The Writings of a Mouse
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "I Cry"Pieces of my Heart
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Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'I Cry ', is an exceptionally well-written and heart-wrenching piece. This talented poet's work was a privilege to read and review. Good luck with the contest. Please let me know how you get on?
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2022
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'I Cry ', is an exceptionally well-written and heart-wrenching piece. This talented poet's work was a privilege to read and review. Good luck with the contest. Please let me know how you get on?
Comment Written 26-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2022
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Thank you so much for your praise! I am speechless. Thank you so much! I will.
Ramona Agin, I'm delighted to read your work again.
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duchessofdrumborg I can?t wait to read yours! Thank you so much!
Comment from sue133
First, I am so sorry for the loss of your Mum. Your poem really spoke to me but in a different way. I am 71 and have a fairly young daughter of 31. She is not really settled and I pray she will be before I go. You emphasised the heartbreak she will feel.
I think you are an excellent poet who speaks from the heart, and your writing is very original. Keep on doing it.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2022
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First, I am so sorry for the loss of your Mum. Your poem really spoke to me but in a different way. I am 71 and have a fairly young daughter of 31. She is not really settled and I pray she will be before I go. You emphasised the heartbreak she will feel.
I think you are an excellent poet who speaks from the heart, and your writing is very original. Keep on doing it.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2022
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My heart goes out to you. I think it?s never enough time though. We must make the most of it while we can. Blessings to you and your daughter. Thank you for your praise and kind words of encouragement. I don?t consider myself a poet. But I do love to write. Bless you.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Until you neared the end, I had not given thought that they who lay dying was your mum but a boy-toy enjoyed and left behind only to find he meant more to you than what was happening at that moment.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2022
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Until you neared the end, I had not given thought that they who lay dying was your mum but a boy-toy enjoyed and left behind only to find he meant more to you than what was happening at that moment.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2022
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Mmm. No. No boy toy. My dear mum as you say. No one can compare. Thank you so much for the great review!
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yes, yes, the conclusion was clear but in the beginning, I was led differently.
Comment from Terrilou
This was such a poignant description of your Mom's loss. I know when you lose someone you love deeply, you remember every single thing that happened during that time. I love that you wrote this from your heart. Your pain shines through!
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2022
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This was such a poignant description of your Mom's loss. I know when you lose someone you love deeply, you remember every single thing that happened during that time. I love that you wrote this from your heart. Your pain shines through!
Comment Written 26-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2022
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Thank you so much for the great review and for the kind words. I still get choked up.
Comment from pome lover
that is very sad.
You expressed your devastation in your own personal way.
It is always sad to lose a parent - especially one you are very close to.
But it's good to let your feelings out in writing.
I hope your happy memories with her will help with your sadness.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2022
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that is very sad.
You expressed your devastation in your own personal way.
It is always sad to lose a parent - especially one you are very close to.
But it's good to let your feelings out in writing.
I hope your happy memories with her will help with your sadness.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2022
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Thank you Poem Lover. I am honored by your review and thank you for your kind words.
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you're most welcome.
Comment from Sally Carter
For some reason the system won't let me give you a 6. I have no idea why, and I'm sorry, because this moved me so deeply.
You say you are no poet. I disagree. I rarely write free form poetry because I feel useless at it and don't know what really marks good from poor. But this, whether it would or would not meet a "proper" reviewer's criteria, hit me very hard. I won't go into the details, but I am 72 and my worst nightmare is leaving this earth while my 40 year old daughter still needs me to help her through health issues.
I am very sorry for your loss - well, lossES - and hope you find peace soon. xx
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2022
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For some reason the system won't let me give you a 6. I have no idea why, and I'm sorry, because this moved me so deeply.
You say you are no poet. I disagree. I rarely write free form poetry because I feel useless at it and don't know what really marks good from poor. But this, whether it would or would not meet a "proper" reviewer's criteria, hit me very hard. I won't go into the details, but I am 72 and my worst nightmare is leaving this earth while my 40 year old daughter still needs me to help her through health issues.
I am very sorry for your loss - well, lossES - and hope you find peace soon. xx
Comment Written 26-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2022
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Dear Sally, thank you so much for your kindness and for you exceptional review.
