Nick is Next
a 21-word spiritual story19 total reviews
Comment from judiverse
Excellent subject and artwork choice. I think you need something to indicate why Nick thinks heaven would be a nice change. Just a word or two should do it. Maybe he's in physical pain, is tired of being henpecked, whatever. There are words you eliminate if you add something to describe Nick's situation. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2022
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Excellent subject and artwork choice. I think you need something to indicate why Nick thinks heaven would be a nice change. Just a word or two should do it. Maybe he's in physical pain, is tired of being henpecked, whatever. There are words you eliminate if you add something to describe Nick's situation. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2022
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I agree. Thank you, Judi.
The angel embraced Nick's withered, pale body.
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Yes! That gives him a reason for welcoming heaven. judi
Comment from robyn corum
Bill,
Ohhhhh, yeah! The time comes and you not only find that you have made the Big Time but you are being held in the loving, gentle (I assume), reassuring arms of an angel. What could be better? (Well, ARRIVING, I suppose...)
Meets the requirements nicely!
Thanks and good luck!
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2022
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Bill,
Ohhhhh, yeah! The time comes and you not only find that you have made the Big Time but you are being held in the loving, gentle (I assume), reassuring arms of an angel. What could be better? (Well, ARRIVING, I suppose...)
Meets the requirements nicely!
Thanks and good luck!
Comment Written 08-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2022
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Thanks, Robyn
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is a very tongue-in-cheek take on the 21 word spiritual fiction writing prompt. To me it lacks a little in fluidity, even so. However, I wish you good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2022
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This is a very tongue-in-cheek take on the 21 word spiritual fiction writing prompt. To me it lacks a little in fluidity, even so. However, I wish you good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2022
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It is likely due to my dry humor.
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hahaha!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I agree with you, it would make a wonderful change after living on Earth the way it's been going these last few years. You've chosen those 21 words carefully and come up with a really impressive contest entry. Well done, and good luck! :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2022
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I agree with you, it would make a wonderful change after living on Earth the way it's been going these last few years. You've chosen those 21 words carefully and come up with a really impressive contest entry. Well done, and good luck! :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 08-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2022
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Thank you, Sandra.
Comment from Sally Law
To convey a clear spiritual message in this amount of words is amazing. You did a great job with this. I can see the image of the two, both heavenly and earthly. Sending along my very best to you today as always and my best wishes for the spiritual fiction contest, Sally XOs
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2022
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To convey a clear spiritual message in this amount of words is amazing. You did a great job with this. I can see the image of the two, both heavenly and earthly. Sending along my very best to you today as always and my best wishes for the spiritual fiction contest, Sally XOs
Comment Written 08-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2022
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Thank you, Sal.
Comment from Earl Corp
Kudos to you for writing a complete story in just 21 words. I don't think I could do that. I think the other one I read was about Heaven too. Very nice job. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2022
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Kudos to you for writing a complete story in just 21 words. I don't think I could do that. I think the other one I read was about Heaven too. Very nice job. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2022
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The requirement included using the words GOD, HEAVEN and ANGEL
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello BIll, I hope this review finds you well. Thank you for sharing your 21 word spiritual fiction with us. To tell a story in so few words is a challenge that I think you executed well. Good job!
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2022
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Hello BIll, I hope this review finds you well. Thank you for sharing your 21 word spiritual fiction with us. To tell a story in so few words is a challenge that I think you executed well. Good job!
Comment Written 08-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2022
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Thank you, 13.
Comment from BethShelby
This is excellent spiritual fiction in so few words. Seeing death as a welcome change to a better place is comforting. I love the textures in the painting you use to illustrate you short entry.
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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2022
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This is excellent spiritual fiction in so few words. Seeing death as a welcome change to a better place is comforting. I love the textures in the painting you use to illustrate you short entry.
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Comment Written 08-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2022
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Thank you, Beth.
Comment from BethShelby
This is excellent spiritual fiction in so few words. Seeing death as a welcome change to a better place is comforting. I love the textures in the painting you use to illustrate you short entry.
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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2022
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This is excellent spiritual fiction in so few words. Seeing death as a welcome change to a better place is comforting. I love the textures in the painting you use to illustrate you short entry.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2022
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Thank you, Beth.