Betrayal
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Comment from tfawcus
You've tied up the loose ends nicely in this chapter. Gladys was a bit of a surprise. Had we met her earlier? I can't remember. I wonder what kind of a hold Marilyn has over her.
A couple of suggestions:
The plan had been not to go back to their homes, but for Tania, Monica, and the rest of the team to stay at Grant's London apartment. [Maybe: The plan had been for Tania, Monica, and the rest of the team to stay at Grant's London apartment rather than going back to their homes]
I'm not going in and accusing her(.) I know I had a mental seizure.
(Which, b)By the way, you'll be surprised to learn that (she) handed in her notice, saying something about a sick relative and then just walked out.
The charge will be (for) conspiring to have Miss Russell murdered
I can't allow a civilian going (to go) along on a bust.
You're on the home straight now. What a story it has been! I've been loving it.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2021
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You've tied up the loose ends nicely in this chapter. Gladys was a bit of a surprise. Had we met her earlier? I can't remember. I wonder what kind of a hold Marilyn has over her.
A couple of suggestions:
The plan had been not to go back to their homes, but for Tania, Monica, and the rest of the team to stay at Grant's London apartment. [Maybe: The plan had been for Tania, Monica, and the rest of the team to stay at Grant's London apartment rather than going back to their homes]
I'm not going in and accusing her(.) I know I had a mental seizure.
(Which, b)By the way, you'll be surprised to learn that (she) handed in her notice, saying something about a sick relative and then just walked out.
The charge will be (for) conspiring to have Miss Russell murdered
I can't allow a civilian going (to go) along on a bust.
You're on the home straight now. What a story it has been! I've been loving it.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2021
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Thank you so very much for the OLYMPIC GOLD star, Tony!! Lol. (we've just won the gold and silver in the swimming!!)
No, Gladys hasn't been mentioned before, only you and Robert picked me up on that, and Robert (rspoet) suggested adding a line or two nearer the middle of the book, even if reviewers forget her, she'll be there. Where would I be without you wonderful reviewers??
And a big thank you for the editing help. I've made those changes. I'm so glad you've enjoyed this book, thank you for telling me that. I hope you'll enjoy the ending. Warm hugs, dear friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from aryr
An amazing continuation chapter, Sandra, very well done and thoroughly enjoyed. I am glad to see that Grant's plane was met by Commander George Raymond and the police force to take Rapier into custody. I am also glad that Marilyn and Colin will spend some time behind bars. It will be interesting to find out what happen with Gladys, there has to be a reason for her betrayal. Who really knows what Marilyn, Colin or Max did to her or her sister. Very much enjoyed. Looking for more. Blessings, hugs and smile, Alie.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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An amazing continuation chapter, Sandra, very well done and thoroughly enjoyed. I am glad to see that Grant's plane was met by Commander George Raymond and the police force to take Rapier into custody. I am also glad that Marilyn and Colin will spend some time behind bars. It will be interesting to find out what happen with Gladys, there has to be a reason for her betrayal. Who really knows what Marilyn, Colin or Max did to her or her sister. Very much enjoyed. Looking for more. Blessings, hugs and smile, Alie.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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Aw, thank you, Alie, for this really lovely review. You've made my day. I can now go to bed with the biggest smile. All your questions will soon be answered. Two parts and a prologue left! Sending you a big, warm hug, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
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You are so welcome, Sandra. Awww only two parts and a prologue left, gosh darn, but that's okay. Then you will be off on another adventure. Blessings, hugs and smiles.
Comment from rspoet
Hello Sandra,
Things are shaping up quite nicely as the pieces fall into place.
Rapier seems a bit too cooperative, but prison can motivate people
to do things they might not otherwise consider.
It looks like Marilyn Harding will fall into a trap; that leaves Colin
to get his due as well.
One note on Gladys. Usually in mystery novels, a key charter, like the snitch, isn't introduced at the very end without some mention earlier in the story.
You might want to add a simple line somewhere that mentions her name.
Something like: Gladys will be cleaning the office tonight.
Readers will pay no heed in an early chapter, and it will fade from their mind, but it makes it more satisfying when her name reappears in the end.
Just a suggestion.
Great chapter, my friend.
Best wishes to all.
Robert
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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Hello Sandra,
Things are shaping up quite nicely as the pieces fall into place.
