they see you, the writer? I was made to remember what Jesus said from within the heart a man speaks.
I quickly learned that from the heart reaches the heart. Amazing how I found strong wording to replace it.
LOL. So far. So good.
My blessings to you, Sandy.
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That makes complete sense to me, chuck. Todays programs on the television are full of gross profanity by woman as well as men. It's becoming common-place. I hate that sort of language, even more so when I hear children saying it, too. Thanks, Chuck, for sharing that with me, you are a wise man yourself, my friend. Sending lots of love and hugs. xxx
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I have made so many mistakes just trying to what I think was right. Sandy, our children, and grandchildren are all we have to hang on to. The world is totally corrupted and if we keep a good example for them, then they will have that much in their corner.
My blessing to you, dear Sandy.
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We all make mistakes, and that is one thing God knows, and that's why He sent Jesus to us to tell us He forgives us our sins. In exchange He just wants us to follow His words as best we can. You are a good man, my dear friend. Love you lots.
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sewed n corruption raised incorruptibly
Comment from Dilettante junior
Dearest Sandra,
How I love to read another chapter of yours as I sip coffee this morning! Great chapter. I particularly appreciated the dog parallel. One side humans going to a dog's rescue and on the other side, dogs defending human lives by warding off evil. I believe they do have a sixth sense don't you think?
Excellently portrayed.
Here goes my sixth star. Well deserved!
Cheers,
DJ
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2021
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Dearest Sandra,
How I love to read another chapter of yours as I sip coffee this morning! Great chapter. I particularly appreciated the dog parallel. One side humans going to a dog's rescue and on the other side, dogs defending human lives by warding off evil. I believe they do have a sixth sense don't you think?
Excellently portrayed.
Here goes my sixth star. Well deserved!
Cheers,
DJ
Comment Written 21-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2021
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I'm so pleased you picked up on the dogs, DJ. That was a lovely way of putting it. Dogs are amazing animals, and I'm with you on the sixth sense. Thank you so very much for this wonderful review, and for giving me that shiny sixth star, you are such a nice person! Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxxx
Comment from l.raven
Hi Sandra, what a sweet guy Grant is...I would've
done the same thing for the dog...but I might of had to shoot the vet for wanting to put him down...
to bad those German Shepherds didn't bring Rapier down...
(I had 13 of them...at one time)...
now the guys have better get a move on it...find Jose's family...before Rapier decides to go change his plans...go after Tania as well...
this is where Jose would have been needed...
ok...lets go find Rapier...and go after Colin and Cruella...really well written my amazing friend...
a awesome chapter you...can't wait to see what happens
sweet girl...sending you tons of love...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2021
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Hi Sandra, what a sweet guy Grant is...I would've
done the same thing for the dog...but I might of had to shoot the vet for wanting to put him down...
to bad those German Shepherds didn't bring Rapier down...
(I had 13 of them...at one time)...
now the guys have better get a move on it...find Jose's family...before Rapier decides to go change his plans...go after Tania as well...
this is where Jose would have been needed...
ok...lets go find Rapier...and go after Colin and Cruella...really well written my amazing friend...
a awesome chapter you...can't wait to see what happens
sweet girl...sending you tons of love...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 20-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2021
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Rapier was too far away from Ben and Sam to smell him, but.............
The next chapter brings us one step closer to the final parts and I'm sure you will love what that will be like! I'm having some fun writing the next part, lol. Now don't you worry about Colin and Cruelly, Grant hasn't forgotten them. Or who betrayed him.
Thank you so much for that sixth highly polished star, and this gorgeous review. You always make me smile, heck, you always have me laughing loudly! Love you loads, my dear friend. Take care, hot hugs! Sandra xxxx
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I hope we get to see Grant and Tania marry...
ORRRRR there will have to be a series (book 2) behind this one...a great idea...
Grant and his sidekick gang...
and Tania...retired from the Art's and drafts...to be Dr.Tania...OB-Gynecologist...
ya just get chills thinking about it...a second book...
