Ode to My Yard Guard
Ronsardian Ode26 total reviews
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your Ronsardian Ode to that special tree is excellent in every respect--skillfully and creatively composed, vividly descriptive in its praise, and appealing in tone and message.
reply by the author on 31-May-2022
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Your Ronsardian Ode to that special tree is excellent in every respect--skillfully and creatively composed, vividly descriptive in its praise, and appealing in tone and message.
Comment Written 30-May-2022
reply by the author on 31-May-2022
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Thank you.
Comment from karenina
How interesting! I recently attended a library lecture on odes and seemed to recall the professor introducing the Keatsian Ode ~ indicating a set rhyme scheme! I could not put my hands on my notes tonight, but found this link:
http://www.poetrybase.info/forms/001/158
Which goes on to state:
"Keatsian Ode
Type:
Structure
Description:
The Keatsian or English Ode is written in iambic pentameter with three verses with rhyme scheme ababcdecde. Each verse has new rhymes, although it follows the same scheme, so technically: ababcdecde fgfghijhij klklmnomno for the whole schmeer. Another expert says it can be any number of verses, and since Keats himself wrote an eight-verser, we'll agree with him.
Attributed to:
John Keats
Origin:
English
Schematic:
Rhyme:
ababcdecde
fgfghijhij
klklmnomno
Meter: xX xX xX xX xX"
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I similarly found your Ronsardian Ode at this link:
https://poetscollective.org/poetryforms/ronsarian-ode/
Which, as you've noted, states:
The Ronsardian ode (named after Pierre de Ronsard 1524-1585) is the only kind of ode that specifies a particular rhyming scheme - ababccddc, with syllable counts of 10, 4, 10, 4, 10, 10, 4, 4, 8.
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What's a poet to do? (smile)
I suppose we shouldn't be surprised at conflicting statements on the web!
I certainly cannot refute one or the other...
Hence, I will simply state your ode is true to your stated rhyme scheme and written as an ode out to be, in a reverential, awe-like, reflective, etc.
As I read your first lovely stanza I am reminded of a mother, thinking back on a child's first years -- "I saw you first when you were young and small, and never thought you'd grow so big and tall."
How apt a metaphor for seeing our children from 'saplings' to mature adults who: "stood unwav'ring through it all.."
This is beautifully penned. I've read it through several times and love the syllable count pattern.
I'll let the Keatsian and Ronsardian scholars battle it out while I just say hats off to you!
Karenina
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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How interesting! I recently attended a library lecture on odes and seemed to recall the professor introducing the Keatsian Ode ~ indicating a set rhyme scheme! I could not put my hands on my notes tonight, but found this link:
http://www.poetrybase.info/forms/001/158
Which goes on to state:
"Keatsian Ode
Type:
Structure
Description:
The Keatsian or English Ode is written in iambic pentameter with three verses with rhyme scheme ababcdecde. Each verse has new rhymes, although it follows the same scheme, so technically: ababcdecde fgfghijhij klklmnomno for the whole schmeer. Another expert says it can be any number of verses, and since Keats himself wrote an eight-verser, we'll agree with him.
Attributed to:
John Keats
Origin:
English
Schematic:
Rhyme:
ababcdecde
fgfghijhij
klklmnomno
Meter: xX xX xX xX xX"
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
I similarly found your Ronsardian Ode at this link:
https://poetscollective.org/poetryforms/ronsarian-ode/
Which, as you've noted, states:
The Ronsardian ode (named after Pierre de Ronsard 1524-1585) is the only kind of ode that specifies a particular rhyming scheme - ababccddc, with syllable counts of 10, 4, 10, 4, 10, 10, 4, 4, 8.
~~~~~
What's a poet to do? (smile)
I suppose we shouldn't be surprised at conflicting statements on the web!
I certainly cannot refute one or the other...
Hence, I will simply state your ode is true to your stated rhyme scheme and written as an ode out to be, in a reverential, awe-like, reflective, etc.
As I read your first lovely stanza I am reminded of a mother, thinking back on a child's first years -- "I saw you first when you were young and small, and never thought you'd grow so big and tall."
How apt a metaphor for seeing our children from 'saplings' to mature adults who: "stood unwav'ring through it all.."
This is beautifully penned. I've read it through several times and love the syllable count pattern.