Comment from The Journaler
This is a poem that expresses grief well. I can see that you loved your mother, and she loved you. It is one of the hardest losses we have to face in life. I still have not been able to write about my mother's death. Just too hard. After your tears have subsided, and they will, the good memories with her will bless you and comfort you.
Well written and expressed. I am sorry for your loss. And in many ways, you are still together..you may have lost her physically, but you still have all that she was to you. Hugs.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2022
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This is a poem that expresses grief well. I can see that you loved your mother, and she loved you. It is one of the hardest losses we have to face in life. I still have not been able to write about my mother's death. Just too hard. After your tears have subsided, and they will, the good memories with her will bless you and comfort you.
Well written and expressed. I am sorry for your loss. And in many ways, you are still together..you may have lost her physically, but you still have all that she was to you. Hugs.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2022
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Dear Journaler, thank you for your kindness and understanding and for your insight.
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You are welcome. Keep going.
Comment from Thatguypk
You don't have to be a poet to express such emotions, and putting them down on paper (print) can be so therapeutic. My heart aches for your sadness, but hopes that you don't punish yourself. It sounds to me that you were very full of love for your mother, and that you let her know that. Despite our best efforts, we can't prevent death, all we can do is hold on to the best memories of life, and be thankful that we had that time together. Your mother is at peace. If she could she would tell you:
"Do not fear that I have left you.
Close your eyes, and you will still see my smiling face.
Listen with your heart and you will still hear my happy voice.
Hold someone's hand, and know that you are also holding mine.
As it has always been, I am with you in every thought you think,
In every moment of your joys or sorrows.
When you smile, I shall smile.
When you sing, I shall sing,
For no darkness can extinguish the part of me
that has always been a part of you.
Fear not that you cannot hold me in your arms,
For I will feel no greater love than knowing
That you hold me in your thoughts and in your heart.
And In that warmth, I live forever now,
At Peace."
Sending you best and warmest wishes. Cry no more, xx
PK.
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reply by the author on 26-Jan-2022
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You don't have to be a poet to express such emotions, and putting them down on paper (print) can be so therapeutic. My heart aches for your sadness, but hopes that you don't punish yourself. It sounds to me that you were very full of love for your mother, and that you let her know that. Despite our best efforts, we can't prevent death, all we can do is hold on to the best memories of life, and be thankful that we had that time together. Your mother is at peace. If she could she would tell you:
"Do not fear that I have left you.
Close your eyes, and you will still see my smiling face.
Listen with your heart and you will still hear my happy voice.
Hold someone's hand, and know that you are also holding mine.
As it has always been, I am with you in every thought you think,
In every moment of your joys or sorrows.
When you smile, I shall smile.
When you sing, I shall sing,
For no darkness can extinguish the part of me
that has always been a part of you.
Fear not that you cannot hold me in your arms,
For I will feel no greater love than knowing
That you hold me in your thoughts and in your heart.
And In that warmth, I live forever now,
At Peace."
Sending you best and warmest wishes. Cry no more, xx
PK.
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Comment Written 26-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2022
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Dearest PK. Thank you and Bless you for your kindness and your beautiful, comforting words. I do know that my Mom knew how much I loved her. I just have to keep reminding myself of the many ways I showed her that before she died.
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Ramona Agin a wonderful Wednesday to you. I hope this finds you well. Let me first say, I'm sorry for your loss. I enjoyed your free form poem entry as someone who's been through quite a lot in my life, I can say that there is nothing like a good Cry, though most of us hate to cry, when it happen, it's just what we need. Anyway enough of my ramblings. good job and good luck in the contest!
fyi: my mother and I share the same birthday.......my father too but I haven't seen the A**hole in about 30 years so that's that.
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reply by the author on 26-Jan-2022
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Hello Ramona Agin a wonderful Wednesday to you. I hope this finds you well. Let me first say, I'm sorry for your loss. I enjoyed your free form poem entry as someone who's been through quite a lot in my life, I can say that there is nothing like a good Cry, though most of us hate to cry, when it happen, it's just what we need. Anyway enough of my ramblings. good job and good luck in the contest!
fyi: my mother and I share the same birthday.......my father too but I haven't seen the A**hole in about 30 years so that's that.
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Comment Written 26-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2022
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Good Morning 13thPoet! Thank you for the encouragement and the nice review! I am honored!