I know I will love it...I have loved the entire story told...and from your reviews...so have a lot of people...
you are sooooo welcome my amazing friend...
sending lots of love and hugs your way...
you take care as well...Linda xxoo
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A second book!!! I've just told Graham what you said, and he said, 'that's a good idea and Mildred could become their housekeeper, Oh, Lordy! Whatever next!!! LOL! You're both crazy, lol. But now you have planted the seed.... Hmm. Lol, Love you, dear, Linda. You are such a fun friend, even when you aren't feeling funny. You naturally put smiles on other people's faces. Hugs and love. xxxxxx
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OK!!! now lets not get to carried away here...
but Grahams right...it's a good idea...
of course Grant has a housekeeper...Latifah...who is also his friend...but once he meets Mildred...he may be able to employ her somewhere in one of his homes...
and you plant your seed writing book 2...and Grant and Tania can plant their seed...and they can have a little rich child...
when Colin and Cruella break out of prison...they can try to kidnapping the rich kid...and Grant can get his gang together...
and he can be a knight in shinning armor...with his three little tins cans...and save their baby...ok...I'm getting to far ahead of myself...headache...
Thank You Sandra for your kind words...I am sooooo honored to have you as my special friend...you so make me smile as well...laugh too... think about that second book...and tell Graham I'm so glad he thinks it's a good idea...hmmmmm...all my love landing now...love and smiles...xxoo
Comment from Cindy Warren
Grant's always the hero. Perhaps the dog will save him in the future. I wish those two German shepherds will find Rapier and chew him up, but I think there's more to come before that happens. Will Grant check the attic? Hope so. It would be hard to drag a woman and her kids into one without leaving a trace. He might notice something.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2021
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Grant's always the hero. Perhaps the dog will save him in the future. I wish those two German shepherds will find Rapier and chew him up, but I think there's more to come before that happens. Will Grant check the attic? Hope so. It would be hard to drag a woman and her kids into one without leaving a trace. He might notice something.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2021
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Rapier isn't out of the woods yet, and you will see what that means in the next part! Lol. Thank you so much for this lovely review, Cindy, I think you'll like the next part. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
Sandra:
What a shame the German Shepherds didn't get a chance to sharpen their teeth on Rapier's calves - that would be just dessert, right? (Pun fully intended, btw.) Anyway, I would think Grant's team would check a house from the top (attic) to bottom (basement) if looking for someone. I hope I am right.
Jan
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2021
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Sandra:
What a shame the German Shepherds didn't get a chance to sharpen their teeth on Rapier's calves - that would be just dessert, right? (Pun fully intended, btw.) Anyway, I would think Grant's team would check a house from the top (attic) to bottom (basement) if looking for someone. I hope I am right.
Jan
Comment Written 20-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2021
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Lol, Jan, I love your way of thinking. Give them a chance, you never know what's going to happen. Thank you so much for this lovely review. I really appreciated it. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from judiverse
Wow ! You really show how heartless Rapier is. He is determined to kill and looks forward to. Great details of the storm damage as Grant and his party make their way in the speedboat. I enjoyed the rescue of the dog. Shows Grant's compassion and also the damage the hurricane has done. The don't find any sign of Anna and the children. Hoping they get to them before Rapier has a chance to act. Great chapter with lots of action. judi
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2021
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Wow ! You really show how heartless Rapier is. He is determined to kill and looks forward to. Great details of the storm damage as Grant and his party make their way in the speedboat. I enjoyed the rescue of the dog. Shows Grant's compassion and also the damage the hurricane has done. The don't find any sign of Anna and the children. Hoping they get to them before Rapier has a chance to act. Great chapter with lots of action. judi
Comment Written 20-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2021
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Thank you so very much for another wonderful review, Judi, and those six stars!! Rapier is pure evil, but even he can make a mistake. He has taken on the wrong people. Thanks again, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
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You're welcome. That's why we need the good guys. judi