I'll let the Keatsian and Ronsardian scholars battle it out while I just say hats off to you!
Karenina
Comment Written 30-May-2022
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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Thank you for being so gracious.
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The ODE is a gracious form! Your rhyme scheme was impeccable, and it matters not one iota to me if there are one or twenty rhyme schemes. Yours was eloquently penned and oh so moving!
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Thank you!
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Yvonne,
I liked your ode to your tree. I'm left wondering what kind of tree it is though. I want to plant a Mountain Ash in our front yard. They grow to a good height but not too tall, and have lots of white flowers in the spring and orange berries in the fall. The birds seem to like the berries. I love trees. They are so helpful in so many ways to all kinds of life. Well done gal.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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Hello Yvonne,
I liked your ode to your tree. I'm left wondering what kind of tree it is though. I want to plant a Mountain Ash in our front yard. They grow to a good height but not too tall, and have lots of white flowers in the spring and orange berries in the fall. The birds seem to like the berries. I love trees. They are so helpful in so many ways to all kinds of life. Well done gal.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 30-May-2022
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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Thank you so much. It's a willow oak tree. It's shaped beautifully on its own. When I planted it, it was about a foot long and the size of my finger. I think you would be pleased with one like this.s
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Oh, I'm sure I would love one, but I don't think it would grow in this poor soil of South Central Alaska. The soil here is largely glacial till- lots of rounded rocks and somewhat sandy soil. It takes a major effort just to grow grass. The area where I live has an abundance of birch trees, plus some willows and alders and black spruce. The spruce trees have a problem with spruce bark beetles killing them.
Comment from aryr
What a delightful picture of your back yard, damommy. I really enjoyed the serenity of the area. Your words showed that there is power in them. It was definitely a lot of attraction there. Very well done, great job, very much enjoyed.
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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What a delightful picture of your back yard, damommy. I really enjoyed the serenity of the area. Your words showed that there is power in them. It was definitely a lot of attraction there. Very well done, great job, very much enjoyed.
Comment Written 30-May-2022
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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Thank you, Alie. I appreciate that.
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You are so very welcome, Yvonne.
Comment from Irish Rain
Just so pretty!!!
I love your beautiful tree, and this
is such a terrific ode to it!
AND...is that St. Francis?
If so...I have his twin in my yard,
AND the bench!
Loved this, and the picture,
blessings...
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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Just so pretty!!!
I love your beautiful tree, and this
is such a terrific ode to it!
AND...is that St. Francis?
If so...I have his twin in my yard,
AND the bench!
Loved this, and the picture,
blessings...
Comment Written 30-May-2022
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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So we have twin yards. Yes, that's St. Francis. I just repainted him last week. My mother gave him to me when I first moved here 30 year ago.
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I should probably repaint mine, he, and my Sacred Heart of Jesus are chipping. Mary's holding up...loved your poem!!!
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Thank you. I, too, have a Sacred Heart of Jesus. It needs redoing, but I think I'll seal it like it is. I've had it nearly all my life.
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Wow...wonderful!!!
Comment from LateBloomer
Hi Yvonne, I love this poem. I reminded me of a large tree that we planted when we first moved into our home. It grew so large and it towered over our house which I liked because it helped keep things cool in the summer. However, during hurricane Sandy, I sat scared, and I prayed. I asked Our Lord not to let that tree fall through the middle of our home, and I promised that with my next commission check, I would have the tree cut down. Well, we survived the night. The tree stood tall in place, and when I got my very next commission check, I, sadly, had the tree cut down for a grand price of $1800, and that was ten years ago.
I am so glad that your tree still brings you joy and brings beautiful birds your way. I especially liked:
It wasn't long before your mighty boughs
provided shades,
protecting pretty blossoms while they drowse
and hot air fades.
(Good imagery. I can see it.)
A poem of love and joy. Well done. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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Hi Yvonne, I love this poem. I reminded me of a large tree that we planted when we first moved into our home. It grew so large and it towered over our house which I liked because it helped keep things cool in the summer. However, during hurricane Sandy, I sat scared, and I prayed. I asked Our Lord not to let that tree fall through the middle of our home, and I promised that with my next commission check, I would have the tree cut down. Well, we survived the night. The tree stood tall in place, and when I got my very next commission check, I, sadly, had the tree cut down for a grand price of $1800, and that was ten years ago.
