Betrayal
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Comment from ShirleyT1
What a great chapter you've written! And you left hanging in suspense for the showdown between Grant and his mother. You are very gifted not only at writing, but story-telling. Looking forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2021
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What a great chapter you've written! And you left hanging in suspense for the showdown between Grant and his mother. You are very gifted not only at writing, but story-telling. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2021
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Thank you so much for this really nice review, Shirley, and the lovely compliment! The next part is rather different! lol. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from Cindy Warren
Oh, the suspense! I'm glad Grant understood why Gladys did what she did, but I want to see what happens when they come to arrest his mother and brother. I can't wait!
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2021
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Oh, the suspense! I'm glad Grant understood why Gladys did what she did, but I want to see what happens when they come to arrest his mother and brother. I can't wait!
Comment Written 03-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2021
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Thank you so very much for this lovely review, Cindy! I hope you enjoy the next part! Lol. Thanks, my friend! :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from alexisleech
Superb! I'm so glad Grant didn't take it out on Gladys. The poor woman had obviously been a dedicated member of staff for many years, and the fact that Grant appreciated what a difficult situation she'd been put in only proves what a decent guy he is.
I can't wait to find out how Grant's mother and brother react when they find out they've been conned by the call from Rapier. Hopefully they'll both be put away for years!
Alexis xxx
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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Superb! I'm so glad Grant didn't take it out on Gladys. The poor woman had obviously been a dedicated member of staff for many years, and the fact that Grant appreciated what a difficult situation she'd been put in only proves what a decent guy he is.
I can't wait to find out how Grant's mother and brother react when they find out they've been conned by the call from Rapier. Hopefully they'll both be put away for years!
Alexis xxx
Comment Written 02-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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Thank you so much, Alexis! I'm so pleased with the way everyone has liked the way Grant treated Gladys. The next part will be fun, but not for everyone!! Thanks so much for the six shiny stars, my friend. I really appreciate all your support. Love and warm hugs! :)) Sandra xxxx
Comment from muffinmama
I'm so good! LOL - I knew something was up with Gladys and that it wasn't her fault.
I like the quick pace of the story here as there are loose ends to tie up before the next crisis arises (Rapier).
Perfect end to this chapter!
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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I'm so good! LOL - I knew something was up with Gladys and that it wasn't her fault.
I like the quick pace of the story here as there are loose ends to tie up before the next crisis arises (Rapier).
Perfect end to this chapter!
Comment Written 02-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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I know, I had to smile when I read your last review, and knew you would when you read this part. It had to be Grant's mother who blackmailed her into doing it. Thank you so much, Ryma, for another of your lovely reviews, and for the golden sixth star. That was so kind of you. Keep that thought about the Rapier crisis on mind! lol. Warm hugs, dear friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Brilliant. Revenge will be sweeeet. Can't wait for Marilyn and Colin to get their comuppance. How many more chapters to go? Please give us a heads-up when the final one is imminent.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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Brilliant. Revenge will be sweeeet. Can't wait for Marilyn and Colin to get their comuppance. How many more chapters to go? Please give us a heads-up when the final one is imminent.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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Thank you, Liz! I think there will be two more parts, or possibly three. I'll pm you when it's the last one. :)) xxx
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
Sandra:
Well done, Max Rapier, well done. I just hope Grant has not rushed into his mother's home too far ahead of the police as I'm sure neither she nor Colin would hesitate to do him bodily harm. I'm sure he wants to see the look on their faces when he tells them Tania is alive.
jan
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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Sandra:
Well done, Max Rapier, well done. I just hope Grant has not rushed into his mother's home too far ahead of the police as I'm sure neither she nor Colin would hesitate to do him bodily harm. I'm sure he wants to see the look on their faces when he tells them Tania is alive.
jan
Comment Written 01-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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The police won't be far behind Grant, but he has time to put the wind up them! lol, Than you, Jan, for another lovely review. I'm delighted you're still enjoying the story. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from lyenochka
Great job with this post! So glad that things are wrapping up and that Grant's mother and half brother will face justice! I really liked that Grant provided for Gladys and his compassionate response to her forced betrayal of him.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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Great job with this post! So glad that things are wrapping up and that Grant's mother and half brother will face justice! I really liked that Grant provided for Gladys and his compassionate response to her forced betrayal of him.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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Grant is a nice guy really, just needed time to get his act together after all his betrayals. Next part will be fun! Thanks, Helen, for another lovely review. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from JudyE
What a place to leave us! I hope Grant doesn't get shot or worse although I'm not sure what 'worse' could be. lol
Well written as always. I do have a few suggestions:
That was a few years ago, so what could possibly have happened to cause you to leave like that? Did Janet die? But that wouldn't have had you leaving without notice. Well, you won't get your answer sitting here. Grant unclipped his seat belt and got out of the car. - the last sentence shouldn't be in italics.
Now the tears were streaming, Gladys blew her nose, and then, once she started talking, all her fear, stress and anger came away. - replace comma after 'streaming' with a period.