Rapier seems a bit too cooperative, but prison can motivate people
to do things they might not otherwise consider.
It looks like Marilyn Harding will fall into a trap; that leaves Colin
to get his due as well.
One note on Gladys. Usually in mystery novels, a key charter, like the snitch, isn't introduced at the very end without some mention earlier in the story.
You might want to add a simple line somewhere that mentions her name.
Something like: Gladys will be cleaning the office tonight.
Readers will pay no heed in an early chapter, and it will fade from their mind, but it makes it more satisfying when her name reappears in the end.
Just a suggestion.
Great chapter, my friend.
Best wishes to all.
Robert
Comment Written 26-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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That is such good advice, Robert. I'm going to do that when I start my final editing, which will be very soon. Thank you so much for that! You've been a great help with you suggestions all the way through.
Thank you for the golden star, and for the lovely review, I really have appreciated you input a lot. Warm hugs, my friend. Sandra xxx
Comment from BethShelby
It is good to know that Max is going to be locked up for a long time. I'm sure the maid was somehow being forced to tell the location or else harm would come to her sister. I love how this story is developing. I'm wondering if there will be danger yet, or if your tying the story up. It will be interesting to see what happens with Grant where his mother and brother are when the there come in to arrest them.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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It is good to know that Max is going to be locked up for a long time. I'm sure the maid was somehow being forced to tell the location or else harm would come to her sister. I love how this story is developing. I'm wondering if there will be danger yet, or if your tying the story up. It will be interesting to see what happens with Grant where his mother and brother are when the there come in to arrest them.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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We can't let the baddies get away with it, can we, Beth? Lol. The truth will be out in the next part. Everyone already thinks it's Gladys, Lol. Thank you so much, my friend, for another lovely review. I'm so pleased you are still enjoying it. Warm hugs. Sandra xxxx
Comment from JudyE
Well, I didn't find much this time, did I? The ends are all getting tied up very nicely. Maybe Grant's mother has some hold over Gladys. I guess we'll find out very soon.
Just one suggestion:
My one pleasure would be to go with your men when they arrest her. - I might have said 'when they arrest my mother'
Cheers
Judy
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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Well, I didn't find much this time, did I? The ends are all getting tied up very nicely. Maybe Grant's mother has some hold over Gladys. I guess we'll find out very soon.
Just one suggestion:
My one pleasure would be to go with your men when they arrest her. - I might have said 'when they arrest my mother'
Cheers
Judy
Comment Written 26-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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Thank you so much, Judy, that gave me the biggest smile ever!!! I did agree with your suggestion and I've been and changed it. Thank you for another lovely review, my friend. Warm hugs. Sandra xxx
Comment from Ric Myworld
Another great chapter to start off the new week. And just like most of your other chapters, one mystery is solved, then another one takes its place re-revs our interest at closing. Great job! Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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Another great chapter to start off the new week. And just like most of your other chapters, one mystery is solved, then another one takes its place re-revs our interest at closing. Great job! Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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Thank you so much, dear Ric, for this lovely review. You always brighten my day. My book is rapidly coming to an end, two more to come and an epilogue. But there's another story on the way. Thank you for being such a dear friend. Warm hugs. Sandra xxxx
Comment from lyenochka
I'm glad that Grant found out enough information to investigate Gladys, who might have been Rapier's informant. Great dialogue throughout and hope the put Colin and his mother behind bars soon!
One comment:
I've listened to the tape and you're right (It was on a USB drive so maybe "recording" would be better than "tape.")
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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I'm glad that Grant found out enough information to investigate Gladys, who might have been Rapier's informant. Great dialogue throughout and hope the put Colin and his mother behind bars soon!
One comment:
I've listened to the tape and you're right (It was on a USB drive so maybe "recording" would be better than "tape.")
Comment Written 25-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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Thank you so much for this lovely review, Helen, and thank goodness you picked up on the 'tape'. I had it as a tape recorder to start with, and realised that is now old-hat now, and he'd be using a USB. I changed that and forgot to change it to 'recording' when the Commander listened to it! Phew! Thank you!! Sending you a humongous hug, my friend!! Have a lovely day. Sandra xx
Comment from l.raven
Hi Sandra, ok...picture this...my head hanging low...shaking it from left to right...with all my pleading...my hints ( by the way, mine being better than yours)...still NO informer...woe-is-me...I feel-feel at a loss...sigh...what's a person to do???...is it to late for a bribe???...
oh there's no place like home...so glad everyone is home and comfortable...tucked in an cozy tight...at Grant's mansion...hmmmmm...
now!!! I don't believe for a minute Glady's left on her own...and Grant better get to her fast...I would bet someone threatened her using her sister's Life...so now that I solved that problem...