I am so glad that your tree still brings you joy and brings beautiful birds your way. I especially liked:
It wasn't long before your mighty boughs
provided shades,
protecting pretty blossoms while they drowse
and hot air fades.
(Good imagery. I can see it.)
A poem of love and joy. Well done. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
Comment Written 30-May-2022
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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Thank you, Margaret. That must have been hard cutting down that lovely tree.
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Yvonne, it was very hard to cut down that three, but it had to be done. The hurricane are getting worse. Also, it was one of my son's trees. We planted a tree for each of the children. Only one remains, the one that was planted for my youngest. Interestingly, he's the one who comes home the most. Maybe it's the tree calling him, and I thought it was my coffee. We always have coffee together when he comes. Hubby drinks tea. Xo. M
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I know. I understand. Everyone laughed at us when we built our dream home in the woods years ago. We hardly cut down enough trees to build the house. hahahaha
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Y, we love(d) all those trees, but not so much in our senior years. Ughh. Lots of work. M
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi damommy,
Very nice! I don't think I've read a Ronsardian ode before. Your individual in this case is a huge tree? I wonder what kind it is. The poem doesn't specify, except to say that it guards the yard, strong and unmoving, prevailing through wind and snow. Boughs provide shade, and nests for birds that sing each morning.
Thanks for teaching this poetic form, and sharing your talent. I must try it.
My favorite line,
"The birds come perch with praising melodies
in early morn, those feathered devotees."
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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Hi damommy,
Very nice! I don't think I've read a Ronsardian ode before. Your individual in this case is a huge tree? I wonder what kind it is. The poem doesn't specify, except to say that it guards the yard, strong and unmoving, prevailing through wind and snow. Boughs provide shade, and nests for birds that sing each morning.
Thanks for teaching this poetic form, and sharing your talent. I must try it.
My favorite line,
"The birds come perch with praising melodies
in early morn, those feathered devotees."
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 30-May-2022
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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Thank you so much for the lovely comments. It's a willow oak. When I planted it, it was about a foot long and the size of my finger.
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We have two monstrous Norway Maples in front of our house in Grand Bay. When I planted them, they were only 2 feet high. I sold the house to our oldest son and his wife.
Comment from judiverse
This is lovely. You really give this the feeling of an ode. Beautiful job of following the Ronsardian Ode format. A wonderful subject, too. Great story of you great shade tree. It's interesting that this was one you saw grow up. It made it through the rains and winter weather, and now it's a wonderful shade tree. You must have all sorts of memories about the tree.
judi
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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This is lovely. You really give this the feeling of an ode. Beautiful job of following the Ronsardian Ode format. A wonderful subject, too. Great story of you great shade tree. It's interesting that this was one you saw grow up. It made it through the rains and winter weather, and now it's a wonderful shade tree. You must have all sorts of memories about the tree.
judi
Comment Written 30-May-2022
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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When my uncle gave it to me, it was a foot long and the size of my finger. In no time, it seems, it grew into a perfectly shaped tree. We called it the bird tree since it was probably a bird that planted it. Thank you so much, Judi, for this wonderful review.
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You're welcome. That's a great story about your tree. judi
Comment from Pantygynt
You have some well writtwen rhymes here. I was particularly impressed with melodies/devotees. I thought that was most original. The form too is a good one with a great rhythm obtained by the variations in line length.
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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You have some well writtwen rhymes here. I was particularly impressed with melodies/devotees. I thought that was most original. The form too is a good one with a great rhythm obtained by the variations in line length.
Comment Written 30-May-2022
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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Oh, wow! Thank you, Jim, for this wonderful review and stars!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
You should have entered this into the ode contest, dear sister! It's fabulous! I love the rhyme scheme and it simply rolls over the tongue when read aloud. I love that picture of your garden, it must be heavenly sitting on your bench under the big shady tree. I really enjoyed this poem, my dearest sister across the pond! Love and hugs. Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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You should have entered this into the ode contest, dear sister! It's fabulous! I love the rhyme scheme and it simply rolls over the tongue when read aloud. I love that picture of your garden, it must be heavenly sitting on your bench under the big shady tree. I really enjoyed this poem, my dearest sister across the pond! Love and hugs. Sandra xxx
Comment Written 30-May-2022
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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Thank you so much for this wonderful, wonderful review. I appreciate it so much!