It's what anyone would have done; hell, I would have done it, for crying out loud! - replace comma after 'done' with a period.
'Oh! No, it weren't your fault, Mr Blake!' The very idea that he would blame himself was just too much for her. - I might have said 'for Gladys'
Grant looked at her, she had to be well into her sixties. 'You know you can have your job back, it's yours for the taking. - replace comma after 'her' with a period.
'My grandfather set up pensions for all our employees, Gladys, even before it became law to do so,' he told her, smiling, - typo at end - should be a period
'Oh, Mr Blake. What can I say? I didn't know! Are you sure? I'm a volunteer at the nursing home just so's I can be with my sister more. Are you really sure? I'll come in until you have someone else. Oh, Mr Blake, I've been that scared, I don't know what to say!'
Don't worry about the replacement, we can soon get that sorted. - replace comma after 'replacement' with a period.
'You were right, Lorna's office was bugged.' - replace comma after 'right' with a period. Somewhere near this point, I think you need to mention that Lorna is in the office too. Maybe 'Back at the office, Grant was met by Lorna and a grim-faced Reg.'
'It's no more than she deserves for what she'd done,'Lorna told him. - space needed before 'Lorna'
Best wishes
Judy
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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What a place to leave us! I hope Grant doesn't get shot or worse although I'm not sure what 'worse' could be. lol
Well written as always. I do have a few suggestions:
That was a few years ago, so what could possibly have happened to cause you to leave like that? Did Janet die? But that wouldn't have had you leaving without notice. Well, you won't get your answer sitting here. Grant unclipped his seat belt and got out of the car. - the last sentence shouldn't be in italics.
Now the tears were streaming, Gladys blew her nose, and then, once she started talking, all her fear, stress and anger came away. - replace comma after 'streaming' with a period.
It's what anyone would have done; hell, I would have done it, for crying out loud! - replace comma after 'done' with a period.
'Oh! No, it weren't your fault, Mr Blake!' The very idea that he would blame himself was just too much for her. - I might have said 'for Gladys'
Grant looked at her, she had to be well into her sixties. 'You know you can have your job back, it's yours for the taking. - replace comma after 'her' with a period.
'My grandfather set up pensions for all our employees, Gladys, even before it became law to do so,' he told her, smiling, - typo at end - should be a period
'Oh, Mr Blake. What can I say? I didn't know! Are you sure? I'm a volunteer at the nursing home just so's I can be with my sister more. Are you really sure? I'll come in until you have someone else. Oh, Mr Blake, I've been that scared, I don't know what to say!'
Don't worry about the replacement, we can soon get that sorted. - replace comma after 'replacement' with a period.
'You were right, Lorna's office was bugged.' - replace comma after 'right' with a period. Somewhere near this point, I think you need to mention that Lorna is in the office too. Maybe 'Back at the office, Grant was met by Lorna and a grim-faced Reg.'
'It's no more than she deserves for what she'd done,'Lorna told him. - space needed before 'Lorna'
Best wishes
Judy
Comment Written 01-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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Aw, thank you for all this, Judy, I've sorted them all out. I'm truly pleased you enjoyed this part! Next part it a fun one!! Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from royowen
I can't help feeling a little satisfied that both Colin and Marilyn will be parting the scene for a very long holiday in a resort for erstwhile criminals, I can picture mother being bullied by professional female thugs, heh heh. Beautifully written, isn't it nice how kind Grant was to Gladys, wow, 25 times her salary, I'm going to apply for employment as a cleaner there! Well done, blessings Roy
Query : Wasn't Colin Grant's half brother Sandra.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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I can't help feeling a little satisfied that both Colin and Marilyn will be parting the scene for a very long holiday in a resort for erstwhile criminals, I can picture mother being bullied by professional female thugs, heh heh. Beautifully written, isn't it nice how kind Grant was to Gladys, wow, 25 times her salary, I'm going to apply for employment as a cleaner there! Well done, blessings Roy
Query : Wasn't Colin Grant's half brother Sandra.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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Thank you, dear Roy. No, she has worked for Grant for 25 years, and will get 3 times her salary, if that was the case, I'd be working for him!! LOL Thank you my dear friend. I'm glad you liked this part. Warm hugs. Sandra xxx
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Me too
Comment from Ulla
This is a superb chapter, Sandra. It actually made me smile. It's so well written, and I would have liked to be a fly on the wall, when Grant walked into his mother's. You really bring forward the evil in those two persons. Now, I can't wait to see what is happening next. A big hug.Ulla xxxx
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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This is a superb chapter, Sandra. It actually made me smile. It's so well written, and I would have liked to be a fly on the wall, when Grant walked into his mother's. You really bring forward the evil in those two persons. Now, I can't wait to see what is happening next. A big hug.Ulla xxxx
Comment Written 01-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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Aw, thank you, Ulla, for this lovely review. I'm delighted you enjoyed how this part went with Gladys. Now to get the others! Thank you for the golden star, my friend. Warm hugs, Sandra xxxx
