When the Moon's at Play
A Roundabout Poem for Potlatch Poetry21 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Line 2 is repeated as Line 5 in each stanza? Except in the second stanza? A clever poem, I enjoyed the sentiment and the rhymes here, a fun post, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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Line 2 is repeated as Line 5 in each stanza? Except in the second stanza? A clever poem, I enjoyed the sentiment and the rhymes here, a fun post, love Dolly x
Comment Written 14-May-2022
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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Yup, I messed up in the second stanza. Nothing new for me. Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this fun poem with us. I enjoyed reading. This poem is very musical which was part of the fun in reading. Of course, the word choices were excellent.
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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Thank you for sharing this fun poem with us. I enjoyed reading. This poem is very musical which was part of the fun in reading. Of course, the word choices were excellent.
Comment Written 14-May-2022
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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Thank you. I appreciate your great comments.
Comment from Heather Knight
Most of all, this made me feel happy. I don't know if it was the rhythm or the topic (I love both).
Even though I don't understand poetry, I can appreciate your great ability.
I hope to remember what a roundabout poem is next time I see one. It's good to learn from other people.
Thanks for sharing your craft.
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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Most of all, this made me feel happy. I don't know if it was the rhythm or the topic (I love both).
Even though I don't understand poetry, I can appreciate your great ability.
I hope to remember what a roundabout poem is next time I see one. It's good to learn from other people.
Thanks for sharing your craft.
Comment Written 14-May-2022
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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Thank you for such a great review.
Comment from Pantygynt
I looked at this on the site and thought what a mess it seemed to be. I think you made a great effort at complying. My only query would be in the third stanza where your first line seems to be a 'd' rhyme 'caravan' wen it should be a 'c' rhyme with 'boots'. I do think the form is overcomplex for no apparent reason, but that is not your fault.
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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I looked at this on the site and thought what a mess it seemed to be. I think you made a great effort at complying. My only query would be in the third stanza where your first line seems to be a 'd' rhyme 'caravan' wen it should be a 'c' rhyme with 'boots'. I do think the form is overcomplex for no apparent reason, but that is not your fault.
Comment Written 14-May-2022
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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Ooops! I'll take a look. Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from Wendy G
I like the "Roundabout" format and it seems suited to your theme, which has an air of fantasy and wonder about it. You chose a lovely image to accompany your poem, which is written with skill and flair.
Wendy
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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I like the "Roundabout" format and it seems suited to your theme, which has an air of fantasy and wonder about it. You chose a lovely image to accompany your poem, which is written with skill and flair.
Wendy
Comment Written 14-May-2022
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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Thank you, Wendy I appreciate that.
Comment from Eliz T.
I enjoyed the fairy tale quality of this piece. Thanks for sharing this. I especially like the lines, "There's magic when the moon's at play
contentment's rife
no daily strife."
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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I enjoyed the fairy tale quality of this piece. Thanks for sharing this. I especially like the lines, "There's magic when the moon's at play
contentment's rife
no daily strife."
Comment Written 13-May-2022
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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Thank you. I'm glad you liked that part.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a very pretty poem with lots of lovely images and joy for the ones who live in such a place. Was the picture the inspiration or was the picture picked because it matched the poem? Both seem true. Very nice rhythm and rhyme.
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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This is a very pretty poem with lots of lovely images and joy for the ones who live in such a place. Was the picture the inspiration or was the picture picked because it matched the poem? Both seem true. Very nice rhythm and rhyme.
Comment Written 13-May-2022
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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The poem came first, then the picture. Thank you for a great review.
Comment from Erika Seshadri
What a fun and vivid poem! I enjoyed it immensely. It pulled my imagination right in and carried me along with the little story.
Well done.
Cheers,
Erika
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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What a fun and vivid poem! I enjoyed it immensely. It pulled my imagination right in and carried me along with the little story.
Well done.
Cheers,
Erika
Comment Written 13-May-2022
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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I'm so glad. Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Damommy: excellent rhymes, iambic beat and fun poem! Stars
************************* seems like a fun world you painted with
words. I like the lutes and flutes and happy land. flylikeaneagle
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Damommy: excellent rhymes, iambic beat and fun poem! Stars
************************* seems like a fun world you painted with
words. I like the lutes and flutes and happy land. flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 13-May-2022
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Thank you so much for this wonderful review. I'm happy you liked it.
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
It sounds like a group of night owls like myself. Working odd hours under the moonlight. I like the picture, wherever they are it looks peaceful. And people are busy helping one another. Thank you for sharing.
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reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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It sounds like a group of night owls like myself. Working odd hours under the moonlight. I like the picture, wherever they are it looks peaceful. And people are busy helping one another. Thank you for sharing.
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Comment Written 13-May-2022
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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I'm a night owl myself. Thanks for reviewing.
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You are welcome.
