Love never had Holes
A two line poem18 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Thanks for your notes as I was trying to understand "dripping." I guess in American English we call it "gravy." And I see the alliteration in "born on bread" but I would more likely say "raised on bread." Just letting you know what an American hears. You can keep it just as you have it as you kept all the rhyming rules and syllable count. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2022
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Thanks for your notes as I was trying to understand "dripping." I guess in American English we call it "gravy." And I see the alliteration in "born on bread" but I would more likely say "raised on bread." Just letting you know what an American hears. You can keep it just as you have it as you kept all the rhyming rules and syllable count. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 01-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2022
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Thank you very much, I changed to raised as I see what born on might refer too-bit like born on mars, us Aussies are a bit different at times, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
While Love filled us always
by kahpot
Beautifully written heartfelt poem about your childhood and your mother. It's very sweet. Good luck in the Two Line Poem contest.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2022
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While Love filled us always
by kahpot
Beautifully written heartfelt poem about your childhood and your mother. It's very sweet. Good luck in the Two Line Poem contest.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2022
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Thank you very much, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from John Ciarmello
I love this. While I have had bread and drippings it sounds like I might have missed the authenticity of the meal; having never had it as an actual meal, because that's all there was to eat.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2022
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I love this. While I have had bread and drippings it sounds like I might have missed the authenticity of the meal; having never had it as an actual meal, because that's all there was to eat.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2022
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Thank you for your wonderful comments, yes I can remember we had this for lunch as Mother tried to cook a hot meal for dinner most nights, school was very close so at lunch time home we came, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Kahpot,
I've never heard of bread and dripping before, but perhaps it's because of a different culture. Every parent I'm sure strives to provide for their family the best they can. Knowing that you are loved can overcome some of the meager meals. In many ways you were blessed beyond measure.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2022
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Hello Kahpot,
I've never heard of bread and dripping before, but perhaps it's because of a different culture. Every parent I'm sure strives to provide for their family the best they can. Knowing that you are loved can overcome some of the meager meals. In many ways you were blessed beyond measure.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 28-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2022
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thank you Tom, yes we were blessed, love filled our hearts, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is tender and shows the love that permeated the family when mother cooked and sewed for the children. Bread and dripping although I had not heard that phrase before I understood what it meant. The two-line poem speaks well of love within a family that has a meager existence but real love.
The artwork shows the round bread with gravy dripping from it and surrounding it.
This picture is suited well for this piece.
You are one of the fortunate ones whose love shines brightly throughout the home.
I am happy for you.
Have a lovely evening,
Jesse
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2022
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This is tender and shows the love that permeated the family when mother cooked and sewed for the children. Bread and dripping although I had not heard that phrase before I understood what it meant. The two-line poem speaks well of love within a family that has a meager existence but real love.
The artwork shows the round bread with gravy dripping from it and surrounding it.
This picture is suited well for this piece.
You are one of the fortunate ones whose love shines brightly throughout the home.
I am happy for you.
Have a lovely evening,
Jesse
Comment Written 28-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and comments, yes love was the one thing that overflowed in our house, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
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I am glad to hear it!
Jesse
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your essence poem is excellent in every respect--accurately written by the prompt standards and descriptive of a life lived frugally, resourcefully, making use of all available products.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2022
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Your essence poem is excellent in every respect--accurately written by the prompt standards and descriptive of a life lived frugally, resourcefully, making use of all available products.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much, yes though love filled our hesrts, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Miranda Langston
hmm... i really like the way you incorporated the old-world, archaic (no offense) version of DRIPPING into this unique 2 line poem. Very good entry into the contest. best of luck to you, my friend :)
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reply by the author on 28-Feb-2022
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hmm... i really like the way you incorporated the old-world, archaic (no offense) version of DRIPPING into this unique 2 line poem. Very good entry into the contest. best of luck to you, my friend :)
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Comment Written 28-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2022
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Thank you, yes it was quite common many years ago, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from country ranch writer
Back growing up my husband used to eat biscuits dipped in left over bacon drippings if he was still hungry he ate oranges from the orchard before his dad has came home and wore hand me down she modded for him to wear to school.she knitted him a wool sweater for winter
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reply by the author on 28-Feb-2022
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Back growing up my husband used to eat biscuits dipped in left over bacon drippings if he was still hungry he ate oranges from the orchard before his dad has came home and wore hand me down she modded for him to wear to school.she knitted him a wool sweater for winter
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Comment Written 28-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much for your wonderful review and understanding, as always very much appreciated****kahpot