I'm still leaning on Margaret being a part of this...who else goes in and out of that office???...
and I want to be there when they arrest Cruella...and her troll son Colin...at least they know who the informer is...hmmmmm...
well!!!lets hope the Commander wasn't paid off by them...
so lets see what Glady's has to say...
another awesome chapter my amazing friend...totally holds your attention...from day one...can't wait to read the book right through...all this waiting drives a person crazy...you know I love it sweet girl...sending my love in bunches you...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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Hi Sandra, ok...picture this...my head hanging low...shaking it from left to right...with all my pleading...my hints ( by the way, mine being better than yours)...still NO informer...woe-is-me...I feel-feel at a loss...sigh...what's a person to do???...is it to late for a bribe???...
oh there's no place like home...so glad everyone is home and comfortable...tucked in an cozy tight...at Grant's mansion...hmmmmm...
now!!! I don't believe for a minute Glady's left on her own...and Grant better get to her fast...I would bet someone threatened her using her sister's Life...so now that I solved that problem...
I'm still leaning on Margaret being a part of this...who else goes in and out of that office???...
and I want to be there when they arrest Cruella...and her troll son Colin...at least they know who the informer is...hmmmmm...
well!!!lets hope the Commander wasn't paid off by them...
so lets see what Glady's has to say...
another awesome chapter my amazing friend...totally holds your attention...from day one...can't wait to read the book right through...all this waiting drives a person crazy...you know I love it sweet girl...sending my love in bunches you...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 25-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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Cruella...and her troll son ..... I'm wetting my self with laughing so much, you are always soooo funny, Linda!
I thought my hint was rather good. Lol, you wanted more!!!!? Goodness me, but you will be getting the whole deal in the next part, promise, and then the final explosive chapter the week after. There is also be an epilogue. So three more and that will be the end of this book.
My next book is foaming at the mouth to get started.
Thank you so very much, dearest Linda, for another fabulous review and that golden sixth star. I love you dearly. Email me and let me know how you are doing. I don't like to ask on here. Love and hugs, dear friend. :)) Sandra xxxx
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what hint was that was that???...OK lets try again...next week...
and you beautiful girl. are so very welcome...
alwaysssss...much love and many hugs heading your way...xxoo
Comment from Ben Colder
This guy, Grant, sure had a sneezy family. His mother and stepbrother were nothing but trash. Glad they will put the bad guy away for a long time. We are now back in London, and the world keeps turning. Good one, Sandy.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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This guy, Grant, sure had a sneezy family. His mother and stepbrother were nothing but trash. Glad they will put the bad guy away for a long time. We are now back in London, and the world keeps turning. Good one, Sandy.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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He does, Chuck. I feel sorry for all children in the real world who have grown up in loveless families. At least Grant had his grandfather. Thank you so much for this lovely review, dear friend, and that golden star. You're a wonderful friend. Warm hugs and love, Sandy. xxxx
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
. . . and the plot thickens. You did a great job, Sandra, with this exciting chapter. I enjoyed reading it. Everything seems to be going smoothly, then the thought surfaces again as who could be the leak. I do believe it has much to do with the cleaning woman. Maybe Grant's mother got to her, or she was feeding her info all along for years. I believe Rapier is planning his escape even though he is in custody. Who knows who owes him or who he owns. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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. . . and the plot thickens. You did a great job, Sandra, with this exciting chapter. I enjoyed reading it. Everything seems to be going smoothly, then the thought surfaces again as who could be the leak. I do believe it has much to do with the cleaning woman. Maybe Grant's mother got to her, or she was feeding her info all along for years. I believe Rapier is planning his escape even though he is in custody. Who knows who owes him or who he owns. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 25-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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Thank you, dear Jan! I'm so pleased you enjoyed this part. More answers will be revealed in the next part. Two to go and an epligue, so there will be fireworks soon!! Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxxx
